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Reviews for The Viking Brothers

By : ChibiMisu
  • From ANON - Camille on July 29, 2004
    Cool story! Can't wait for the next chapter! I think they need to get Pegasus first!

    Bakura comes home drunk singing with a group of drunk Bunnies!

    Ryo: BAKURAAAAAAA!!

    Bakura: Hey Ryo! I brought you home a whole shit load of bunnies! If Marik sits on one, you'll have more! They make great drinking buddies!


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  • From on July 29, 2004
    Please update this soon! I can't wait to see what happens next! *Glomp*
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  • From sakata on July 19, 2004
    What an interesting concept. Reminds me of my mass character AU [only mine was Fushigi Yugi cast in a medieval period]. One can certainly tell that you have a love of romance novels in the way you construct levels of lust and fluff among the various couples.
    But you could use a little creative crit as well. First off, I've noticed you have the tendency to copy yourself in descriptiveness. This is apparent ma in in the lemons, but also in certain characterizations. You also tend to misspell certain words ['strait' instead of 'straight' or 'bare' instead of 'bear', etc]. These are easily rectified if you looked into getting a beta reader, or rather someone who can preview and correct such errors that can distract the reader before you post it.
    You have the tendency to create character cliches between the seme and uke roles. Ryou is the only I c I can imagine acting to that level of femeninity only because of how he's been treated thus far combined with the characterization elements of his persona. Malik seems to be pretty level. But you've figuratively castrated Yugi and Otogi, especially Yugi.
    Your accuracy on certain elements from this time period are well-researched and thought out. But the anime cliches [sweatdropping, chibifying, etc] hardly belong in the Norse era. Also, the passage of time versus riesries sustained [both mental and physical] seems impossible. Rape is much more traumatic in real life, and a rapee would not be so easily trusting of his rapist [ie Ryou to Bakura]. Nor would Ryou be up and about easily the next day after his near-suicide.
    But overall, I would not have gotten this far in your fic [all the way to the latest chapter] if I wasn't enjoying myself and interested in how you would continue this.
    But above all, please contemplate looking into gettting a beta reader. That would help in protraying this elaborate story in a superior format and weaving a far richer world that others would be eager to enjoy. Because t are are quite a few readers with impeciable tastes that would snub your writing barely into the first chapter.
    Thank you. ^_^
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  • From ANON - PikaChan on July 18, 2004
    ...@_@ Oh. My. Ra. This is probably one of the best fanfics I've ever read... I like a good lemon ever now and then, but lemons with humor, drama, violence, an actual plot, AND the hot gay sex just... *goes off into happy fangirl land* I was up until 5 AM reading this thing, and I want mooooore ;_; UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! >.>
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  • From ANON - War-chan on July 17, 2004
    Just one word= MORE!!!! I want more damnit!!! Please, Please contue with this stoy!
    Your one of the very best YGO writers I know about! (and I know a lot!)
    LOVE THE STORY!!!!
    Good ploting, and good, very good lemons!
    I wish I could see a move like this one!
    So PLEASE contue. (note= my sp'ing is bad ^.^') ^___^!!!!
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  • From ANON - Dilandau\'s Best Slayer on July 17, 2004
    *tackleglomp* This fanfic is just....O_O *retackleglomp* You are Ra in disguise, you know? I've been reading this since last night and all of today! I couldn't SLEEP last night because I wanted to continue reading so badly! I woke up at TEN AM FOR CRIPE'S SAKES! *usually wakes up at 1:00PM* I think I like the Bakura x Ryou issue the best, with Marik and Malik's relationship following close behind. Damn...the sex in this is so hot. XD This fic HAS to be my all time favorite, EVER!

    Oh, and by the way...YOU DAMN WELL BETTER BE MAKING A SEQUEL!! *koff* Ahem. ^___^ Anyway, I'm going to go reread the first Marik/Malik lemon because it had me drooling. X3 Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Letainajup on July 17, 2004
    Poor Bakura, poor everyone! I'm so glad the fight's over...or is it? GREAT CHAPTER AGAIN! I'm so glad this is not the end, but it will be soo *sniff* A new story sounds great! Will it still be about the cha characters, just in a different story? I wouldn't mind a sequal either, but I know sometimes writers need a break and they want to write something new for a while ;p AS long as you keep writing, I'll keep reading, no matter what you do ;p Thanks!
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  • From ANON - Arainaina on July 16, 2004
    Very good chapter please write more soon. And I think you should make a sequel to this story.
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  • From ANON - White Nymph on July 15, 2004
    i think it depends how you end this weather or not you write a sequel, or something compl dif different. i do however think a sequel thats set a couple of years in the future would be good, but its entirly up to you. Keep up the good work
    White Nymph
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  • From ANON - SilverWing147 on July 14, 2004
    you should make a sequel cos this story is sooo good.

    ^_^CHEERIO^_^
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  • From ANON - OwaranaimonoAite on July 14, 2004
    Yay!!!!! Sequal!!!! Can't wait for the rest of chapchapters!!!
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  • From ANON - ^.^ on July 14, 2004
    YAY!!!! me so happy this isn't the end!!!! i think u should start planning and writing down the main ideas for the sequel, that way u'll know what u want and where u want to put it when u go to write it. it will also be much faster and u won't forget any good ideas that u may come up with along the way. ^.^
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  • From ANON - Red Dragon of Egypt on July 14, 2004
    RD:woot go malik teach those sobs a lesson they will never forget and looks like pegasas will finally get what he deserves now more then ever hehehe but god dam those bastards hurting joey and malik not to mention bakura but WOOT go ryou hehe nice shot to the head heheh dont thold old keith was expecting this not at all hehe well keep up the great work and UPDATE ^__^;; sry just this is a great story now that the evil of the land is being taken out kind of reminds me of LOTR u know hehe minus the giant dark domain hof tef tens of thousands of orcs and goblins and nasgul and of course hehe THE DARK LORD SAURAN though pegasas could be a fair prissy imitation of him hehe minus the ring of course well TTFN TA TA FOR NOW AND PLS FINISH YUR STORY
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  • From ANON - Zoe on July 14, 2004
    Sequel!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Shinigami24 on July 14, 2004
    *sighs into relief* Well at least Malik saved Yugi! *screams in rage* Why did you have to pull Joey in this?! Now he's going to have mental scars! And you had to go and piss Seto off! My Seto muse just read this and he is VERY MAD! Along with my Bakura muse...I knew it! I knew that Yami would be furious! And he, Kura and Marik bonded, well, Ri got a point, Yugi tamed Yami! He's the one who keeps Yami calm! Cuz I have the 1st 5 volumes of the manga, and Yami has a nasty streak! Not to mention a fetish for fires... *shudders* The horror, the horror! I see doom in the future! Peggy's gonna be very sorry, when Yami, Seto and Ri get their hands on himz ofz of what his goons did to Kura, Joey and Malik!
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