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Reviews for Mela en’ Coiamin (Love of my Life)

By : Ravenx
  • From ANON - Crazy Demon on April 26, 2005
    WOOT! I ish back. I was lazy with reviewing again. Except for the beginning (where I could NOT for the life of me figure out how they were arranged) I thought it was really good! I love incest, personally... 'cept with Seto and Mokuba, but because Joey was in there too, it was jake. The only thing is it sounded a little like Mokuba was in love with Seto, which Idk if that's true or not but my reaction to that is like... ">.> umm no, he's got a man already?" But OTHER THAN THAT! Superb. I suppose we'll be seeing lemons of the other two couples then. That's cool... well M/M is cool... I'm desensitized to Bakura/Ryou because... EVERYONE DOES IT. Frankly, they bore me now. Oh well, I STILL HEART THE FIC ANYWAY!!! n__n So, rock on with ya bad self!
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  • From ANON - Chibi-Rose on April 26, 2005
    That was really good! Very graphic! Although I'm not really keen on the whole threesome idea I still thought it was good but I would have prefered it just to be Joey and Seto but if you like Mokuba, Joey and Seto together then that's ok, I mean it's your story I'm just giving my small point of view. Anyway good writing1 :-) *gives a red-chibi-rose*
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  • From ANON - Heme on April 26, 2005
    Nice description, but Seto and Mokuba aren't a good pairing! Like Seto more with Joey and Mokuba with... somebody else. You give hem a new boyfriend and we will be happy. But it is a very nice story though!
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  • From ANON - Nepha on April 26, 2005
    That was a good threesome...but I'm not a fan of them however you write very well and it was good to read it. Just one more thing if you do other threesome DO NOT HAVE YAMI AND YUGI ON IT!!! I really don't like the idea of a threesome with them together or not. And please if you have incest in your story, you should warning the people for it. Keep up the great work. Please update soon. Ohhh...I forgot...I have this in mine mind for some time...I want to know if male pregnancy will appear in this story? I'm a huge fan of male pregnancy especially when Yugi, Ryou and Malik are pregnant... ^_^ ja ne
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  • From ANON - Kuk on April 26, 2005
    Not bad at all... this was a great threesome ....However I not a big fan of threesome. I love this story but please if you do other threesome don't do with Yami and/or Yugi. They do that with each other and no one else with them. Update soon. Bye
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  • From ANON - Juuni on April 26, 2005
    Not bad, not bad. I may not be a big fan of threesomes, but this one is good. However, I do feel that Mokuba deserves a lover of his own, Maybe Mokuba can find someone?? And don't do a threesome with Yami and Yugi. I love this pair and I don't like see them in a threesome. Anyways, please keep up the good work and update soon. Ja ne
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  • From ANON - Sarah Costa on April 26, 2005
    Well I like the threesome but I don't like the idea of SetoxJouxOther or YamixYugixOther. It was good. Please update soon. And will someone get pregnant? Ja
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  • From ANON - janet on April 26, 2005
    Hi there......um this chpater i ok i gues......but i sure could use some warning that there will be incest......
    other than that i think this fic is good i am just not that comfortable with incest!

    update soon!!!

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  • From ANON - person on April 26, 2005
    Hey! *pokes you* You didn't mention any M/M/M stuff in the summary, let alone that it was gonna be Seto/Jou/Mokuba. *pokes you again* Grr. Warn me next time. And I'm not so sure this fits into this fic. *sulks* You just threw it off track. *sticks tounge out at you* I still worship you, and this fic though. I am but a humble fan. Who is eagerly awaiting more work on this story, especially some Ryou/Bakura stuff. *hint hint, nudge nudge, pointed look*
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  • From ANON - Camille on April 26, 2005
    Mokuba should throw Duke off a cliff!!! YEESH!!! That is the first SXJ with M that I have ever read.

    Bakura: Don't think about it! I ain't sharing!!!!

    Ryo: You're no fun!
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  • From ANON - Rayne on April 26, 2005
    heh heh... ouch that was hot. Jou and Seto and Mokuba.... yum. heheh... for a first time threesome very nice. Wouldn't mind more from these three. Aren't I bad?? hehe heh...giggles with random evil thoughts...
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  • From ANON - Silvershadowfire on April 26, 2005
    0.o Okay, that I didn't expect. Jou and Seto, yes. Jou, Seto and Mokie, no. But it was still a good threesome!
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  • From ANON - jadedkatrina on April 26, 2005
    I loved the three-some...amazing very well done.
    Anyways will can't wait to see what will happen
    next and don't mind the short review...It's late
    here... Anyways can't wait to see what will happen
    between Malik and Marik and the others.

    JK: *still holding white orb* do you give in Yami-kun,
    You know you can join us if you'd like, *gives innocent,
    sweet smile*
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  • From ANON - Kodachi on April 26, 2005
    Not bad, not bad. I may not be a big fan of threesomes, but this one is good. However, I do feel that Mokuba deserves a lover of his own, (aside from that Duke (Otogi)). Then again, I really like Seto with Joey and tend to prefer no one encroaching on their relationship. *shrugs* Maybe Mokuba can find someone?? I am sure there is an elf for him. *chuckles* Time to brainstorm there. *shrugs* Anyways, please keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - Rachel Dracon on April 25, 2005
    Nice chapter. The way they speak is a little funny, but I'm assuming that's just because they're elves. The lemons were good, or at least, well based, my suggestion would be to go back over them a few times (at least once, more if you already do once). You switch tenses, and you need to watch for sentence fragments. Don't be afraid to use commas, or speech to express something. Try to show instead of telling. Focus especially on the last part, it will without fail increase the quality of your writing. I already like your story (I wouldn't bother to review if I didn't), so those're my thoughts on improvements! Good job, and update again soon!
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