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Reviews for The second life

By : Murail
  • From zombiebait86 on September 29, 2008
    **blink Blink**wait confused....was he dead or.....**blink**....huh?
    J-chan
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  • From ANON - Karmegas on December 13, 2006
    Brava kare`nina. this is going well. Your english is definitely improving. congratulations on a new chapter too. It's great.
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  • From ANON - Karmegas on December 13, 2006
    Lol. I knew it! But wow! What a significant change in grammar and spelling. I love your writing style and the better grammar help me to appreciate it more. Kudos kid. i'm off to read the next chapter after I finish a another portion of a research assignment. so l8r.
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  • From ANON - Karmegas on December 13, 2006
    Is English your first language? Or is this just your first fic? It's pretty decent but the english and grammar need work. Getting a beta-reader is a good idea. I think i would have liked this a lot better had i npt just spend a week doing a group assignment by myself and the only group member that contributed had deplorable englisb writing skills which took me countless hours to decipher, correct and edit. it was infuriating. Your work is hardly as bad but it still grates my nerves a little. But the story itself is alright. i like it. please continue.
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  • From ANON - sglily on December 10, 2006
    You updated! ; ) I like this story... even if it is starting to get to the "scary" part! Ryou and Bakura are just too perfect together. I love how Bakura is able to make Ryou blush all the time... and that the dark one cannot keep his hands off his smaller lover. Ryou was crazy for denying Bakura another helping of lovin'! Silly little white-haired boy with the cherry lips! And now it would seem that Marik has made his move... Hurry, Bakura! Go find and save your other half!
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  • From ANON - Sekre on December 07, 2006
    Ahhhhh!!! Oh-em-gee! When everything was going good too.
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  • From ANON - crazysycochick on December 06, 2006
    oh poor ryou! baku's going to feel so bad when ryou doesn't return and he's going to be pissed. once again lovely chap! ryou and kura are so cute i hope bakura saves ryou! marik is evil and not sexy evil (in this story) like bakura.oh is ryou's sis going to have a cow. i wonder if baku is going to take her with him to save ryou! and do you all ready know exacly what's going to happen? oh i can't wait till the next chap! plez update soon! bakura's going to mutalate marik. oh one last thing are you going to fit malik in here anywhere?
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  • From ANON - kkk12 on December 05, 2006
    Oh god, Ryou has been kidnapped! I hope Bakura finds Ryou in time! Poor Am. too late to find where Merik was! I'll be reading updates so don't stop writing until the story is finished! Great story so far! ( and will always be! )
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  • From ANON - Tink on November 04, 2006
    Fantastic story. Really original. I think this is one of those rare stories with Amane alive that actually work. Very well written. I admitt the first chapter was a little hard to understand every now and again, but each chapter just gets better. I can't wait for you to update! ^_^
    And whats this thing with Marik hurting Ryou! I'm feeling like Ryou is right now, I want to know but at the same time I don't! XD

    Update really soon! ^_^
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  • From ANON - sglily on October 15, 2006
    I was glad that Armane didn't have a cow when she found Ryou and Bakura sleeping together and that it had been obvious that there was more to it than the two of them "just" sleeping! In fact, the way that she let both her friend and her brother find out that she knew what had gone down the previous night was rather funny! You managed to capture a very insecure and timid Ryou... embarrassed by his sister's blatant comment about him having sex and that Ryou could not meet Bakura's eye at the table. Perhaps what was even more classic Ryou behavior was when he had questioned Bakura's reasons for spending the night. Very sad that Ryou doubts himself so much that he feels he is only worth a pity fuck... but Bakura reassured him and all is well... Ah... and now we are going to find out more about the missing few years in Ryou's life and how Marik was involved... Nice chapter!
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  • From ANON - Sekre on October 15, 2006
    Ahhhh, Marik??!! -hides Ryou- Glad amane was good with it
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  • From ANON - crazysycochick on October 15, 2006
    marik? marik hurt poor, poor ryou? i love marik but for this story i don't like him anymore. i love the chap. and i was expecting it to be marik, i figured it would be pegasus or an oc wow i love this story. and how could ryou ever doubt that bakura loved him? well at least his sis was okay with it and bakura made it clear that he loved ryou. are you going to hook up aname with anyone? i love this story i hope you update really soon? i can't wait to see how this turns out! once again it sent shivers i love the way you write. this story is turning out to be a real work of art. plz cont! asap.
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  • From ANON - lokivsanubis on September 20, 2006
    can't wait to see what happens next. I also want to beat this "HIM" person with a bat until he dies for hurting Ryou but it's okay i'll just wait for an update instead.
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  • From ANON - sglily on September 19, 2006
    Oh, my... what a wonderful chapter to find waiting for me tonight! Once again, I have to comment on your style of writing - I just love it. It has a natural flow to it that is refreshing. Giving insights into Ryou's fears and feelings as he experienced them lets us know how deeply rooted his anguish is over his past - remembering bits and pieces, wanting to remember more and yet fearful of memories - and more than likely the reason for his nightmares. And there was Bakura to hold Ryou throughout the night! Chasing away those nightmares and worries... the proverbial knight in shining armor! The love scene between the two was beautiful. When written well, as yours was, physcial play of any sort between these two is just simply delicious! I continue to love the story and crave more... more I say! ; )
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  • From ANON - crazysycochick on September 19, 2006
    i love it. i can't stand the though of ryou going through so much pain. but as long as bakura is there i don't think theres anything that they can't get through. i really can't see ryou and bakura with anyone different. this a prim example of why i love tendershipping. there love it's... amazing, breath-taking, unbelieveable it sends a warm feeling up and down my spine. and this story renews that feeling thats why you have to keep it going.
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