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Reviews for The Return

By : rayemars
  • From ANON - Alz-chan on September 01, 2003
    wow.
    This is well written. keep it up ne?

    Take care, Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - sliderkta on August 26, 2003
    Hello! I thought I should drop a line and tell you how much I like your story. It's really cool! And I wished some of your stuff was a of of the anime. My fave chapters are 5 & 6. This fic is a masterpiece. Keep up the good work! I can hardly wait till you reach the Battle City stuff! :)

    --Eagerly Awaiting the Continuation of This Fanfic
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  • From ANON - Jia Z. on August 25, 2003
    Ah! You finally updated rayemars-san. ^^ It's been so long...I thought you gave up on the fic. Anyways, though the last chapter was a little...confusing, it was stiloodloody good. ^^ Hope you update soon.
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  • From ANON - Saet— on December 08, -0001
    Hey there, I've been following this fic for a while, and I absolutely love it. It's a shame you don't have many more reviews for it. Seems like all the best fics get ignored that way. Maybe you should try writing only semi-coherently, throw away the plot, and bastardize the characters- that'll bring more reviews! (I'm joking! Don't look at me like that!)

    Anyway, here's a list of my favorite things in this fic: 1) The way you left the spirit with no name. I know his name is actually Bakura in Ancient Egypt, but I doubt he remembers that. 2) I like it that you only focus on a few characters, like Bakura and the spirit, and a bit of Tristan in the last chapter. It makes it so much easier to get in depth with such few characters than if you tried to make sure they were all there and represented somehow. 3) I don't know if it was your point, but I feel absolutely miserable after reading the latest chapters (in a good way!). Poor Bakura! It seems like he has no one left to turn to, what with his father not trusting him like that, and his "friends" not even noticing something's wrong. Jeez, his life sure does suck.

    Well, I do hope you won't give up writing this fic for lack of attention. I'okinoking forward to reading more, and I hope everything works out for Bakura in the end (though I know it won't). :)
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  • From ANON - Artemis on August 22, 2003
    You know, a lot of great writers are only recognized after they die. You could go for the whole posthumous
    worship and just croak? *is trying to be helpful* Anyway, you can tell me all you like that this story is not worth the time, but it’s things like this that make it worth reading:

    "For that bruise on your face?" Tristan asked coolly, not looking up from his textbook.

    Can we say perfect? The sentence is short, but not poetically short. It’s not filled with stupid adjectives or other meaningless stuff. You don’t need a lot of big words or long descriptions to paint the picture. You just do it, and that’s what makes you so good.

    Plus, I love how I could almost ‘see’ Tristan’s face. And I love the way Bakura is just SO evil. Tis wonderfulness.

    Until your next installment.

    ~Artemis Z.

    P.S. – Uh…Tristan doesn’t fool me. He wants Ryou. Crazy, kinky spirit and all. *winks*
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  • From ANON - Tri on August 21, 2003
    Woooowwww.....please more!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Jia on June 19, 2003
    WAI! I'm so happy you finally updated. I've been waiting for a really long time. Anyways, I hope you update soon. Oh, I wonder how long this is going to last. I once heard from a friend and he said that Ryou dies or something. Though Bakura lived. You know, when he transfered himself to Yugi's Puzzle.

    Anyways, update soon!

    Jia
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  • From ANON - Rhea on June 16, 2003
    Nice story! *claps* Can't believe I didn't see it before. You must keep going. I demand it.
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  • From ANON - TJ on May 08, 2003

    Wow!!!
    I'm deeply impressed.
    Possibly the best R/B I have ever had the honour of reading and definitely one of the best Yugioh stories out here.
    Although I'm all for happy endings; for this story I can pass if necessary.
    I like how we get both point of views and Your gradual, thorough development of the plot.

    Thank You!
    ... and write
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  • From ANON - DG on April 06, 2003
    *sigh* No happy ending, huh? I should be used to it by now, miss depressing author. Suslyusly, though, could you maybe perhaps go a little easier on your fans? You write so well we get quite attached to these characters you make your own, and it's hard on us to be constantly depressed at the end. Heh. I'll shut up now. --your lurking fan
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  • From ANON - Kamikakushi on April 05, 2003
    Hey there rayemars! ^^ You updated! Yes! It took you so long. I was waiting like forever. Anyways, this chapter was a little different thhat hat I expect 'cause I thought you would have seen the subbed version of the Battle City Arc, instead of watching the revolting dubbed version. A brilliant author such as yourself should really watch the subbed. The subbed of Battle City is much more interesting. Believe me, I own the DVD set. Well, hope you update soon!

    Kamikakushi a.k.a Jia Z.
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  • From Lupusdragon1 on April 05, 2003
    LD: So basically, you are mastering the art of Bull Shitting.
    Karen: Well, that was crass.
    LD: Hey, I am just paraphrasing.
    Karen: *rolls eyes at LD* The t yot you could do is say something nice about the story. Very few writers actually make the attempt to hold true to the series. I think it is comendible. The story is expressed very well.
    LD: Hey, I like it too. I just thought the comment at the end was amusing. I think you have the characters pegged, especially Yami Bakura, and he seems like a difficult one to figure out. Please update again as soon as possible!
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  • From ANON - kay on March 14, 2003
    ohhh i'm soo happy i'm reading this storry againg keep posting chapters
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  • From ANON - Jenny-fer on February 19, 2003
    WEEEE HEE HEE!!!!!! ^______________^ WAY AWESOME!!!!!!!! I SOOOOOOOO hope that you continue this soon!!!!! ^.^ WEEE HEE HEEE!!!! *prances off goin on about how much better this fic was from her own fics* WEEEE HEEEE HEE!!!! ^^
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  • From ANON - ... on February 17, 2003
    This is awesome. You must continue this story. It's not over yet, right?
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