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Reviews for Deliverance

By : thelostogg
  • From Cinder1013 on April 25, 2011
    Ha ha, I'm actually reading Trollope right now. I think his book is hysterical. Then again it has taken me almost a year to read half of it. I'll finish it some day and then hang it on my wall like a trophy head.

    Great story. I'm not certain how you're going to save Jou. I'm anxious to find out.
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  • From JOler on April 18, 2011
    Aside from the few spelling and grammar mistakes which I will attribute to the general chaos of any type of move ... This is an excellent chapter and I can't wait to see more. Hope you post this up on LD soon too.

    Hugs, mofaf1
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  • From yllimilly on April 15, 2011
    It's good that you are writing again and updating this story. Take care of yourself.
    -Milly
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  • From kominiarka on April 15, 2011
    Long chapters are awesome and it was definitely worth the waiting. I like when they can have intelligent conversation and it's nice they're both actually men, instead one of them (mostly Jou) being this whiny, crying... well, 'woman'. And no 'puppies' in this one, which is awesome. I enjoy it really much and can't wait for next update! :) I think you're actually my favourite author here, so I'm gonna wait patiently :D
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  • From AtomBunny on April 14, 2011
    OK, I won't ask, but in any case, it is good to see you back. I love this story and I love those cats. Jou and Seto both have so many issues and you write about them so well.
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  • From JOler on February 06, 2011
    Hugs hon, haven't heard from ya for a while or seen ya on ... just wondering how you're doing in general and in ficcage writing. pop on the site sometime and drop a line or maybe even opt for a chap in the RR. Love this ficcie as well as the others you are working on. Can't wait for a new chap in any of them.

    mofaf1
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  • From GudenMulle on December 18, 2010
    If your goal was to confuse the hell out of me, then congratulations, you passed the class. What is going on here?! XD. I really REALLY wanna know what Jou and Temari talked about!! Iiihh, I'm so curious. Jou must've had all the time in the world to read depressing fancy victorian peotry?
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  • From kominiarka on December 18, 2010
    New chapter! Made me happy.
    They're both really screwed up - just how I like them most. Can't wait to read more!
    Not a constructive review but I had to write something anyway.

    P.S. I've just discovered I can't play Powerball. Sadface.
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  • From AtomBunny on December 18, 2010
    Ooh... so there was more to that than met the eye... I wonder what kind of trouble is going to come up next? I love how twisted your stories are and I shall look forward to your next chapter. ^_^

    Also, I went and read that Powerball thing. LOL. I like their style. Then they mentioned that you shouldn't run with scissors so I had to go and set this up:

    http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v224/Atom_Bunny/SimsAgain/JoeyScissors.jpg

    Heh - maybe I should stick to playing sims. ^_^'


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  • From JOler on November 19, 2010
    Love the story. Poor Jou, Poor Seto. I think Seto probably needs to open up a bit to the councelor about what is going on ... dr. patient confidentiality should stop her from going to the police about either of them I think (not sure how that agreement is worded specifically but I know for confessionals it stops the one listening to the confession from being able to go to the cops in theory). Seto might need all the help he can get with Jou and she would probably be the one to know what type of medications could give some help or draw out a bit more specifically what the issue is. Seto just doesn't have the type of experience and by giving Jou medications - especially perscription type medications or illegal types - he could cause Jou more physical and mental damage than good. The OC seems pretty good and would be a good addition to the story, wonder if Seto might hire her on as a permanent member of his private staff just to help him and Jou both deal with issues they each have from the events in and before this story ... both will probably be the type of thing that requires long term observation and treatment. Having her around would also be a good thing for Jou, Seto, and Mokuba since she would be able to spot danger signs a bit earlier than the others would and be able to help with counteracting them in a quick and efficient manner; perhaps also offering suggestions that might be otherwise in-obvious to the others involved since she would be considered more of an objective observer once she realizes that her status as lover no longer applies between her and Seto. (assuming he isn't going to be in a threesome with her and Jou that is)
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  • From yllimilly on November 18, 2010
    Less ex-cop? I protest! I loved Fixation (stop pimping Grafitti, peoples! Fixation is her best story!) precisely because of the ex-cop! And I'm not sure you need the concrit... you've pretty much given us proof (more than plenty) that you know what you are doing. Trust yourself, woman!

    I love this story so far - was put off by the prologue at first but the following chapters more than mare up for it. I adore your grim dark moody cop gangster stories.

    Milly


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  • From Sempurna on November 18, 2010
    While I have to agree that this chapter wasn't quite like the others in that it's less forceful and more pensive, but it is also totally worth it for the light it sheds on why all this is happening. All stories have a chapter like this to recap a character's state of mind, and I love the fact that even at his fluffiest, your Kaiba is still a psycho (I could squee all over your Kaiba/Mokuba interactions, but I won't here ^_^). The appearance of the OC was slightly abrupt, I thought...a better way to ease her in would have been to mention her during Kaiba's hospital stay just to pique some curiosity, but this is just in my opinion, and I'm not worrying either--you write the better class of OCs :D.

    As for the voice, it is less striking in this chapter, and I suppose that can partly be blamed on lack of action. My only critique for this is that while there is information, it is perhaps too little. It's kind of odd seeing Kaiba jump from vengeance in the beginning to emotional wreck here. Knowing that Kaiba doesn't feel bad for much, what he must have done to Jo has to be pretty f-ing bad and that gravity doesn't come across quite as assertively as it could have, based on your writing in general (try your hand at flashbacks?). But what I do love is the sensation that Kaiba seems to be trying not to default to force when dealing with Jo, who is obviously not making it easy. It would be interesting to see where this takes them.
    Yeah, those are my two cents and I hope it helps. Thank you for writing, your works are wonderful!
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  • From MissAlandra on November 08, 2010
    OMG!! I actually missed two updates >.< Damned computer dying on me!!!
    I'm loving this. It actually took a nice turn after what I was imagining xD Please do continue~
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  • From GudenMulle on November 06, 2010
    "This is not healthy, Seto" = understatement of the year?!?! Seto is always incredibly fucked up in your fics, but I think this one takes the prize. He has not thought this through as well as he thinks he has. Jou scares me. Where is my blond bundle of joy? The blank look frightens me. Though Seto does scare me more..
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  • From AtomBunny on November 06, 2010
    I love your stories, they are all so... I don't know how to describe them... twisted?

    I'm not sure that's the best way to describe them, but I love them anyway.

    I look forward to reading how Seto can bring Jou around. (Assuming that he can...)
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