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By : Aten

From ANON - Kathryn Coll on May 04, 2005
//It certainly doesn’t feel like nothing. Why do I feel Ishtar’s hands down my pants?//
Dude, seriously freaky if Marik's hands down Bakura's pants is considered 'nothing'.

“One moment, cutie, I’ll check.”
*laughs* And Marik thinks he's got "it"

The scene between Robbie and Aten is interesting... the lyrics were good.

“I can’t get enough of you tonight. I want to make love to you, Ryou….again.”
Sheesh, horny much? Yeah, yeah... the answer to that would be: Horny, always. *smirks*

“Come for me, Ryou….Give it up for me, baby….come on. Come for me.”
*cackles* and the comment for that would be: bossy, lots! 'Do this, do that, gimme gimme gimme'

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From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 29, 2005
I cannot let the word spread of my true nature.
*snickers* too late, we already know you're an ass!!!

“All I smell is car exhaust and hot air.”
*laughs* yeah, that hot air is yami

//How come everything with the Ishtars begins and ends with the nutsack????! If it’s not their Rod their obsessed with, it’s that! Ishtars….can’t live with them, can’t have hot sex without them.//
*falls over laughing*

“Stipper Anzu? Isis, I just ate.”
Damn, now I wish I could get another beer!

“THE MILLENNIUM TRIDENT!”
*giggles* Lookee! It's the giant Sennen Fork!

His body was covered with sweat which began to creep down his body.
Ooooo sweaty 'Kura!

The white-haired yami looked up and saw the Trident had pierced the pharaoh’s chest....
Bakura narrowed his eyes and twisted the Millennium Trident, tearing inside the pharaoh.
WOOHOO *cheers and claps*

Under different circumstances, it would have been funny to see Maxine piled on top of Malik in a heap.
*laughs* Malik's gonna be so bummed he "slept" through that!!

"I impaled him with the Millennium Trident.”
*cackles* he stabbed him with the Sennen Fork. OHHHHHHHHHHH He forked the Pharaoh!! *falls over howling*

‘Kill if you must…..but kill with a reason.’
*laughs* typical

“Or what are you going to do? Frisk me like a naughty little girl that I am?”
*laughs*

Marik snickered. “Can I take my pants off, too?”
Yes, yes, yes!!

Miranda shook her head. “Shirt will be fine. Trust me.”
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW dang

"Don’t make me imagine my mom kissing my dad THERE!”
*laughs* like that's a bad thing?

Bubble gum-scented bubbles? Uhm.... ooookayyyyy. Although, I guess I can see that causing Marik to want to, umm, blow something. *smirks*

The hikari closed his eyes awaiting the inevitable contact……
Marik falling into the tub? *snickers*
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From ANON - Redconvoy on April 27, 2005
Good chapter. I see a bit of growing in this in the part of the author. Keep up the good work.

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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 27, 2005
*GASP!* You! You're so BAD!!! You cut it off right at the nummy lemony part!!! All in all, I'd have to say that was one of the sexiest chapters so far yet. Shirtless bishies...are sexy. OOH! and Bubble Gum bathy stuff RULES! I steal it from the kids all the time. LOL
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 25, 2005
Shame on you for the cliffie! That's not nice! Malik can't burn to death! No, no, no...Yami can, but not Malik. Oh, and thanks for the lovely mental picture you sent of Anzu doing her wiggly thing, that was the highlight of my day. *snicker*
Great chapter! Keep it coming! *hugs*

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From ANON - Star on April 21, 2005
Hey I need to ask a question i should no alreeay probaly so please forgive me :) Is Anibus go for good or will he be back and has Bakura gotten over his fear of Yami or is he all talk I hope he can fight yami off suscfuly this time . Ii hope Yami will be good agian somedday and sees the errors of his ways . and what is this obbsision with Bbakura yami has if he hateees him why doees he want to own him. and i no i have a sick mind but if he wher mine i would decrate him and gosd and take care of him like a prized hors not beat him to dath now thats out of lmy sessstem an you probaly think im wierd ffby now and im jusst catching up on reviewing beccause ii haaave been busy . good storie and keepp up the good work . star.
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From ANON - Neko on April 21, 2005
Hey I love your stories and i've finallyy cougth uuup with alof them Ii have atwo queestioons though one int the sssame reeealy why doees bakura think he can stand achance agaisnt yami whe he alwayse ends up with the short end of the stick . I mean he has been captured a few times and and was beaten and raped and he also belongs to yami or did he forgeet that. also Will yami try to reclam his slave or bakrua agian for keeps again i hhope not because i love bakura . im just wondering where your going with thiss. thanks .
neko
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From Pussycat on April 18, 2005
“Too much clothing. Off now!”
Sheesh, impatient much? *g*

A subsequent laugh filled the backyard. “ROBBIE’S GOT LADIES’ UNDERWEAR IN HIS HAIR!”
*starts humming 'walking 'round in women's underwear*

“Today has nothing to do with gentle.”
*laughs* A proper theme for Mondays

Robbie sighed. “Oh…..Crap-olla. What the heck is she doing to him to make Aten react like this?”
*falls over laughing* Umm, my first guess would be: having sex. *nods* My second guess would be: screwing. Third guess: making the beast with two backs. *cackles* Think I've guessed right yet?

"Poor Umi’s not going to be able to walk for a month.”
*cackles* He'll walk, just with a limp and a big grin!

wow, cliffhanger. Figures. *smirks*
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 17, 2005
If that doesn't get Aria pregnant, damn, I don't know what will. Poor Umi...poor Aten...poor Robbie. (Undies on Robbie's head! LMAO! Poor kid...I feel bad for laughing, but it's funny!)
It would be so funny if Marik found a way to reverse the curse and have it affect that damn Pharaoh the same way it's affecting Aria.
Malik is cool. Hands down, he's cool. He just went to bed....while the house was shaking. LMAO! (I would have thrown condoms at them and told them to keep the noise down. *snicker*)
I hope they catch the Pharaoh before he gets to Isis, or they at least hurt him some how. If not, well, that's bad. Yams needs to be stopped. He's too mean!! (Maybe he's like Sampson; shave his head and all his powers are gone...YEAH! BALD PHARAOH! *snort*)
Enjoy your vacation, deary!
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From ANON - anubiset on April 16, 2005
He passed out, just like you said he would. I hope you do another Robbie/Aten soon. I get the whole mental holiday. I`m on one, in a couple of weeks that is. I just finished up redoing my links section in my group and and now have to do the other group, where I will be putting up a couple of links for some info websites that I found. I`m on overload and ready to blow. I need to sit back and do another one-shot. They always relax me. Oh well.
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From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 13, 2005
Sorry, I know it was a serious chapter... but I just couldn't help snickering at weird parts. Yup, parts aren't the only thing that's weird. La

“Now she will be enticed to mate with Umi. She can’t fight my power."
*snerk* yami viagra....

"Don’t you enjoy being in the arms of a living god?”
*laughs* I think given the choice he'd rather be with a dead god...

“That’s the last time today I am falling on my ass!”
*starts line to make sure he falls on his ass tomorrow*

The insect attempted to step on Bakura, slamming its claws around him.
Okay, turn about is fair play: bug steps on man. *snerks*

“But…it’s two in the afternoon.”
I love it when guys say stuff like this!
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 13, 2005
Holy crap, that Yami sure has a good right hook! Ka-Bam! One punch- Ryou down! Poor Ryou..he's gonna feel that one in the one morning...Owe.
How cute, Bakura named his dagger 'Gorgeous'. *giggles* I like it!
Uh....Aria honey? Umi's not a trampoline. Take it easy on the boy! ::dies laughing::
Enjoy your vacation, hun! You deserve it!! (You'll still duel me though, right? *giggles*)
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From ANON - elusive_dreamer on April 11, 2005
hmm...i think the pacing of the last two chapters were quite fast for my liking, although i'm really happy that you considered the idea of including Ryou in Yami's revenge. However, i was really hoping that Ryou's inclusion in his revenge would be some kind of psychological and emotional warfare against the Itemris and Ishtars, and not because Yami hated him for giving birth to both Aria and Aten or "making" Yugi turn against the pharaoh (like striking on the enemy's vulnerable yet "innocent" spot; by innocent, i meant someone who didn't have anything against the pharaoh in the first place---since the pharaoh was one of Ryou's friends in the beginning). I really was worried when you left a note hinting that there would be a possible lemon between Ryou and Yami, and was then deeply relieved when you decided not to push through^_^In my opinion, it would be better if you make Yami execute all of his plans first, leaving all of his enemies totally helpless (emotionally, psychologically, and physically) against him before claiming his "trophy,"a YamixRyou lemon maybe...?you decide("---A sword in the gut is not enough, he has to twist it a little...---")
About the mystery guy, I hope it's not Ryou's father (I really hate him for treating his son and grandson like that! He's a total scumbag!) but if it's him...I guess Ryou and Aten's in for another torture of a lifetime huh?What else...oh yeah, you haven't answered my question regarding Diabound...(pouts)I'm sorry if i'm really persistent about this, but when i was watching the episodes wherein he fought Yami Yugi and Yami Marik in batteship arena, i really find it unfair for Bakura to duel, with Dark Necrofear as his trump card, against both yamis who hold egyptian god cards. Don't get me wrong, i think his occult deck is really powerful (not to mention creepy) but when you wrote about Aria's Nightmare Dragon, I just thought that giving Bakura Diabound to control in your story would even out power among the yamis. If you haven't checked on Diabound, I highly recommend Missq's site (Bakura's Nightmare). Please comment on this, okay?
Lastly, just some questions that are bothering me regarding everyone's past lives in ancient egypt. First is about Seto and Ryou's relationship back when Ryou was Rayna. If Aria was Seth's wife, then what is Rayna's relationship with Seth? And who's Bakura's real love interest back then? Was it Rayna or Marik?Where was Rayna when Aten and Aria fought Yami in a duel? And finally, where was Rayna when Bakura died(or was he executed?)? See you next chappie!^_^

Note: Hmm...of Yami kissing Ryou, does this hint of him having a thing for the hikari in the future?

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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 10, 2005
I would have left this review last night, but there was a certain (darling) chibi feeding my dueling prowess...*squishes Robbie* Think I should give the Jackal deck another go? *grin*
Wow, I wonder if Ryou will be able to fight Yami's mind control spell! I *really* hope so. Hopefully being around a light again will make old Yams a iddy-biddy bit nicer too. He's sure changed over the years...*sigh*
I loved how Bakura threw Malik in a bush to hide him and than stood there whistling, that was too funny! I'll have to keep that in mind for the next time I'm trying to help a friend shake the fuzz. *snicker*
I loved Marik kicking the ever-living shit out of Barnes... I can't wait until he and Bakura have their magic back, --Barnes is so fucking dead.
Niiiice start to a honeymoon! Jacuzzi sex rocks! *grin*

Super chappie! Wednesday is going to come so slow....
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From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 09, 2005
“I’ve forgotten what a Light tastes like. It’s been so long since I have had the essence of a Light flow through me.”
Uhhhh, someone's been watching too much Star Wars porn... *smirks*

“Okay, what about Chibi Moneybags…"
*snerks* Cuuuuute Wonder how he'll take to being called that....

kill Anzu…bludgeon her with something blunt…..stab her….impale her on a wooden spike.
sounds like a good beginning. Frankly, I say drug Barnes' brat and have him wake up with her.
....Married, in Vegas.

the two squealing girls ran to Bakura and clung to his legs tightly.
“Up, pwease!”
The thief picked the boy up and held him in his arms
*cackles* He's gonna have fun moving with all of them stuck to him like styrofoam with static cling!!

“He looks at fire wike da way my mommy wooks at my daddy!”
*falls over laughing* outta da mouths of babes....

“Yes…and stop calling me that!”
Well that answers my question as to how Mokuba likes being called Chibi Moneybags. *G*

“How *slam* does *slam* it *slam* feel? *slam*”
*waits to see if head opens like a pinata* Awwwww dang, 'Kura stopped him. I was sooo hoping to see it go pop.

*shudders* Only Joey would like snails. That's just nashtay. I don't care how much garlic you put on them, they're still the slimy things that go crunch between your toes when you step on them. BLEAH!

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