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Reviews for The New Girl - Perfection has Landed!

By : Whytney

From ANON - n1ko on July 22, 2005
Your witty comments and sarcastic remarks throughout this (obviously) horrendous fic are priceless! Keep up the good work; reading what you write about this fic almost makes it bearable. Almost. XD
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From ANON - thegrandfour on July 20, 2005
could ya please stop with the grammatical error reports. Surely the story doesnt need to be stuck with them worse than a pincushion.
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on July 19, 2005
*passes out from laughter after reading rest of fic*
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From ANON - bakurasgirl on July 19, 2005
May I say that this is the most...AWESOME MARY SUE BASHING FIC EVER!
You are wonderful!
You did such a good job on this. I've missed MST fics on this site. D-chan doesn't write her stuff anymore...and she was a great MST author.
Please keep this going as long as you can.
Ever considered doing other mst's?
*hands bakura, ryou and seto plushies*
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From ANON - Daaku!Malik on July 17, 2005
o_____________o.

...I fuckin' adore you.

Wow. That was blunt! :3

::~Heart~::

Daaku. o-o;
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From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on July 14, 2005
77: Once again, the commentary in this is more worth the read than the original drivel whatever-the-fuck her name is plopped together.
Ryou: You mean you don�t remember the original authoresses pen-name?
77: Er... It�s not worth wasting my last few brain cells on, okay? Her story makes my eyes bleed...
Bakura: Plopped? *licks Marik�s bloody mouth and snickers*
Marik: I�ll give you a plop, bitch-boy! *grabs Bakura and pulls him into the closet to have hot, evil monkey sex*
Malik and Ryou: *grab their cameras* WOOOHOO!
77: *evil grin* Yum... *snicker* Okay, anyway, this MST is fucking hilarious. I don�t give a shit if someone doesn�t like what you�re doing, I think it�s very fitting and quite amusing. If you can actually read through whoever-the-fuck�s shitty ficcage, I have to commend you. Really... people who post such crap should be burned alive at the stake ...after being gruesomely tortured for as long as possible. How do you even get through reading, �The New Skank?�
Yugi: It�s �Girl�
Yami Yugi: *shakes head* No, aibou, I assure you, it�s skank. Let�s go screw.
Yugi: *blushes* Uh... okay...*giggles*
Yami and Yugi: *disappear into the kitchen*
77: Once again...Yum, and thank you for continuing with the Mary-Sue slaughter. *hands out sharp objects and voodoo plushies*
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From ANON - Marysuemustdie on July 14, 2005
Aahaha, just as insane as the last one!

Ohh, lemme guess who Bakura got laid with... Hm... ::glances at Ryou's limping form:: >;D

Anyhoo, this Sue is freaking crazy. It reminds me of a time when I was in 8th grade and shared a gym class with a 7th grader who made complete sues, drew horrible pics and wrote fanfics, for Yugi and Seto. One was Ivy and the other was a stupid common Sue name I forgot. One day, she was telling my friend and I how Ivy and Seto were MEANT to be together.

"Oh my god, and Ivy is so cold and dark just like Seto and she has a little sister named Rose and they live alone 'cause Ivy's parents died, like like Seto's, and she's really cold and smart but she's mean and hates Yugi!"

My friend was getting rather annoyed. "Her name is Ivy? Well, Weevil is a bug, and I'm sure Weevil would just adore her."

"Ewwww, Weevil!?" The 7th grader exclaims.

"Yes, he could just EAT HER UP. . . like a bug." Yes, foreshadowing oral sex is always a good plan.

Unless... "What's that mean?"

Well, darlings, I can't wait for the next chapter. Hope your eyes haven't melted yet and perhaps we could get paperbags for the barfing? See ya! ;3

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From ANON - Michiyo_chan on July 10, 2005
o_o Wow....

XDD I'm so grateful you've done yet another chapter...the first time I saw this I read all 8 chapters in one shot! Of course, that took a couple of hours, between your comments, and her lack of English, I found myself having to minimize the screen and taking a walk around my house, it was just too much at once! XDD

All I know is that I'd love to check out the real story on FF...looking at the comments that have been left here, I'm almost afraid to see what's been left on the actual story...o_O...

Oi, just keep it up, the two of you make my day! XD
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From ANON - Sarah on July 04, 2005
I just roam around on AFF.net, glancing at a few summaries here and there, but this story caught my eye. I'm glad I took the 20 minutes to read it. ;3 Good job on the comments; simply loved them. As you can tell by my email/AIM username, I simply hate those damn sues'. Bleh. Makes my jaw hurt and stomach churn when seeing their vile stories.

I just love when these...children try to write romance scenes. The "fiercly blushing" made me ponder if the gal had a fever? STDs? The flirting is too typical. I believe she took ideas from other animes or perhaps they sprouted from her mangy mind. Urgh, I hope there isn't a lemon. ::twitch::

Poor, poor Kaiba. How simply dreadful for the man to know that an OOC clone of him roams around, courting a Marysue! And Jou, for his clone to have that obnixious Bronx accent! And Ryou, for being her first target!

Well, I won't waste your time with my rambles. To conclude, I just wish I could smex all of you up. D:

In fact. . .

::smexes:: AH-HA. >>
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From ANON - Jade on June 06, 2005
Oh please, for the love of all things anime..*mutters* This chapter was as usual; painful, and I see, like you notedm, there was no opening. Is our "author" getting lazy? Or just realizing no one really cares anymore? I don't think I've ever read a fic with so much Kaiba-OOC. -_- *holds up a stun gun* Who wants to go first; it doesn't hurt that bad if you pop a few of these first..*holds up Vicoden* Wait, Lori, PP, would you two like some? Half a Vicoden and a Long Island Ice Tea = Vicoden land! It's a great place, visit it sometime. It may help you keep your sanity....maybe. Well, I guess the mistakes weren't...that...bad... -.- Well good luck, I'll see you next chapter. *binds Lori's wounds again and offers more drinks, snacks, and vicoden*

~ Jade
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From ANON - FireKatt on June 01, 2005
Wow! I am speechless. Good thing I don't need to talk to type! ^_^ You two are totally hilarious! Well, in a mean, evil, kind of way....eh who am I kidding, you guys rock. I wish I had the balls to do this, tragically that would take a very unwanted surgery so, um, yeah. Keep up the awesome work!
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From ANON - Kyle-ness on May 28, 2005
Hey.. This fic is great!

Sakura is an awful writer..

'fuckableness' made me laugh outloud and get a lot of weird looks.

Great job, continue ASAP..
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From ANON - Jade on May 12, 2005
Well, that was�.painful, to say the least. Again I thank you for doing this, though I have this strange desire to maim and then destroy the person who first wrote this until nothing but their soul is left and then torture their soul for the rest of eternity. *smiles sweetly* Oh and by the way..*goes over to Lori and tends to her wounds* There you are. *offers pocky and some home made sweets to make you feel better* Keep up the good work, all of you. I know this is a very painful and excruciatingly difficult to deal with. I feel pity for your poor minds, just reading all the mistakes give me headaches. I can barely even begin to imagine how this person, or thing more likely, managed to get this far. *grumbles about those who can�t write and shouldn�t try* Well for all your troubles I�ve got a treat! *unveils a table overflowing with all foods imaginable and another table with plenty of drinks from water to whiskey and wine* Enjoy. See you all at the next painful chapter. ^_^�
Later,
Jade
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From ANON - Lori on May 11, 2005
O_o nooo! damn it! sorry ryoko, I guess I kinda got your name mixed up with "bunny on speed." THEIR review will probably be deleted, not your's! XD Sorry

~Lor
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From ANON - Lori on May 11, 2005
Well, I decided to review, even though I helped write it. XD hilarious, I must say....Oh, and Ryoko...you seem to like pissing on every one's good mood in the reviews you've left, so we're just gonna start deleting them....also, that's kinda interesting, the crossbow comment. O_o never thought of that...heh...oh well, it's not like we wrote the actual fic. Just the comments inbetween. *shrugs* Guess the retard thought it would be "cool" to have a crossbow with "magical powers." -____- Feh. Ta Ta, every one! ^-^

~Lor
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