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Reviews for The New Girl - Perfection has Landed!

By : Whytney

From ANON - Cookie on September 25, 2005
Funny as hell!
Sorry I can't flame you. Maybe next time.
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From ANON - Naye025 (I\'ll sign in someday...) on September 06, 2005
*twitches horribly* I somehow read the original version of the fic...well at least the first couple chapters... I was mad at all the bad grammar and the horrible spelling... I just had to let it go. I enjoy reading flames of fics and you did a great job with this one!

Ja!
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on August 31, 2005
Hell yeah I'd like to help you devour the fuck out of the last chapter. You know where to find me. I'll bring the whips, ball gags, and honey powder...*shifty grin*
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on August 31, 2005
*dies laughing* oh the trauma continues.......
Hey, I would like to give you a hand! You know where to find me!
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From ANON - Daaku. on August 30, 2005
I actually have nothing I could possibly add. : Except. Um. Yeah. this is interesting? (:

Mary-sue things annoy me. Why are gary-sues so rare? At least those seem appealing. :3 -Coughcough.-

I ruined my first statement completely. I did actually have something to say! -Seizure.- But, yeah. This is actually hilarious, and strange. Like a combo package! :D Iwant a damn chicken, that wouldn't peck my eyes out if I tried to dress it in some sort of amusing pink leotard. ;-; Gawd.

You're not some weird mortal God I worship, but I have to hand it to you. You're humorous, and I'd like to see more. o___.

::Hearts!::
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on August 24, 2005
*dies laughing like always*
That was a kick ass chappie! It's great to find a fic so worthy of an mst. Keep up the excellent work!
*hands seto plushie* that's for the mentioning me in the prologue!
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From ANON - Taka on August 19, 2005
Ack, what happened to Sakura and Ryou's little relationship?
This is great, I'm busting myself laughing at all the little comments! Whoever wrote this is a shitty authoresse O.o
Please update it soon xD
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on August 18, 2005
Oh my... Now I'm going to be stuck thinking thoughts about chickens and blow jobs. *snicker*
Is it just me, or was her chapter extremely short? It was barely a page long double spaced!!! The authoress should be thanking you for adding depth to her crap.

Bakura: I say we chop Mary Sue up and feed her entrails to rabid pigs.

Marik: I'm all for that, though I think we ought to tie her up to a chair and make her listen to the Pharaoh's endless droning about the heart of the cards first. Toy with her mind a little, you know?

Kaiba: I better be a continent away if that happens. That little geek's 'believe in the heart of the cards' speeches make my ears bleed.

Bakura: Try sitting through one of Anzu's happy friendship sermons...

Marik: If I stuck my stuff down a chicken's throat, it would give a whole new meaning to the phrase ..."choke the chicken."

Bakura: O.o

Kaiba: What the hell? TMI, you blonde freak. *groan*

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From ANON - Typhoon on August 09, 2005
ok...scratch my comment about the hope I HAD about the sequel thingy...because she will be back! Find cover, run! because, as she so gladly put it...."There will a sequil! Do not fear!" NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! FEAR THE SEQUEL, er...i mean, FEAR THE SEQUIL! *faints*
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From ANON - XD on August 09, 2005
for the ones who don't know were this fic came from....(and yes, this was a story from ff.net, now here w/ the comments - brilliant comments, by the way)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1996255/1/
gods...MY EYES!!!!!! This is why I don't read stories w/ straight couples anymore...the autors tend to make the worst mary sues ever!(of course, there is the problem of OOCness in Yaoi too XD) But just looking at the summary of this shit made me sick -_- *runs to the bathroom* Fortunatly, the...thing, finished the 'story', so, WE ARE SAVED! I just hope that she doesn't remember doing a sequel...-______________________-

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From ANON - bakurasgirl on August 08, 2005
Seto: I would never say 'to keep an I on Sakura"......only one thing in this world would give me a hand cramp...*looks at Joey*
Joey: ^________^ Seto's right.
*Seto passes out from lack of grammar proficiency*
Ryou: *grabs Ryou x Bakura yaoi doujinshi and hugs* thank you, deary! Can you give the link to the original story in your next chappie? I would love to see the reviews the original story is getting.

Aten: I don't speak english too well and even I know it better than her.
Marik: Keep writing! *hands Seto plushies and Phantom Bakura plushies*
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From ANON - Yuri-chan on July 24, 2005
WAHHH!
Not story... I mean, bashing-fic.
*washes mouth clean with Essence of Kaiba's Penis*

Kaiba : ...
Mokie (XDDDDD) : Did she just write... what I think she wrote?
Kaiba : Let's forget about it, we need to molest Jou now.
Mokie (XDDDDDD) : Oh yes, we shall.

*somewhere in the other side of the world*
(mysterious person) : Jou-chan, what's wrong?
Jou : *sneezes* Aw, nandemonai.
M.P. (Member of Parliament? XDDDDD Dude, this just made me laugh... XDDD) : Mmkay. Now climb back to bed.
Jou : Okay... Tea.

Me : NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Kaiba : NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Mokie : NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

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From ANON - Yuuri-chan =D on July 24, 2005
*gets on her knees and begs*
Please, oh please, please, please, either of you... MARRY ME. xDDD
Oh yes, and we'll make little babies and will keep either Jou-chan or Seto in a closet. We'll be able to molest them at any given time!!! *foams at mouth* Better yet, keep Sakura in a dungeon and eat in front of her while her insides eat themselves... I just had a sudden stroke of brilliance, if that makes sense... Insecticide! Hahahahaha. That'll make her so-called Yamis (which is an oxy-moron, I'm afraid to say. It simply FLATLY contradicts itself. How can one have two yamis? And for the record, one is all calm and shit while the other is as hyper as Vicky from Little Fucking Britain? Phshaw. Yeah... right.) die, then Bakura will eat them and I will be able to pair him up with Yuugi!!! *imagines Bakura having rough anal sex with Yuugi* *sighs* How wonderful would that be...
*coughs*
Oh yes, how come most of the names, e.g Rebecca, are english? Why couldn't it have been totally ORIGINAL names like... Tomoyo, Sasuke, Naruto or even goddamned MIAKA?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!?!??!
*Kaiba suddenly appears and coughs*
Ahhh.
And the issue with Kaiba acting MAJORLY FUCKING GODDAMNED COCK-SUCKING ooc....
WHAT THE BLOODY HELL IS WRONG WITH THIS GODDAMNED AUTHORESS?!?!!
*takes deep breath and swiftly brings out Gwendal plushie from pocket and calms down*
*grins cheerily*
Ah yes. You've missed out her "shawl" mistake in the description of the mutants' so called... dresses. Even me, in my scruffy cargo pants and old t-shirts will look good. And that would be a shame. A right real shame, loves. I plan on becoming the ugliest, worst-dressed person and that scum SAKURA has beaten me to it. Stupid, cock-sucking bitch-whore!!! HOW DARE SHE?! I WILL STAB HER MERCILESSLY WITH A BLUNT KNIFE AND FEED HER GENITALS TO HER OWN MOTHER, THE SLUT.

Wow. I ranted quite a bit there.
Please do continue. < 333
*wuvs this story very much*
*hugs Gwendal plushie and whips out Yuuri plushie and proceeds to make them have dry, gay, plushie sex*
YAY!

Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die. Sakura must die.
P.S; I tried searching for the original story in FF.net and I couldn't find it... ;_; I wanted to flame her personally and now I can't!!! *wails despairingly* On the bright side, I think that they deleted the story! Hurrah. Hurrah. Hurrah. ; 333

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From ANON - n1ko on July 23, 2005
Ok, I changed my mind. This thing almost bearable? What the fuck was I thinking? I went ahead and read the other chapters you haven't completed on ff.net...and fucking hell. I want to rip my eyes out. This thing (it is not a story and I refuse to call it that) is so bad the author of it should be taken out, shot, stabbed, run over, run over again, shot some more, beaten with a baseball bat, shot again, run over again, thrown off a building, blown up with dynamite, lit on fire... and I could just go on forever. Rip the guts out of this... thing... stomp on it, and make it hilarious in the process. Thanks.
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on July 22, 2005
Oh my god....*is dying of laughter* ....it's like a kid wrote this.

Marik: It wouldn't surprise me.
Ryou: *shakes head*
Bakura: *laughs* I LOVE MST fics!!!!! Keep up the excellent work!

I called off of work so damn depressed today. Thank you so much for putting a smile on my face today.
*hands Seto and Joey plushies*
*holds naked, chained seto* You can have this.
Seto: O_O

P.S. Sorry about you feeling so sick. *hugs*
Ryou: Drink lots of hot tea...Chai Tea kicks butt!
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