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By : hatochiisai

From ANON - Marik/Ryou fanatic on December 17, 2005
D'oh, you are EVIL!!!

Please update soon. Please please please. I want to read more. I really do. You update so much when no one else will. Please update soon! I'll review! See? Proper reviews!

PROS:
- original plot
- loving pairings
- great mix of a yaoi lover's dream
- one of the few Marik/Ryou writers out there
- update so fast like wow!

CONstructive Critisism:
- slight mischaracteration of characters, but since this is AU, I think it's fine. ^--^ It's just strange to read about Ryou spazzing on someone or to have Rex actually bully Ryou down. Considering canon Ryou has a younger sister, I had always imagined he'd be easier at tackling younger children, but again, tis is AU, so it's fine! ^--^
- slight mischaracteration of Marik, but again, this is AU, so it's fine. ^--^ But perhaps for future stories wtih Marik/Ryou, maybe you could make Marik's care for Ryou a bit more gradual...and how often Marik shows weakness. eg: whimpering, and what not. ^-^

Shee? 5 Pros and 2 cons that are really just 1 con. ^--^ SO UPDATE SOON!! PLEASE? PLEASE? PLEASE?

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From ANON - Anon on December 17, 2005
D'oh, you are EVIL!!!

Please update soon. Please please please. I want to read more. I really do. You update so much when no one else will. Please update soon! I'll review! See? Proper reviews!

PROS:
- original plot
- loving pairings
- great mix of a yaoi lover's dream
- one of the few Marik/Ryou writers out there
- update so fast like wow!

CONstructive Critisism:
- slight mischaracteration of characters, but since this is AU, I think it's fine. ^--^ It's just strange to read about Ryou spazzing on someone or to have Rex actually bully Ryou down. Considering canon Ryou has a younger sister, I had always imagined he'd be easier at tackling younger children, but again, tis is AU, so it's fine! ^--^
- slight mischaracteration of Marik, but again, this is AU, so it's fine. ^--^ But perhaps for future stories wtih Marik/Ryou, maybe you could make Marik's care for Ryou a bit more gradual...and how often Marik shows weakness. eg: whimpering, and what not. ^-^

Shee? 5 Pros and 2 cons that are really just 1 con. ^--^ SO UPDATE SOON!! PLEASE? PLEASE? PLEASE?

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From ANON - Sharpie on December 17, 2005
...I'm going to keep this short.

I hate you. It's a strong emotion, but I am extremely upset with this. Not in the negative way. In a way, where I'm very upset about being left with such a cliffhanger, and I don't want the lion to die. Don't kill the lion man... Please don't kill the fucking lion man.

I apologize for not even bothering to never review any story but this one. Anywhere. But, I don't really like any of the other pairings. So they never got my attention. I'm sorry if that upsets you. I hope you get a chance to use the computer. This depressed me to no end. I didn't cry, because it wasn't at that level of sad. But I did feel a sting in my eye. Don't let the lion man die...
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From ANON - ladywolfTerri on December 17, 2005
You.... Are... EVIL!!!!!!!....

Great job!!...and that is a horrible cliffie!!!! Hopefully you will update soon!!!
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From ANON - Kidea on December 15, 2005
I am really loving this fanfic! It's so good and I'm addicted. I just keep reading it! Can't stop @.@ I'm writing something similar to this, but Ryou's turning into an animal naturally. Ah well I love the fanfic and I was dancing around my room when I saw Chapter 6 up! Woot! Hope Chapter 7 comes son too. It's hard to write fanfics every week, so my fanfics take time too. Ah well see ya round deary.

Kidea

P.S. Love all your fafics where Tea/Anzu dies ^_ ^ Die Tea die!
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From ANON - DemonicMistreessKree-KUn on December 15, 2005
OH my god that is hilarious! bakura, my poor sexy kura no dignity left.... WEll some until she gets the bonnet and bib... heh! oh well ! oooo i think i know what marik did. I think he just took tuc and nod to keep them safe.... Oh i really enjoyed this chapter and i really hop and pray that the moth w/ out acess to the internet goes quickly i really enjoy your stories and cant wait for burning sea. I'll go and read AI next so don't give up on it!

Kreekun
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From ANON - Luna on December 13, 2005
I love this fic...absolutely ADORE THIS FIC! WANT TO RE-READ THIS FIC! ...*re reads it*....not! enough! *re reads it again* kinda happy now...write more! please! IM BEGGING YOU!
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From inuficcrzy on December 13, 2005
holy freaking cow. this is so unique and different, and i cannot stop read it! please, please, you have to write more! i have to know what happens next!
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From ANON - Anira_Oceanfang on December 12, 2005
I will try to update more but school and finals are killing some of us. I like burning sea and AI. All your fics are really great please continue! Thanks very much!
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From ANON - ladywolfTerri on December 12, 2005
Poor Ryou!!!!

Isn't Rem going to talk to Ryou like Dai said?! why doesn't Ryou just give her his full name and Yami's full name, tell her to look in missing persons, that they are... or were human. I wonder how she would handle finding out something like that, all the lives she helped ruin, all the people that she took humanity away from.

Please update soon!!
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From ANON - Sharpie on December 12, 2005
New chapters are as brilliant as always. Although, even though I literally bowed to the story in the beginning, I still have a few issues. I don't think many have a clear picture of what the creatures look like. You weren't too descriptive with that. Also, I'd like to know how large the enclosures are, how large the creatures are, and why Rem happens to have superhuman strength. I also wasn't sure why Diasuke injected Ryou once more, though he deserved it. I'm tiring of his 'innocence'. Was it solely for pain? Also, did Rem simply dye Bakura pink? Poor thing. I'm still amazed at the lengthy chapters. They make me happy to no end, especially since I like this fanfiction more than most of the others. I'm still eager to see Malik. I've waited for six chapters, and have not seen him appear. I know I'm a worthless, impatient reader, but I must see him. It's an obsession. He isn't written about very much, (Contrary to popular belief. There aren't many GOOD stories with him in them, that I can grow attached to.) and when he actually IS seen, he only gets a small appearance before he has to exit through the other side of the stage.

All in all, I adore it. You could have been more specific with the surroundings and appearances than deciding to blab about Ryou's personal life, but this belongs to BOTH of you. It's not my say. I love it, I love the characters, and the idea is priceless. You actually forced me to enjoy the hybrid pet shop theme. And I also love Peggy. So, extra points for you! Please continue soon. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens.

Rex made me giggle madly.
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From ANON - sglily on December 12, 2005
Well... you weren't kidding when you told me there'd be some angst! Damn it! Poor Ryou! He needs some lovin'! (and NOT Pegasus! *wink*wink*) I loved how Rem said, "Gosh darn it!" What the hell? Make her swear like a sailor for fuck's sake! ; ) Marik... the poor guy... he's in love with the bunny. It's so cute how he protects Ryou bunny (well, without all the blood and bashing of heads against glass enclosures and all!). And, Ryou... all drugged up and senses all screwed up. He just wanted some reassurances! I loved how he dug his way over to Marik... and Marik licked his wounds... ahhhhh... And, now Ryou bunny is shacked up with Rex. Cruel. Mean. Nasty. That would be you, dear! JUST kidding. I so love this story. I also enjoy Burning Sea naturally because the hot little one and his mate are in it (R/B) so I look forward to an update when you can. A month away from the 'net? Ouch! But, we'll have loads of stuff to catch up on after you get back online, right? Hint hint hint... pen... paper... type like a madwoman... Thanks for a great story and a very Merry Christmas to you, dear!
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From ANON - Hiira on December 11, 2005
since you asked for two reviews and and you gave me two chapters, I think I should do that.
I feel so worried about ryou.
dun! dun! dun! it is ryou's doom's day!
although I was guessing about this coupling I now see it was true.
it is quite unique (but not weird!) to see a bunny and a lion as a couple.
Oh! how wonderous world is ahead of me to find out as more and more chapters will come up and show me how they will live together!
love ya, and love your fanfic!
I got to go and study now so if there is late review please understand. T_T

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From ANON - Hiira on December 11, 2005
oh! this chapter was soooooo~~ funny!
I love how Yami acts! He is so adorable and hilarious.
and it is so nice to see ryou have someone who cares for him.
and you know what is so great? there are two chapters!
sorry for late review. I have final exam, and actually I am suppose to be reading this right now, rather I should be studying...
hmmm... oh well.. too late.
anyway loved it!

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From ANON - Cheshire on December 11, 2005
I love your story. Keep going, your donig a great job!
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