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Reviews for Don't Know What You've Got, Until It's Gone

By : colorlessegyptian
  • From UzumakiSetsu on January 29, 2007
    Wow this is really good. Seriously I love it so far and I am sooooooooooo glad your not rushing it ^.^ I can't wait to see what you have planed for the both of them. When Seto and Jou go to Egypt will they beable to use magic? like you know Jou being able to summon the Red eye's black dragon? I would so love to see that. I can hardly wait till the next chap I hope its soon. I 'm excited really that your sending both of them to the past together. When it happens (them being sent to the past) will the get seperated? I know its a Seto/Jou Seth/Jou but will Jou meet Bakura? Jou's a smart character at least smarter then most people think ^.^ I can't wait to see how they both handle being sent to the past. Well Ja till next chap!
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  • From ANON - Lolita And Chris on December 31, 2006
    Chris: :)
    Lolita: Oooooooooooooo!
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  • From ANON - Celina on December 15, 2006
    I really liked it, it's cool!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - KAT on December 12, 2006
    You haff my attention.
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  • From ANON - shanghanjin on December 11, 2006
    I like the story so far, seems as though Seto is starting to flirt with the puppy. Update soon, i can't wait to see what happens when they meet Seth.
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  • From ANON - Sekre on December 10, 2006
    Good start, though if you could lower the amount of author notes or put them at the bottom it would be awesome because they were kind of distracting ^^ Everything looked good though, so can't wait until the second chapter :)
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 10, 2006
    An interesting idea and a good start. :)
    For next time though, please please nix the little random "add-ins". There's no need to have author's notes every few sentences. If you really feel the need to clarify something or add your two cents worth, put in a footnote. Using (1), (2) and so on usually work pretty well. A/Ns all over the place are very distracting. :( Also, as far as (sp?) goes, either use a thesaurus/spellcheck (microsoft word is wonderful for that XD) more or get a beta set up - again, 'tis very distracting and takes away from what otherwise would be a very good read. It doesn't take long to look up a few words, so you may as well, right?

    I hope that doesn't sound overly preachy (I really don't want to sound like a flamer or something!), I just really don't like it when a good read gets all broken up by those things. If that's just your style, then just ignore me. ;)
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  • From Sammei on December 10, 2006
    Nice start. I'm anxious to see where it goes from here.

    Just a few things, though.. I'm sorry, I guess I'm still a picky beta reader at heart. >_< Feel free to ignore me, I just wanted to point out a couple of things.
    When the names are being called for the assignment, one of the guys lets out a "deverish" noise, which I can only assume you meant "devilish noise." Also, Yami gives Yugi a "sexy patronizing" look - the sexy I get, but I'm not sure "patronizing" is what you're looking for here. It means to behave in an offensively condescending manner towards. So... Yami is being sexy, but offensively condescending? And it's spelled "indignantly."

    I hope this wasn't a bother! >_> Anyhow, keep up the good work! Looking forward to your next update.
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  • From ANON - jess on December 10, 2006
    i like it a lot so far so update soon. and tristan's last name is Taylor.
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  • From Reyn on October 05, 2005
    Hey! That's my story challenge thing! You did it! YaY! LoL. Eek! Now I'm all excited. I suppose that means I should take down the challenge from the posts now....
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  • From ANON - Yukiko on October 04, 2005
    good beginning here .... can't wait for more of it ^^
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  • From ANON - koalared on October 04, 2005
    So far so good, please write more.
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