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Reviews for The Jungle

By : hatochiisai

From ANON - Velvetina on August 14, 2006
Aww, bless this was such a sweet yet heartbreaking chapter. I find myself agreeing with Bakura in this chapter pretty much all of the way through. I mean normally he has me groaning at how dense/stupid he's being at something but this chapter he showed what was under tha bravardo and I really liked that.

Oooh, and now the police have almost definate proof that hybrids are humans *cheers* we're getting somewhere to resolving the whole situation...that is so cool!
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From ANON - menacingk on August 14, 2006
I really think that Yami is hiding behind Bakura and Marik. He's being dumb. I really loved this chapter and I can't wait to see how Otogi is taking his transformation.
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From ANON - lokivsanubis on August 13, 2006
Ryou's a whore... there i said it and i can't wait for more. Go Bakura and Marik trying to make a living good for them and Malik needs to deal with his problem with porn. he's like that guy from 40 Year old Virgin. OMG he total is i could total see Malik making a BEST COME SHOTS 2006 DVD to watch with Bakura. GOD my eyes!!! Update soon.
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From ANON - soulless on August 07, 2006
what the HELL is wrong with ryou!!! he's usually not this horny, and why haven't you had marik get ryou back and make sure that they will never see pegasus again?!?! ohhh, i hate that guy! update soon, and ryou better get back to marik soon or i... well... i can't really do anything, but i sure as hell will be mad!
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From ANON - sglily on August 06, 2006
Still loving the duo of Marik and Bakura... they are just so crass and irritating one can't help but to love them! The bickering between them, Yami, and Seto continues to be highly amusing. I'm glad that Malik didn't get it on with the bitch in the hole. Enough said about that little "indescretion". I REALLY didn't enjoy Ryou going all (as Malik had accused him of before) whore on Pegasus regardless of his messed up tendancies. It was very DISTURBING that he (Ryou) was actually initiating sex. Pegasus once again had barely a grip on his more base needs. Ahhhh... yuck! Well written as always. You know I'll be back to find out just what will happen next... ; )
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From ANON - Velvetina on August 06, 2006
I love this story...but again I cannot help like the bad guy. I mean okay Peggy was very very mean to Ryou in the start but he's being so cute with him now I...argh I have got to stop this.

This chapter was hysterical, though the ice cube incident made me blink and blush slightly. Very, veyr kinky. Hehe. However I did love Ryou getting all sexual and teasing Peggy and Malik. I could just imagine it whilst he managed to stay looking entirely innocent.

Hehe, Maliks has crabs. *Rolls on floor* Loved that moment so frickin much.

You really had me worried for a moment about Yami and Seto, I mean Prideshipping or what. But I've seen from your deviantart account how the pair of them get to be on a slightly more level footing so when I remembered that I chilled a bit but still *wipes brow* close one!
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From ANON - miku on August 04, 2006
Bwahahaha! Malik has been tmporeraly abandoned. I wonder how he is doing with his hole in the sand.. Oh well. Keep up the good work! xxx
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From ANON - menacingk on August 03, 2006
I don't have words for how wonderful this story is. It makes my day when it is updated. I can't wait for more.
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From ANON - sglily on August 03, 2006
I don't know who is more dense - the Ryou bunny or Pegasus... Ryou has let a lot slip in his conversations with his master and I was barely able to contain myself when it became pretty damn evident that Ryou had to have been in contact with Marik. Also, since seeing Marik again, the Ryou bunny has been REALLY off kilter which one would think a paranoid Pegasus would have picked up on - especially since he had "overheard" Ryou and Malik talking back at the house about comparing Pegasus and Marik. This whole chapter was just frightening. We got to see just how twisted Pegasus is - and so did Ryou. I was once again waiting for Pegasus to have one of his rants and go off on the Ryou bunny for basically calling him insane. I guess the whole premise of the chapter was to show how screwed up Ryou is being torn between Marik and Pegasus as mates - and oh, by the way silly bunny... your master didn't need you to give him any ideas as to KILLING OFF the competition! I know I am skipping all over the place but my head is still spinning with Pegasus and his willingness all of a sudden to treat Ryou more humanlike. I don't like it... And all of this talk about love... oh, boy... it's gonna get ugly, isn't it? Pegasus sort of hinting that he would allow Ryou to see his friends and then backing out on that half-assed promise. This was a very disturbing chapter to me. Well, written - don't get me wrong! - just more of the mindgame shit that Ryou doesn't need...
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From ANON - Strife on August 03, 2006
Nooooooooooooo. Ryooooooooooooooooouuuuuuuuuuuu. Don't tell Peggy about the club.
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From ANON - Zoe on August 03, 2006
I can't help but think that Pegasus being turned into a Lemur would solve sooooo many problems.

If he was an animal, he wouldn't be able to own hybrids, so Ryou and Malik could be adopted by Kaiba.
If he could somehow prove he was human, it would prove that at least SOME of the other hybrids were also once human.
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From ANON - A: on August 03, 2006
HI! ^^ Sorry I haven't had time to review this properly again...but anyways!

This was a great chapter. Darn you for actually getting me into Pegsy/Ryou. >_O At first I merely read it for the angst, but during this chapter, I actualyl caught myself thinking, "...This...is...really cute." And...it...is? XD I'm still reluctant to admit that Pegsy/Ryou isn't that bad. i'm a Marik/Ryou fanatic for life. ANd Bakura/Malik.

Out of curiosity, why won't Pegasus let Malik mate Bakura? I mean, technically, Pegasus isn't Malik's mate, therefoer Malik CAN mate Bakura, can't he? I know Pegasus doesnt' like Bakrua, but tha'ts nly cause Pegasusdoesn't like Marik, who might steal Ryou AS A Mate, HIS MATE, no less. SO...why wont' he let Malik and Bakura meet?

Just a curious question. Great chapter. I always love a good pegsy/ryou slight-angst fluff. Althouh, I'm not sure why, but Ryou's lost some of his initial innocent asking for being human...he actually sounds a bit...idon't know.....(don't hate me! T_T) whiny...asking Pegasus for all these things...and so quickly too. I mean, he asked for his trip, got it, then immeidatel, he's not happy, and asks for clotehs, adn gets it...I mean...before, if he got a a piece of fruit, he woudl've been HOMG I LUVE PEGASUS KISS KISS HUG HUG. but now...he doesnt' seem to be very satisified at all until he becomes fulyl human...

anyways, great chapter. ^^ Au revoir!
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From ANON - Roach on August 03, 2006
This story frustrates me. It's too frustrating. Arg!
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From ANON - Freai on August 01, 2006
Okay, I'm finally reviewing. I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! >.< I've read it from the begining and I think a reviewed... once or twice. Sry, I'm just lazy. But I'm reviewing this time! I loved Malik in this chapter. ^_^ He makes me laugh a lot.

Alright, reason for reviewing. FANART! Haha, beacuse I'm cool like that. http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/37241976/

And I also wanted to ask; would you possibly/at all/mind if I drew a comic of this story? Pretty please! I thought the above picture would make a good cover once I get around to CGing it. I know that the story is a lot since it's +30 chapters, but I'd be willing to draw it. I'd be traditional too, black-outline and real maga tones. Can I? PLEASE!!!

~ Freai

P.S. Awesome chapter! ^_^ Update soon!
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From ANON - sglily on July 31, 2006
I am still not OK with the fact that Pegasus has been so lenient... especially in regards to the plush animals in the likeness of Marik and Bakura for his "pets" or the fact that at least Bakura's name has been kicked around in his presence. I sense something bad brewing... Regardless, Ryou's little chat with Pegasus concerning his feelings about wanting to be more human went about as could be expected. Once again I was surprised that Pegasus didn't go off on one of his nastier tirades and start beating the shit out of the Ryou bunny. The resort for masters and their hybrids was interesting. I was surprised once again that Malik was so into chasing some tail - especially since Ryou kept bringing up Bakura. And now the Ryou bunny is getting ill... all that meat is catching up to him, eh? Interesting chapter! Look forward to the next update as usual!
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