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Reviews for The New Girl - Perfection has Landed!

By : Whytney
  • From ANON - Ryoko on May 11, 2005
    Uh, this line "'NO!' I can't fight them in this weekend state! I'll have to retreat!" also has an error... the wrong weakened was used, she used the one refering to Saturday and Sunday...
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  • From ANON - MarikIshtar77 on May 11, 2005
    *evil snicker* You're so mean, I fucking love you. Anybody who write such useless drivel deserves an MST like this.
    X-P Rock on.
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  • From ANON - Jade on May 07, 2005
    Oh gods! Kill me now! Such horrid writing! No based plot or anything close to it, hell this is completely random. I've read better stories from my seven year old cousin. Someone please, please, beta for this authoress! As I read this my eye started twitching out of control. I write fics as well and although my grammar isn't perfect and I have spelling errors I at least know how to form a damn sentence. >.< This is just horrid! And since when have Yami and Kaibe acted like that, really? Poor Ryou, I'd be scarred for life if a female like that liked me. *hands him a tissue and sleeping pills* If he's asleep maybe she wont bother him....or she may molest him in his sleep. o.O" I actually want to thank you for taking this fic and doing what you're doing, perhaps it will encourage others to try and use such things as a BETA and SPELL CHECK. They're such neat little things. *coughs* Forgive the sarcasm it must have been the 'sugar high'. Which that bugs me; if the damn person had no body then they couldn't have any desire for such physical items as food and what not for sugar and even if they did they wouldn't be able to have that sugar high. Couldn't she think of anything more orginal? *hears characters mutter: Obviously not.* If this authoress could get a well based and fixed plot and edit her grammar and what not, add in some original thought, and creativity while she's at it, the fic wouldn't be half bad. Who was the author of this by the way? Is it just we "bright" people who have noticed that most of the males on the Yu-Gi-Oh! cast lean towards being straight out Gay or Bi-sexual? Obvously so. I mean she does hint at F/M relationships but...well thats just poor Ryuo and Seto being subjected to torture. *pats their backs* Well I'll wrap this up, shall I? Great work, good luck with the rest, and try to keep sane among the spelling errors, and what not! ^_^ Ja!
    *~* Jade *~*
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  • From ANON - Amychan on April 30, 2005
    Duuuuuude! That was awesome! I love this story, it brings attention to how much complete, utter CRAP is polluting this fandom. It's amazing really, a year or two ago it wasn't nearly so bad but every since Yu-Gi-Oh! became the next 'Pokemon' cash cow for Kids 4, or whatever the hell the company is called, everything has gone down in smoke, flames, and "ilteracy".

    Ooooh, where have all the good fics gone, oh where, oh where could they be? :_(

    I'm rambling now, but good work!! This was friggin hilarious! :D

    -Amy
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  • From ANON - Yume no Kareta on April 27, 2005
    I just finished reading the four chapters that have been posted for "The New Girl - Perfection Has Landed". I was laughing the entire time.

    In the future, you may want to use a word processor, like MicrosoftWord or something. It tells you when a word is spelled wrong and of bad grammar. (I'm a journalism student, English is my native language, and all your mistakes are driving me up a wall. I'd say insane, but I already am...)

    The main reason I've made it this far into the fic is because of the character's comments. If they weren't there, and so highly amusing, I probably would have stopped reading.

    Please, try to improve the spelling and grammar. It's a great idea for a plot...but some work is needed on it.

    Keep trying though, everyone needs their entertainment!

    Thanks,
    Yume no Kareta
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  • From ANON - J.S. on April 17, 2005
    i ave to ask dis...
    wot da fuck r u guys on?!?!?!?!?
    T.T seriously it must b some pretty strong stuff...
    anyway
    i think da story is...um....interesting
    well at least it's entertaining
    and there seems to b a plot line...somewhere
    hope u guys continue though
    i find da comments hilarious
    update soon

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  • From ANON - Ryoko on April 11, 2005
    Ah, I love the way you're picking apart this horribly written Mary Sue... Honestly, you'd have to be delusional to even be writing something as horrible as this!

    I attempted it a long time ago... and never finished! Wow... Mary Sue's are sad fics really, makes me wonder about their authors...

    Keep up the awesome-ness!
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  • From ANON - DSC on April 11, 2005
    Highly amusing and patriotic Americans aren't nice are they?

    Keep writing.
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  • From ANON - Bunny on Speed on April 10, 2005
    *lol* Get a life... nothin' better to do, than to bash anything?
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  • From ANON - Lori on April 09, 2005
    Nope, she's not from Canada. :P You're off by a few thousand miles...and canada's kickass! ^_^ *does a little happy dance, holding the canadian flag* I WISH I was Canadian. -__- Feh.

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