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Reviews for WAIT FOR YOU FOREVER (A.K.A. SLEEPLESS II)

By : nixwilliams
  • From ANON - whitesakura on March 15, 2005
    Disjointed? I call Mokuba's stream of consciousness *real*. I'm very impressed with how you've been writing Mokuba. But what about Seto? Surely, he's worried (or at least angry) that Mokuba's gone missing.
    I'm a sucker for sweet endings. Of course, I want them to end up together. ^_^
    To Praiseofshadows: Can I e-mail you about posting on locketpair? I don't see myself getting LJ in the near future.
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  • From nixwilliams on March 15, 2005
    thanks thanks thanks! glad you are liking it... there are only a few more chapters to go. mokuba is still running/hiding. at about this point in the writing i really started to wonder how i would end it all (i.e. will they, won't they?)... so, i hope you're wondering too!!! yeah, i'd love a link - bring on the links!!! hope you're all well!
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  • From ANON - praiseofshadows on March 15, 2005
    Chapter 8 was awesome! Go for jerkingoff!Mokuba....he's so cute when he's psycho/tired...tee-hee. Best line in the whole thing: "Refuses to psychoanalyse the ramifications of jerking off over the image of his hot fucking sexy brother." Nice -- hope Seto catches up to him soon ;D. (BTW -- I was thinking I could put a link from locketpair to here? That way you would't have to worry about the slowness of your connection....let me know what you think =D)
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  • From ANON - praiseofshadows on March 14, 2005
    Oh....Wow, wow, and wow again! =D I just _love_ what you've got going here -- especialy the Mokuba/Seto-watch snippet. Tee-hee...Mokuba sure is obsessed, isn't he? Even when he's trying so very hard not to be. Props on having him end up at Kaiba Corp, too. Pure genius! I have nothing really constructive to say other than...um...more please? XD Peace out! =D
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  • From nixwilliams on March 14, 2005
    hi, thanks for reviewing again - i really appreciate it! regarding your issue with "adult" content... i -guess- you could post at fanfiction.com (*shudders slightly*)... it's not -all- bad, just a little all over the place. otherwise, just post it here along with your other stuff - stick a warning on it saying that it's not all that intense... surely you won't get kicked off just because your fic doesn't have enough sex in it?!?!?
    anyway, since you were kind enough to review, i think another chapter is in order!!! *peers at others like a schoolteacher* remember: no reviews, no story!
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  • From ANON - whitesakura on March 14, 2005
    I liked Mokuba saying something new every time he cut off another piece of hair. The scene in which an anonymous person seduced Mokuba made my heart hurt. As for the question you left in your review: I have some Seto/Mokuba ficlets, but I don't know where to post them. They aren't R or NC17 material, and I don't have LJ to join a community. So unless you, or someone else offers to post stuff, then ::shrugs::
    We must think alike. There was a club scene in one of my ficlets, too. ^_~

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  • From nixwilliams on March 12, 2005
    hello! more reviews... thanks! ah, the hair! i -know-!!! how -could- he?!? let's see what he gets up to in the next chapter, hey? (i'll post it soon, just checking it for typos etc).
    praiseofshadows, thanks for the info - i'm so happy that you like the fic! i didn't know about the lj community - i don't tend to frequent it, mainly because my internet connection is really slow, and lj takes ages to load. but bring it on! i'm happy to share the love!
    and as today is a lovely day where i am, i'm sending sunshine to you all!


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  • From ANON - praiseofshadows on March 12, 2005
    Hi! This is really good -- it's got all the ambiguity that _is_ Seto&Mokuba (like "White Roses" =D). There's that weird, indefinable current between them, and I love how you make Mokuba half-aware/half-unaware of his more than-brotherly-interest in Seto. Anyway, I also love your Seto/Mokuba "God Drabble." It's so hard to find good Seto/Mokuba fic...umm...I don't know if you know/care, but there's a lj community dedicated to the couple (locketpair). I know there'd be a few people (besides myself XD) who'd love to see both this and "God Drabble" if you wanted to post them there. Anyway, again, this is really awesome, and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it! =D
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  • From ANON - Lina on March 12, 2005
    Awww he's gonna cut his hair!! NO MOKIE!!! NO!!!!! Seto's such a jerk! BUT I LUV THIS STORY!! STOP THE SUSPENSE!! YOUR KILLING ME!!
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  • From nixwilliams on March 11, 2005
    hey hey! thanks for dropping in! yeah, my seto is a bit mean here - my reason being that this is a very mokuba-centric fic, and mokuba is about 17 in this (i.e. angst-ridden and irrational). So, while Seto might not be very nice, in chapter one, that has a lot to do with Mokuba's attitude, as well. I did write in some more about Teresa and Hanasaki, but it didn't end up making it to the final cut (again, mokuba's pov only). sorry about the typos - there is an issue with the program i'm using.Hey! thanks again! i'm really happy that you reviewed!!!
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  • From ANON - whitesakura on March 11, 2005
    Thanks for taking the time to review. Writers like us just crave feedback, right? ^_~
    Anyway, I like what you've got so far. I was just a little shocked that Seto treats Mokuba so callously.
    Your story is written well, and you really know how to get into Mokuba's feelings, but there were a few typos, and:
    "It was as if thinking them all week had given them a body of their own." - don't you mean "will" not "body"?
    I'd like to know more about Teresa and Hanasaki. Drop a few hints about what Seto's feeling (even w/o using his POV).
    You might also want to consider not having your title in all caps - but hey, that's a style choice.
    Good luck!
    Ps. I can't find Sleepless I. o.0

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