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Reviews for One Way Street

By : Mellybean

From on May 19, 2003
I just sigup uup under the pen name bluesummers, I'll still post on mm.org, but I want there to be another site, if mm.org gives me trouble.
:)GRALNAK

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From ANON - Honda on May 18, 2003
... wow. That's all I can say. I loved the actual story part of it. ( less of the chara/author banter would be appreciated though...)
But that seems like it really could happen. I prefer Tristan/Joey myself, but I like most yaoi Tristan pairings. I want to see more! ^_^
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From ANON - animom on May 18, 2003
Quite quite good. You built things up slo and and obviously put a lot of effort into trying to keep it "real". The writing wasn't overdone (as is often the case in stories like this: Kaibafics bring mel melodrama.) You skillfully worked the "Tristan has a motorbike" fact into an solid story element. You captured emotional states quite well, and I like your handling of the rarely addressed issue of "when semes collide." (As someone who's put a lot of thought into uke!Seto for my own fics in process, i give a hearty nod to your implied psychology.) The end of chapteseemseemed pretty abrupt and a bit non sequiter, especially since previous chapters had ended so grally.lly.

Three story notes/suggestions, one medium, two small: first, I think Mokuba has a level of maturity that - while I entirely realize it's needed for the plot - just seems kinda wrong for a 12 year old. (But on the other hand, it's not like Seto's a realistic 16 year old either.) Next: when writing gets this good: drop the AN at the beginning of the story. Leave your warnings and disclaimers in, of course. If you really can't break yourself of the jokey nervous intro, at least put several blank lines between that and the story. Finally, - and this this is a language nazi pet peeve- men are brunets and blonds. Women are brunettes and blondes. it may look funny at first, but trust me, you'll get used to it.

I'll be interested to see, if you continue this, w you you go. (I do wish there was an "Author Alert" feature here lff.nff.net.)

So, is it pinky/8293's art you had in mind eh? if So, I'll bet I know the *exact* picture ...

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From ANON - bloody gem on May 18, 2003
very good...more?
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From ANON - gralnak on May 18, 2003
wow...........I didn't see that one coming...
:)GRALNAK
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From ANON - Neko Jounouchi aka Jams on May 17, 2003
Jams: Oh this is getting GOOD!
Seto Plushie: >.> You're kidding....
Neko Jounouchi: ::hides Seto Plushie's torch and pitchfork::
Jams: Ha ha Seto! Now you can't flame them!
Seto Plushie: >.
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From ANON - kay on May 17, 2003
aahhh this is perfect the characters are greatly portrayd ... i would have mahe setto be a little more dominate...a little in the begginig...hehe...this is greate...
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From Lupusdragon1 on May 17, 2003
Karen: I don't know who I hate more, Tristan or Seto... stupid proud control freaks!
LD: Damn it, damn it damn it. Stupid boys. I hate men!
Karen: Well, between Mokuba, Ryou and Yugi, we should be able to get Seto and Tristan back together.
LD: Humph. I am still mad at them. No cookies for the stupid boys. However, we give sugar cookies to YD and DD.
Karen: They are special cut-out sugar cookies that are decorated to look like the YGO cast!
LD: So if Seto and Tristan don't start to behave, you can bite off certain parts of the cookies in demonstration * smirks evilly *
Karen & LD: MUAHAHAHAHAHA
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From ANON - TheMysticalDragon on May 17, 2003
It's still the same Mystical Dragon.. just a diff email... i gotta fix my profile... but i do have one story up here... hope u read it

Ye Gods!!! Poor Tristian...That would be horrible to have that happen

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From ANON - bakurasgirl on May 17, 2003
OHMYGODOHMYGOD!!!!! That was the hottest thing under the sun...*Bakura walks in the room with Ryou in tight pants* *drools* Well...ok....that was hot,too. But yours is hotter!!!!!

Bakurasgirl: Ryou, give Dragondreamer a seto and tristEn plushie!
Ryou: *runs up to Dragondreamer* From me and bakurasgirl. Hope you like!
Bakurasgirl: Bakura, do your special dance for Dragondreamer.
Bakura: *sighs and sings swinging his hips side to side* IF you like my body and you think I'm sexy, baby come on let me know...
Bakurasgirl: Isn't he the cutest dancer?
Bakura: Bakurasgirl, you are SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO dead after this!!! I'm gonna send you to the shadow realm!
Bakurasgirl: Calm down, Ring-boy. You'll be fine. Geeze. Ok. Fine. Yami!
*Yami comes in dressed in tight pants singing like Bakura*
Bakurasgirl: I can't help it if I love bishies singing!!!!!!

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From ANON - EVIL MJ on May 15, 2003
Decided to read this one , when I should have been working (as always, but when you work all the time I guess that's how it goes). Wanted to let everyone know that my dear bestest buddy Dragondreamer wrote this little number by herself, I wouldn't have the time to work on two stories.....unless properly recompensated, and I don't think the things that I want are available. What do you think YD, could you fedex one of the men that I am lusting after over here....make it worth your while...Hopefully, no one is monitoring this transmission.....
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From Kay on May 14, 2003
i love this story..... there could be a very interesting plot unraveling...
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From ANON - KEYSHA on May 14, 2003
Mmmm I wanna be partnered with Seto and Tristan...hell I just wanna watch! *gets swatted by husband* At least they're on the right track in admitting their feelings for one another....great chappie!!! Please add more soon!!! *hands them plushies of Seto and Tristan*
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on May 14, 2003
GO SETO X TRISTAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! mmmmm......meat.
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From ANON - gralnak on May 13, 2003
NEED MORE!!!
MUST READ MORE!!!
SOOOOOO GOOD!!!
:)GRALNAK
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