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Reviews for Blackwater Indiscretions

By : zehlyah

From ANON - Lexi on September 17, 2012
So, that was great. It was really interesting to see how each couple interacts with each other. My faves were of course klepto and cross shipping because for some reason, Yuugi, little innocent Yuugi needs someone who doesn't treat him like glass all the time. Both of those scene were great as were the scenes with Marik/Ryou, Ryou/Yami and Bakura/Malik because they're either a bit out of their depth or they get exactly what they're looking for. It was noted in the second to last chapter that was updated that there would be more and I would really love it if you updated it because it really is a great story.
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From AidaLily on June 26, 2011
Damn. This is hot. I only wish there was more of it, but its been about five years so I am not expecting anymore of it.

Now for that annoying bit of feedback some writer's hate. I didn't mind how it was written or the sometimes OOCness. In fact I absolutely loved the reaction to Marik's apartment lol. His seemed like the nicest place in my opinion. Damn what I would do to be in between Malik and Marik... or Malik and Ryou... or... anyway I am getting off topic XD.

Ok. I must say my favorite lemon had to be... *drumroll* Marik and Yugi. That one was both hot and it made me wish that they were a couple in the fic. It was literally that fantastic to see them like that. Their whole thing even with Marik's getting Yugi somewhat drunk it was absolute perfection. Which is weird, because my fav yugioh couple is Bakura/Yugi, but that is because i like to play or write Yugi as darker than people think. I really enjoyed the Marik and Yugi one. Seeing more of them would have been great. They just seemed so compatible.

Now on the train of compatibility, the second one that was good had to be the Bakura/Malik one. They fit nicely though it was a bit of a let down. Nice lemon. I loved the lemon. lol. However, they seemed too much to be compatible. The same spark of anger, the submissiveness Malik showed and everything while lovely to read, wasn't as capturing as the Marik and Yugi lemon.

Yami and Ryou... well with them it sort of made the sense of them being a loving couple as if Ryou had a horrible past and only abusive lover that he didn't love and wanted to escape from. Once again it was sweet, but at the same time it felt like the chemistry was stemming from some horrible secret and not a bet to find who was the best in bed. I half expected one of them to start crying during the sex.

~Day Two~

I don't have a favorite lemon for this day though I do in fact like all the lemons.

Marik/Ryou. Now this one did show a bit more of those sweet flirtations that I absolutely adore. The foodplay was nice as well and even the actual action was pretty good. However, even though they aren't dating obviously, it had that 'let me give my friend a complimentary blow job' feel to it. Hot, but at the same time 'well thats over lets go play some video games, order pizza, and reorganize medieval weapons' feel to it.

Bakura/Yugi. Now as I stated before, I love this pairing. I honestly do and this was definitely the best lemon of day two. I loved the intimidation tactics though Yugi was a bit too innocent, it was still pretty nice. I like how they seemed to mesh well no as well as you did Marik/Yugi but pretty close. (like 8 and 12 but close enough).

Yami/Malik... Well I expected Malik to take Yami. Malik had more of a dominate type approach to it all and honestly I couldn't see Yami being on top with him. Though this chapter made me wonder a bit how on earth Yugi could ever be uke. I did like it though and it was nice to see one of the hikari's dominating a Yami and thus for enjoyable to read.

~Day Three~

They all got back together, but I couldn't help thinking of the couples that could have been.

Marik/Malik - Malik should be careful what he wishes for and Marik's insults that he had thrown at him. It was a pretty hot scene though it did almost come off as rape and not just physical either. It was of course consensual, but at the same time it felt like I could feel Malik's breaking with each thing that Marik did or said.

Bakura/Ryou - Now I liked their little homecoming. Mainly because Ryou showed even more of a jealous side to him. Something that while being a bit more bold with Yami and Malik, I didn't think I'd see when it came to him and Bakura. That was a very pretty lemon and the love declarations beforehand were like sweet icing on a cake... and no not the one from Marik's house. lol.

Yami/Yugi - It felt weird to me. I like Yugi's more assertive approach. I love it. Yami just seemed really confused and still rather calm. In fact I feel like he had more fun with Ryou than Yugi. Still they are pretty hot together so it works beautifully.

~Closing Statements on this overly long thing called a review~

My favorite lemon after all of that was most definitely ... Marik/Yugi. That chemistry seemed so real I could easily imagine it.

I think they should all switch partners permanently reading this.

Marik/Yugi - It feels right when you read it. Everything with them makes me crave reading more and more of them together. I am now hoping I can find something like this with those two. Well where Marik isn't half of a psychotic serial killing barely able to think normally asshole and Yugi.

Bakura/Malik - This also feels right and even though they seem too compatible it fits beautifully. Malik knows what to expect if he asks Bakura to hurt him. He had no idea what he got himself into with Marik and yet he says he is his lover. You can't be someone's lover if you don't even fully know them.

Yami/Ryou - Honestly, I could see them ending up together and both happy. Yami would never make him feel insecure about anything. It just seemed like a good fit and a romance novel should anyone ever try to write a story like that for them.

Well that is the end of my overly long review. XD. Also if you want to respond to the review or something my fanfiction only email is moonlightvampiress22 (at) yahoo (dot) com.

I enjoyed reading it. *waves*
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From egyptiancatgoddess on March 01, 2010
So. Fucking. Hot. *puts ice cubes against her neck* Damn! Where's the next chapter?????
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From tinkletimekelly on August 24, 2007
No mater how many times I read this,I love it more and more. I absolutely love the way you wrote Marik/Yugi, through out. I'd say Marik would be the clear winner. Buut I'd really love to see how you would end this can you please write more,more,more...................................
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From vivarose on November 14, 2006
this is an interesting competition to say the least.
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From ANON - kkk12 on November 13, 2006
That was AMAZING! I've never read a story before that all it was all about sex!, plus some one finaly did the Y&H mix! Please add more chaps!
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From ANON - MinuetLove on November 09, 2006
Wonderful story! Each chapter was enjoyable and unique!
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From ANON - Tink on November 03, 2006
*screams* You have to write more! I've actually read the first few chapters with the 'swap' ness ages ago, I only found the new ones today. I really liked the BxR one, yes, even with the slight angst. Um.. the MxM one was, different. I really really want to know what will happen next with them. Silly Malik, now they're both hurt. *sigh* I hate that you left it there btw. That was evil.
They were all great actually. They should just have one massive orgy next LOL XD
Keep updating ^_^
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From ANON - Chitoko Kanzaki on October 30, 2006
Marik wins, hands and pants down. He's just that awsomoe. *nodnod*

Oh yeah, I'll give you a proper review of each chapther in a bout a day or to

-this is Kanzaki, out! ^_~
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From ANON - tinkle time kelly on October 30, 2006
My,my,you're alive. I was pleasently surprise to find this chapter(10) among the newly dated stuff. I really like this fic and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you're going with it. Though,what would really,really,make this reader pleased/happy would be a chapter added to "The Path of Vengence". You left it at a cliff hanger (chapter 31) for a very long,long,long,time. Are you going to continue it? I begging(And I DON'T BEG,often/or easily)you for at least one more chapter,to end it. Sooner rather than later,please,please,pretty please. Thanks in advance.
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From ANON - evilsadisticbutterfly on October 29, 2006
this story is just AMAZING.
amazing sex, amazing storyline...

PERFECTION!!!

Update before i go crazy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - ayachan on October 28, 2006
woah! interesting story! yami/yugi seem to be all right and so does bakura/ryou.. kind of.. i can't wait to see how marik/malik work out their problems ^^
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From Wicabeth on October 28, 2006
*sighs in satisfaction* I was so afraid you had left us! But now, I love how these ecounters seem to have changed most of them for the better. I can't waith to see what else you have in store for us, but I have to say that I LOVED Yami and Yugi's (and Ryou and Bakura's) reuniting lemon. *purrrrrrrrs*
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From ANON - Kouseketra on October 28, 2006
OMG these chapters were SIZZLIN' Loving it. Is there more? If there is, I can't wait! Awesome work!
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From ANON - Lady Laran on October 28, 2006
*bounces* You updated! YAY!!! I was so excited to see this updated. This was a great chapter. It's good to see that Yugi came away with more confidence.
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