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By : tsutsuji

From sweetciel on April 19, 2007
Pure magic! Although it's heart wenching to see kaiba so frail :( I still luv ya ^_^
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From Itavita on March 30, 2007
*squeals in delight* I'm so glad I checked this fic~! I've been waiting so long for the next chapters that I actually forgot to keep coming back to see if it updated. ^^;;

...Wow, that sounds a lot like all of my stories, too. *blush* I need to get my ass in gear and update. ;_;

*huggles* I can't wait to see what happens with Jou and Seto. I hope Seto forgives Jou for putting out so easily for Seth. D:

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From ANON - Vejiita4eva on February 21, 2007
It's only now occured to me that Seth is, actually, kind of a slut. Just a bit XP

HOLY CRAP what's going to happen?? I am, on the one hand, ecstatic that you haven't given up on writing this series (singlehandedly responsible for drawing me back into YGO fandom) and realize I should probably just be grateful for that. Only now I'm quite on the edge of my seat and anxious about these cropping up developments in older relationships that I only -thought- I had a handle on. Though it is nice to see the separate parties of the story finally together, I've got to BEG another chapter out of you ^_^; Great work, and hope to see more soon!

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From ANON - Mishiko_Shinsei on November 04, 2006
I started reading this story expecting something completely different. This is REALLY good! I love stories with strong characters and that I can't figure out what's happening very easily. You've definately peaked my interest and I'll keep reading until the end! Thanks for sharing!
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From ANON - Eien no Ai on November 03, 2006
OMG!! I can't BELIEVE I could miss the previous chapter, and I'm SO sorry for that! *falls to the knees and begs for forgiveness* It's just that I found both of the latest updates a little too late, apparently... But I think it's highly unfair that you didn't get any reviews before! Really, it was such an interesting chapter! Well, let's make up for at least my inability to do things on time now, shall we? ^_~

Beware of a crazed two-in-one review! ; )

I'm STILL so afraid for poor Ryou and Seto! Someone should definitely do something - anything - fast before it's too late for them. No matter how much Ryou was trying to fight his increasing exhaustion - not wanting to stay in bed, still attempting to figure things out and to find out what's necessary to do, talking to people whenever he had the chance - it is clear that determination can only get one so far when the enemy is some unknown and undoubtedly powerful force. But still, it was sweet how he was trying to comfort/advise Seth and I believe that eventually there was some understanding between these two. Anyway, it sure seems Ryou is a bit better off than Seto just because of Bakura's efforts to save him! I wonder if he actually felt the spirit later when he fainted again... I certainly hope so! Ryou deserves his Bakura, that's it!
And on we go to the confrontations... First there are Seth and the ancient Bakura - a pretty volatile mix, right? Well, it was correct in the summary - they DID manage a civil conversation at first! As long as they were united by concern for their suffering doubles, it looked like they really were willing to cooperate. It was interesting to hear them telling the story of their unexpected appearance at the present day - and obviously there still are many mysteries surrounding all that! But really, Thief Bakura and Seth surely do have a troubled past together. Anyway, I guess Seth indeed screwed up the moment he accused Bakura of 'plundering' Ryou since that just had to lead to discussing his own until then secret stay with Jonouchi. I honestly can't blame Bakura for losing his nerve! Although that caused even more angst for both Seth and 'Kura right until the last part of chapter 13...
On top of it all, Jonouchi's day seriously got a lot worse at one point as well. Although it seems kind of fair for Kaiba to know what occured before Jonouchi confessed to him, I can't help but feel sorry for the ones involved in this! Still, the tension in that scene was great. It was quite brave of Seth to explain his experience with Jonouchi to Kaiba like that. But damn, Kaiba can be scary when he wants to be! First he was all quiet and disturbing and then his self-control just snapped. He could have killed himself or something! But I hope that when Seto wakes up again, he and Jonouchi will make up somehow - after all, Jonouchi is as concerned about him as he would be even if they had never argued in the first place.
And the end of the latest chapter is here - wow! I adore the scene where Bakura just shows up out of nowhere and 'attacks' Seth right away! So, are they finally being honest with each other? ^_^ Well, I guess there will be more on that in the next update...and I'm really looking forward to that! Keep up the wonderful work! I'll be waiting...

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From ANON - Anon on October 12, 2006
It took me a while but I finally got done reading it all! 8D

...I think my computer hates aff.net's reviewing dingie because every word I write seems to make my cursor freeze! it's trying to sabotage you into not getting your review! ;O Anyways, so I started out being a little sketchy because there's alot of Seto/Katsuya but then I read on and it was alot better than I thought! They were really in-character and nothing was too overly dramatic between them.
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From ANON - Lennith on October 12, 2006
Mwuahaha, I'm so happy to find this jewel amongst the empty gin-bottles! Such a marvelous fic! You must must must continue because I'm hooked. Love everything, your plot, your characterization and your smut, heehee. Keep up the fantastic work~
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From ANON - Eien no Ai on October 11, 2006
Hey there, dear! I'm sooo happy to see a new update to this story - I missed it already! And I got some special thanks, too...I'm flattered! *blush* Anyway, I hope you like my latest humble review.

I was so afraid for poor Ryou in this chapter! And it looks like my worry about him will continue...his condition is really getting worse and worse. Still, I enjoyed the parts that were written somehow from his perspective - especially the fact that he wasn't thinking about himself much and tried to concentrate on Bakura or on their current situation instead was very interesting. (Well, who would blame him for wanting to remember how Bakura looked walking around the town in black leather? ^_^ Damn it, I'm getting off topic!) I noticed that whenever Ryou was feeling concerned, it was about someone else - mostly about both of the Bakuras! But he must have been seriously drained if he couldn't even walk and had to make 'Kura use the bus with him instead, right? Again, poor sweetie. I can imagine he would be embarrassed if he practically fainted there and Bakura even had to help him get off the bus - although it gave me some sort of sadistic pleasure to see that they shocked some biased old woman in the process! What a shame that the creature didn't understand what Bakura told her...now THAT would have been a scene!
What more...of course I'm not forgetting about The Dream! That was pretty frightening and persuasive, actually. The beginning would make quite a lot of sense if he was dreaming about Bakura's ancient past, but after he became Ryou again there was a drastic change in the dream. That part was scary, what with those creeping shadows and the way Bakura acted - as if he wasn't himself at all. And then Ryou got sucked into the sand! Nasty... *shudders* I wonder what's up with that - after all, Ryou isn't the first person who's had some strange dreams in the story. Maybe the solution for those dangerous problems could be found in them...
Then we have the part when Ryou was trying to convince the security to let him and 'Kura into Seto's house - in ancient Egyptian! Oh, my...he really must have been confused not to notice he wasn't speaking in his native language anymore. And when he did, it was too late. I guess he was lucky that Bakura was with him for the entire time, because otherwise he would have accomplished nothing in such a weakened state. (Even though our favorite thief made him rather giddy on several occasions...and if not him, the 'new' Bakura did the job just as well!) Anyway, I was relieved when the guards finally left both Ryou and 'Kura alone and took them to Seto. About damn TIME! Honestly, those guards should KNOW when they are unnecessary!
Heh, Bakura definitely got his share of modern technology in this chapter, didn't he? That's another interesting element of this story - how someone who had experienced life thousands of years ago would react to being thrown into our present without any knowledge of it. And I have to say he's doing quite well...most of the time, at least! ^_~
And Jonouchi kept watching over Kaiba! Well, wouldn't it be weird if he didn't? ^_^ Apparently, it did some good for Seto! It also seems that Jonouchi's on the right track to figure some things out...but that still remains to be seen, I suppose. Yay for a smart Jonouchi! I'd like to see him depicted this way more often.

OMG! Putting such a cliffhanger at the end of the chapter was purely EVIL! You'd better write more! I'll be waiting patiently...and how I'm looking forward to find out what happens next! Keep up the great work - and remember, this story deserves FIVE stars! Anyway, until next time! Much love...
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From ANON - SisterErotica on October 09, 2006
I love this, this is a really good fic and very well written. But please revise it and clarify Yugi thing ok, You can refer to dark Yugi as Yami and little Yugi as just plain Yugi. I got a little confused with the Yugi and Dark Yugi thing. I look forward to more!
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From ANON - lain-trigger01 on October 07, 2006
wow! I wish Jou didn't let go of Seto. If Seth and Thief King Bakura are from an alternate dimension and they are now on the same plane as Seto and Bakura . . . well they can't both exist at the same time. One will fade away or die . . . which is like what is happening to them right now I think. That's why the Seto can speak in ancient egyptian, and since Jou's soul is tied to his in this plane . . . so can Jou. I think Jou is acting like an anchor for Seto, and that their condition gets worse from exposure to their other selves from the alternate dimension. Hmm, wonder what happened to Jumonke? Thanks for posting this great piece of fanfiction and keep up the goowd work! ;)
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From ANON - ChibiRinni on October 06, 2006
OMG! I am sooooo glad you finally updated! I thought this story died! T.T BUT IT LIVES!! Thank you sooo much for picking it back up and for the great chapters I have been reading. I await the next chapter! I only hope Seth and Bakura don't kill each other! XD See you soon! BYEE!!

~ChibiRinni ^.~
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From ANON - Sekre on October 05, 2006
Wow, interesting story you got here. It is definitely different then the other AE fics around here (though they are sadly sparse). I loooove Jou/Seto and Ryou/Baku, my favorite YGO couples, so naturally I looove your fic. The lemon between Seth and Jou was hot and I love how Bakura was being all protective of Ryou when he possessed his body and talked to theif bak. I'm not really a fan of Set/Bak, but I'm still curious about their relationship, whether it will work out or if Jun (ahh can't spell the name) became a bigger part of Seth's heart (of course being the big SJ fan, I'm hoping the latter is true, but I do feel sad, as Theif Bakura is obviously hurting over this - And if he can't have Ryou, I want him to find some love =3) Anyway, great job...I was expecting a fic written by a 14 year old or something when I saw it had only four stars...somebody really under rated you because fic deserves five! hope you find time to update - Until then, will await the next chapter.
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From ANON - Iyasu on July 07, 2006
Wow... I love this story, even if it is an AU. It's the best AU I've ever read! *sniff* Come on! Seto can't die! I dun want to lose my Seto/Jou pairing! Ryou can't either! Update soon!
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From nocturne on May 09, 2006
oh, wow. this is really good! X33 I love it! ^----^ looking forward to more. XD
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From ANON - Eien no Ai on April 27, 2006
Interesting chapter! Looks like more plot twists await us, judging from Jonouchi's dream sequence, but also some hints are appearing! Let's say this story is always intriguing and often full of suspense - that dream Jou had just freaked me out, you know!
And the description of Kaiba's condition was great - I could almost feel how terribly weak he has become and how he struggled to keep that illness of his in check, at least for a while. Very very well done ^_^ Though Seth must have made him feel even worse in a way with all those perceptive comments! (Then again, if Kaiba sees only those memories of Jumoke and is worried about Jonouchi's life because of them, he's being quite obvious!) I nearly expected Seth to say what had happened in the meantime without Kaiba's knowledge, but now I think it will be better if Jonouchi is going to tell him about it. And after all, it doesn't matter that much at the moment, or does it? Because Kaiba finally admitted his feelings not only to himself, but also to the person involved. (Poor Jou, he thought he would confess first ^_^;). Anyway, that scene was really sweet - the kissing, hugging, talking - all wonderful! Though it had a sad background since Kaiba is practically at the verge of death.
Ahh! I'm so eager to see what happens next!

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