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Reviews for Anachronism

By : Ochodre

From jessara40k on November 04, 2005
This was great. IMO you could get away with putting this up on FF.net, but if you'd rather play it safe that's understandable.
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From ANON - Rain on November 03, 2005
I so love thiss story but I have to say Ryou should in the tonment get to be in the finals with Barkura
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From ANON - Rockinmuffin on November 02, 2005
Ryou and Bakura dancing? THAT'S SO KAWAII! ^0^

Oh, and I absolutely loved the part where Bakura got Yugi, Joey, and Tristan to pick up there mess. *Sigh* If only I could do that...

I'm very interested to find out about Kaiba's new dueling system. During the first season, when the gang went into the virtual world for the first time, was one of my favorite parts of the show. I can't wait to see what ideas you've come up with for the RPG plot. Since Kaiba got the idea from the pharaoh's Memory World, does that mean that the game will have an Ancient Egyptian setting?

Thank you for another chapter. Even though I'll miss the daily updates, I appreciate the fact that you take your time in writing your story so that it will be even better! ^.^
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From ANON - Anon on November 02, 2005
Just thought I'd let you know that I love this story, and the way you write this pairing. Your potrayal of the characters are much more realistic and beleivable then most of the fanfictions that I've read. You're a great author, keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Rockinmuffin on October 31, 2005
I see that Bakura finally got to experience one of the many joys of womanhood. LOL. *Sigh* I wouldn't wish that fate on my worst enemies.

And is it just me or ar Yugi-tachi being rude? I could never imagine a person going to someone's house and ignoring the host, then making a mess and falling asleep, though I guess I could imagine Joey and Tristan doing that. Oh well, *Sigh* boys will be boys... excpet for in Bakura's case. xD

Oh my, looks like Bakura and Ryou are becoming more... comfortable around each other. ^_~ And I love the bath drawing you did; it was so cute and you have such a unique drawing style. I LOVE IT!
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From ANON - elusive_dreamer on October 31, 2005
Thanks for including the link to janime.net on your author�s note, at least now, I have an idea on how Ryou met Yugi and the others, as well as how the Monster World game works! ^_^ I�ve also checked your fan arts, and they really provided extra help in imagining the scenes better.
Anyway, great chapter! I love how you wrote the interaction between Ryou and Bakura especially when Bakura apologized for Ryou�s wound during Battle City as well as the part wherein Bakura read Ryou�s palm. I think your ability to write tender moments without involving extreme physical contact between your characters is what sets you apart from other writers. When I read your works, every motion and every dialogue of every character counts. With your style, a simple line or a simple gesture can turn a plain scene into something very emotionally intense. I think that�s what most writers in the romance genre of this anime lack, since for them, a romance story is not considered romantic without make out scenes between the lead characters.
The conversation between the two in the bathroom was also interesting, especially the part wherein Bakura muses on the number of heirs he had spawned in his past life. I don�t know�that part really had me thinking back to the last chapter before the epilogue of Snow on the Sahara. There was this line there that really got me all emotional and stuff, the one wherein you wrote about how an all grown up Bakura bedded women here and there but never stayed long enough to get attached since after all those women were not Ryou. I know it�s irrelevant but please bare with me, it�s just that I loved to reminisce and compare some parts of that story with Anachronism.
I know it�s kinda late, but thank you so much for the daily update of the chapters! I don�t think any author updates as frequent as you do, and for that I�m really grateful! Keep up the great work! ^_^

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From ANON - emma on October 30, 2005
You can ead the whole monsterworld manga arc at this address http://bakurasnightmare.net.tf, they also have some of duelist kingdom
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From ANON - eagleofdeath on October 30, 2005
I read 'Powerless' (which was awesome, to say the least) and I've begun to read this with enthusiasm. I love how you've shown Bakura trying to get used to being a female, while while not giving up his sense of masculinity. This is one of the best fanfictions I've read in a long time...thanks for writing it ^_^...By the way, I would love to see a Jaden/Syrus story if you wouldn't mind writing it...Best of luck to you!
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From ANON - elusive_dreamer on October 30, 2005
Very interesting chapter! Does necrofear really have that kind of effect as a monster card? I�m really curious since I have no card in my YGO deck of that kind and that effect wasn�t shown either during Battle City when Bakura faced Yami. It�s really annoying that Yami was able to draw Osiris during that duel�I think if it wasn�t for the god card, Bakura would�ve beaten him!
Anyway, this chapter is really surprising in that you took a supposedly light-hearted meeting and twisted it into something that questioned the three boys� (Yugi, Joey, and Tristan) sense of friendship, and not to mention decency.
I just love how you write Bakura�s character! You were still able to retain her tough and blunt attitude through out Powerless and also here in Anachronism that sometimes I find myself forgetting that he�s a girl in both stories. I really applaud you for that! You see some stories that I�ve read in the past that had Bakura changing into a girl portrayed his character in a very �slutty� manner in order to drive the point that HE�S A GIRL. Honestly, even yaoi stories portray him that way�especially if he�s paired with Yami Marik or Marik, which absolutely infuriates me. I mean, c�mon he was the King of Thieves and I believe he enjoys and flaunts the title along with his reputation�writing him with such a degrading role does not give justice to his character at all! You know, come to think of it, I guess that�s where I developed my aversion for stories wherein Bakura plays the �weaker� role.
About your Ryou, I think you had him play �the character with the gentle soul yet strong heart� really well. He�s the type that blindly yet valiantly fights against the most evil villains for those he loves yet around them, he�s really passive even though he�s already hurting with how they treat him. Poor guy really�but I guess that�s why you had Bakura sauntering from his room to have a card game with Joey in this chapter, right? By the way, I�m just wondering what�s Ryou�s character is like in the manga since this chapter reminded me of something you said before about Yugi and Joey being quite the closet perverts in the manga. Was Ryou like them or he�s what you�ve been portraying him so far?
I�m really looking forward to reading the next chapter! This one really piqued my interest that I�m starting to get comfortable with Bakura being the female! See you! ^_^

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From ANON - Rockinmuffin on October 30, 2005
Poor Ryou, being used by his friends so they can watch their dirty little smut videos. ;______; But Bakura gave them a pretty sweet burn! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Their pride has been bruised! XD You go girl!

*Sigh* I still feel bad for Ryou though. It seems like everything bad happens to him... well, except for the fact that HE is still a man... If Ryou was a real person I'd give him a hug... and stalk him... .>

...Sorry about that. I'm currently high off of soda and chocolate. ^_^;

Keep up the good work and thanks for the daily updates! ^O^
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From ANON - elusive_dreamer on October 29, 2005
Wow! Thank you so much for the offer regarding the fan art! I�ll just send you an e-mail as soon as I�ve scanned it but don�t expect it anytime soon. Having my scanner fixed is not easy since I�m kinda short in cash right now�hope you�ll understand.
About your reply regarding future RxB fics�I can�t say I�m not disappointed but I guess it can�t be helped since I have to admit, writing on something without the perfect inspiration is hard�it�s just like reading a story you have no interest on. On YGO GX, I�m sorry but I�m not familiar with its story and characters since that series was not shown in our country. However, for the record, I have to agree with what one of the reviewers said about YGO not being the same without the characters from the original series.
Okay, on with the chapter review�is it me or is Ryou acting like your version of him in the Snow in the Sahara? Particularly with his affinity for serving herbal drinks that tends to �sedate� Bakura one way or another. I don�t know if you really intended it, but I think there�s just something common between the Ryou in this story serving herbal tea and the Ryou in SITS serving hashish.
Another thing, I�m not sure if you�ve already indicated Ryou�s age on one of the chapters in Powerless, but if it would be okay for me to ask, could you please clear it up in one of your author�s note? I�m really sorry if it�s a bother but it would really help me in having an idea on how the guy looks like as well as how he�s suppose to act in accordance to his age. It would also help in further having a feel on how masculine Ryou is in this story as opposed to the usual effeminate boy that I have in mind.
I think that these two aspects of the chapter were the ones that mostly piqued my attention as of now since I have a feeling that the story will most probably pick up next chapter. I�m sorry for this somewhat crude review�I�ll try to make a better review next time, okay?
Lastly, about the future lime scenes, I�ll try to read the one in AFF.net, I think it would be more appropriate to read the full version since doing so will give justice to your effort and talent. Don�t worry about me, I think I can manage a few hetero-lime scenes from time to time�I mean, I�ve read a number of yaoi scenes before so, reading your lime scene won�t hurt�I guess. See you next chapter! ^_^

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From ANON - Kyoko on October 29, 2005
Oooh awesome! I just read Powerless, and LOVED it! ^^! And now this one is way awesome! I'm lovin' it! Add more, please!!! ^^!
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From ANON - Lady Laran on October 28, 2005
*happy dances* Yay! You updated! I'm so happy! *winces as muses glare at her* Okay, I'll calm down now. I really enjoyed this chapter. Hehe...gotten hooked, you might say. I still can't wait to see Bakura 'embrace' the joys of womanhood. lol...

Anyway..about the shonen ai comment for GX, I don't think I'll touch that series to be honest. I love writing YuGiOh fanfic, but it's not YuGiOh without Yugi and the others. So, I'll let others work on that.

In the meantime, great job!!!!!
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From ANON - Rockinmuffin on October 28, 2005
Yay, Female BakuraxRyou fluff! WOOT!

I swear, each chapter you write is better than the last. This story is just so interesting and creative and I think I've fallen in love with it. ...Wow, I must soound like such a brown-noser right now... -_-

Well, I can't wait to see Joey and Tristan's reactions to seeing a female Bakura. I'm not really sure whether it will be comical or dramatic; you always do find a way to surprize us. Thats cool though, 'cause surprizes are one of the things that makes life interesting and worth living.

Ciao! ^_^
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From ANON - Rockinmuffin on October 28, 2005
Forget about my question. Garsh I'm stupid. I can't believe I didn't realize what it was before. -_- *Slaps head*
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