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By : Aten
  • From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 08, 2005
    okay, let's try this again. Only this time, awake.... Sorry about the blank review. I'm sure that I really do have something to say. After all, I'm babbling now aren't I?

    Yami looked into the vision before him.
    Loookeeeeee, peeping Yami!

    “Bakura belongs to me, Mobius. He is mine for eternity. His body should be mine. His soul should be mine. "
    Selfish much?

    Marik stepped over the two kissing boys laying on the living room floor. “Guys, you’re in the way of traffic.”
    LOL hell of a roadblock

    "You never know when you’ll need your Rod,”
    *snickers* true, true

    “It looks like it’s going to ‘moo’ and walk off the table. "
    's not meatloaf, it's steak tartar...

    Marik crossed his legs and folded his arms. ‘That’s my boy!’
    Dude, who knew he could strut sitting down. Tsk, he's got a cookie fixation....

    “You’re sweet when you’re not being an ass.”
    Marik folded his arms. “I resent that.”
    Nooo you mean "I represent that" *snerks*

    Malik-poo, boobies? May I just say: EW

    yamixryou lemon? Again with the ew. can't he just stay a peeping twit and play with himself?
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  • From MarikIshtar77 on April 07, 2005
    HAHA! Yami slipped it to Anzu! That's so gross! (Yet totally a riot! Too funny!!!) I hope he catches something from her, that would be like the icing on the cake. *snicker*
    Now we get to see how good Bakura is at getting away without the use of shadow magic, should be interesting.
    Yami/Ryou lemon? Even though it sounds hot, I'm still a little scared. Hmm...
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  • From ANON - Sar on April 06, 2005
    Hey I like this storie it getiing better as it goes. a ryou and yami yooai that would be intereeestiiing that wouuuld mean yami has gotten to almost eveeryoone willing or nnot . Ihope you don't kill Ryou off. I like how you worded the when Yami said Bakura sis his does that meeean he will try to ccclaim him agian that might be intereestiing if you did. thans keep up the good writing
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  • From ANON - anubiset on April 06, 2005
    As I said to you before. Yami/Ryou ewwww. But, it will help with the sequel as you said. So, get on with it.

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  • From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on April 04, 2005
    -Bakura and Marik jumped into the Well and landed on their asses. Marik winced and rubbed his butt.
    “Can’t we put some pillows on the grass here or something? How come jumping into paradise hurts? You would think that there’d be no pain here.”

    *LMFAO! Awww...poor Marik! I can't believe he didn't asked Bakura to kiss it for him! *snicker*

    -Marik stopped shoveling. “Yami wouldn’t sink so low as to use Commoner’s Magic….no offense, Itemri.”
    “None taken…..I’ll beat you later for that comment.”

    *wOOT! Can we watch?






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  • From ANON - elusive_dreamer on April 04, 2005
    hey! i'm sorry i wasn't able to review the chapter before this, it seems my server is having problems. Anyway, i think this chapter is really sad, poor Aria...still, i believe you did a great job in writing how Aria reacted to the whole situation, it really portrayed your characterization of her. This chapter also touched me in many ways, for instance, the scene wherein Bakura was scared out of his wits upon seeing his daughter about to jump into the underworld, as commented by Marik. It goes to show that even a tough and violent Yami like Bakura can show a very soft and weak side whenever a loved one is concerned. Another scene that touched me is when Aria seeked solace and comfort on her brother's side. This scene, i believe, showed that sometimes, there are still some things that only a family member can provide for us.
    Although, a scene i must comment on is of that regarding Rhea and Marik. In this chapter, she told Marik that he could count on her to take care of Aten when his time comes, therefore, granting that Marik can come to the underworld anytime he wants, doesn't that mean that reviving Aten once he had died won't be necessary since both father and son can meet each other? (This is in regards with Odion's warning)
    Another interesting scene is the one wherein you introduced a mystery character who resides in the shadow realm. Will this character be involved on Yami's plot of revenge or will he be another villain more powerful and dangerous than the pharaoh?
    I hope that you could give us readers more information regarding this character on the next chapters.
    You have included flashbacks of Seto and Aria's past life in egypt everytime they encounter a familiar situation, does this mean that he and Aria will be involved in a romantic relationship later on? (i really hope not, but if this is a part of your story then so be it)
    Lastly, i would like to ask if there would be one or two blood lust "moments" involving the Yamis and their husbands on your future chapters. i was just reading on some of your past stories the other day when i read this scene wherein Bakura tried to suppress his blood lust urges until Ryou got out of their room to avoid hurting him. I think i'm kind of missing scenes like those, because believe it or not, i find them romantic in a way...(sorry for my weird taste of romance)
    I guess that's all for now, see you next chapter!

    Note: by the way, have you looked up already on diabound? if so, is there a chance that you would include him on your future stories? please comment on this, thank you^_^
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  • From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 03, 2005
    "I’ll beat you later for that comment.”
    Hopefully on Seto's piano again?

    A black flying fortress hovered in the sky.
    Ohhhhhh cooool!

    Bakura saw a black portal on the wall. Aria had a bad habit of forgetting to close her portals.
    *giggles* not commenting about leaving things open. Sorry..

    Bakura gasped. ‘She wouldn’t….go there….would she?’
    *smirks* wanna make a bet??

    Bakura grinned devilishly and grabbed between Marik’s legs. “You mean here?”
    *falls over laughing* Stick-shift dragon!

    “Ra….go! Itemri….get your hands away from my crotch! You’re unbelievable!”
    Whoa... who'd a thunk that Marik would actually object to Bakura playing with his rod. *blinks innocently*

    Marik winced and rubbed his butt.
    “Can’t we put some pillows on the grass here or something? How come jumping into paradise hurts? You would think that there’d be no pain here.”
    *cackles madly* and yet Bakura doesn't offer to kiss it better...


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  • From ANON - Draza on April 02, 2005
    Poor poor aria. I have a question...how did Kailani get AIDS? (small typo in your story-you put SIDS inteads of AIDS) How did she get it? Because if she was born with it, that means that Aria has it too!
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  • From ANON - Kathryn Coll on April 01, 2005
    Suddenly he found himself tackled to the ground by Aten.
    Cool! Action Movie Star Aten....

    The weapons fired and Marik fell backwards onto the ground.
    You know, I'm mad at you for shooting Marik. Now who's gonna crack jokes about his rod? *pouts*

    “FIREPOWER!” the pyromaniac cried out as he threw the lit stick of dynamite towards the car racing towards Jay.
    Oooooooooo I want firepower like that! *laughs*

    Seto ran for Jaimen and held his son. “Jaimen, say something! Say something to daddy! Please don’t be dead!”
    *taps foot* you know... he better be okay or I may just have to throw sharp objects at you!

    “Asher! You’ve been shot in the wrist!”
    “Oh,” the man said calmly. “I was wondering why the burn felt so good.”
    *snickers and sings* "Burns so good. Come on baby, make it burn so good."

    "Does it feel any different to you?”
    *cackles* At least Seto didn't ask that when Joey had a handfull of CEO weiner...

    She burst in on her sleeping parents. “MOMMY, KAILANI’S NOT BREATHING!”
    *snarls* You had to stick me with an even more evil cliffhanger. Hmpf. you booger snot.
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  • From ANON - Draza on March 30, 2005
    Kailani!!! U wish she didn't have to die!!! *cries* she was so cute!!!!!! Poor Jaimen...but i'm glade he'll be alright. What about Jay and Karl? Are they alright?
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  • From ANON - UkeToSetosSeme on March 30, 2005
    I know I haven'r reviewed in awhile. I have been busy with school and other things. *hugs the Seto plushie* Thanks! iI love it! I swear, you almost had me crying throughout this chappie, and it takes alot to make me cry. I can't believe all this happened. *sighs* But I guess with all the homophobes living in the city, there's not much that can be done, huh? I am so glad that Jaimen is okay. If you killed him off I would have been so upset. Now...I am upset with the cliffie. Please let Lanie be okay!! I don't want Aria to be hurt.
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  • From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on March 30, 2005
    Now that's a hell of a wedding day! One that won't be forgotten...by anybody...ever!
    Lots of violence, people shot, many dead, and even more injured. I bet it makes world news headlines!
    Oooh...BAD! Lani! Yami needs such a brutal ass kicking for putting that curse on Aria..it's so unfair!
    Great chapter! Chaos and lemons are such a good thing when shaken, not stirred.

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  • From ANON - Kathryn Coll on March 26, 2005
    “Did you try pushing the ‘On’ button?”
    *smirks* was it plugged in??

    “Aww…it’s an albino dragon!” Aten said with a smile.
    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

    “Are you obsessed about your Rod?”
    *cackles* but what an object to obsess about....

    Donny sat with Alice and his four children in a pew. “Asher, you be a good boy and I’ll give you a pack of matches.”
    Asher sat in the pew silent and still. “Yes, Donny.”
    *laughs*

    Ivy and Lily turned their basket of flowers upside down at the front of the altar and skipped to the pew where their father sat.
    LOL what, they didn't dump any on each other??

    Donny reached for the revolver in his pocket and Alice slapped his hand.
    “No, dear.”
    *howls* Love this....

    Marik leaned over to Aten. “You can go, Aten. We’ll wait for you. Traffic’s going to be a real bitch getting out of here----OW!”
    Malik slapped Marik on the back of the head. “This is a church! No cursing!”
    *laughs* Nice smack there...

    Aten snickered. “Preparation is fun.”
    Robbie groaned as he hobbled beside Aten. “You’re just like your dad…and that’s scary.”
    and Marik missed the opportunity to strut....

    Robbie playfully slapped Aten’s arm. “I take that back…you’re worse than your dad.”
    *laughs* Hopefully Marik never finds that out. He'll have to change his behavior to compete!

    Xiao-Shen and Ceres turned towards the gate. “What’s that noise?”
    figures, you'd stick me with a cliffhanger!
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  • From ANON - UkeToSetosSeme on March 26, 2005
    OMG!!! I can't believe the Blue-Eyes and Red-Eyes mated!!! That is just so adorable!!! That was such a great idea of yours. Finally, Seto and Joey are married. They're such a good couple...even though I wish it were me and Seto...but that's just my unhealthy obsession with Seto talking. I can't wait for you to update! I hope that loud noise isn't just a sign of a disaster weaiting to happen.
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  • From ANON - Draza on March 26, 2005
    *grabs all the chibis and holds them behind her* stay behind me chibis!!! this could get UGLY!!! Promise me that nobody is gonna die...or be disabled...or go insane...again....please? I'll give you more cookies...? And YAY!! for Aten and Robbie for finding a priest to do their ceremony!!! I'm glade that they did.
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