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By : bluesun
  • From ANON - Aya on September 30, 2005
    ...dude, commas are your friend. Run-on sentences are the enemy. Detail is good, but you sound like you're either on crack, or are a 4 year old with ADD.
    Don't take it too offensively, the storyline isn't very bad, just the storytelling is freaking idiotic.
    Try it again, get someone to beta-it, and it should be fine.
    Until then; story gets a temporary 2 out of 10. (a point for few spelling mistakes, and a point for a good idea) but that's it.
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  • From AngelViper9 on September 28, 2005
    Firstly - I really like your story
    But - Yugi is starting to get realllyy OOC. You might want to curb his blood thirsty trend....
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  • From ANON - Arainaina on September 22, 2005
    oh interesting please update soon
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  • From ANON - Red Dragon Of Egypt on September 22, 2005
    RD: im just loving this more and more hehe I would never had pegged Yugi to be capable of half the things he says let alone does but hmm go figure well keep up the great work and update soon JA NE ^__^
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  • From ANON - SakuraNeko on September 22, 2005
    Read ZephyrGem's stories, they have great torture scenes in them! rad chappie!
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  • From ANON - Sarah Costa on September 22, 2005
    Great Chapter! I like to see Yugi having a evil and crazy side.
    Now about Keith. He must be torture and he must die very slowly...MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...*cough* Damn not again* cough* Sorry that happens when I laugh like that.
    I can't wait for the next chapter. And when Yugi and Yami get together? oh and will be more danger to Yugi and the others?
    Please update as soon as you can. PLEASE!!!
    Keep up the good work.
    Ja ne
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  • From ANON - SakuraNeko on September 20, 2005
    Watching Yugi go a little crazy is like watching a train wreck, only I don't want to stop watching it. It's like crack I tell ya, CRACK!
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  • From ANON - Sarah Costa on September 20, 2005
    Good Chapter. Yami should torture and kill the bad cop and the principal. Please update as soon as you can. Ja ne
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  • From ANON - Red Dragon Of Egypt on September 20, 2005
    RD: hehe you know even if it seems weird for yugi to be so wicked its at the same time funny hehe having the King of Darkness and his Young Prince come up the devious ways to make ppl pay IM SO PROUD OF YOU YUGI hehe sry but its so cool watching Yugi defend himself *cackles* you'll regret trying to hurt yugi hmph gtg now JA NE ^__^ UDPATE SOON pls hehe
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  • From ANON - Arainaina on September 20, 2005
    very good please update soon
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  • From YuugiMutou on September 17, 2005
    Great update, I like where you have this going and love Yami's possession against Yuugi's well being and such. You're welcome for the review, and thanks for emailing me I appreciate it. Hope to read more soon.

    ~Yami Yuugi
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  • From ANON - Arainaina on September 16, 2005
    very good please update soon
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on September 15, 2005
    Hi! I like this! It's a bit choppy in places and your punctuation is haphazard at best; but I like the idea behind this a lot. Yami does make the sexiest vampire imagineable! Yummy! Update soon!
    Koneko
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  • From ANON - Nepha on September 15, 2005
    Wow...that was great. i love vampires stories especially with Yami and Yugi and when they are a couple. I hope Yugi and Yami get together soon. So update as soon as you can. PWEASE *puppy eyes* ja
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  • From ANON - SakuraNeko on September 15, 2005
    Very interesting, yes, interesting.
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