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Reviews for The Jungle

By : hatochiisai

From ANON - sglily on July 06, 2006
Oh, my... so much going on in this chapter. It's nice to see Ryou Bunny happy for a change - for the most part - again... hint, Hint, HINT! ; ) The interaction between Ryou and Marik is very sweet and deliciously hot at times. My review here is going to be random thoughts as I remember what I found of note so forgive my ramblings all over the place... That Bakura was smothering Ryou with affection (especially after the revelation of the "little" altercation of sorts concerning how Ryou treated Malik recently) was very unexpected and cute. What was even MORE shocking was that I highly doubt that Bakura was "kidding" when he suggested a threesome with Marik and Ryou AND most importantly that Ryou was OK with that! Well, hell! He's a fucking bunny after all! (I had visions of that VISA commerical where the man customer at the pet store is trying to buy a bunny with some other form of credit and the bunny keeps multipling as time ticks by and question upon question is posed to him when VISA would have been much quicker!) I laughed hard at that! The mud slinging - literally - was hilarious! Ryou is a naughty bunny who already has his lion lover wrapped. I REALLY, REALLY, REALLY enjoyed the chase before the wild passionate animal sex. That was... just... well... for lack of a more original description... fucking HOT! OH, yeah... I was really liking that! But, damn it Ryou bunny! Shut the hell up about going back to Pegasus while your lion mate is pounding into you! I'm surprised that Marik didn't go limp for God's sake! I knew Marik was going to bite him because, as you said, lions do that while mating... as do tigers... ... ... yeah... viciously... eh hem. So, the shit that already hit the fan is now being flung around and is splattering the room - sort of like that mudslinging event earlier. I hope that Pegasus doesn't find out about Ryou's little rendezvous with Marik but I find that doubtful and wishful thinking. Nice chapter although thinking about what is to occur next - and which is inevitable - doesn't promote warm and fuzzy feelings...
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From ANON - Melon on July 06, 2006
GFDhjher and other worthless key presses of exhaustion and anger! You only update with one chapter, after so many wait more than a week for these stories?! What's wrong with you?! D:< And then, there's no Pegasus or Malik in it. FWrggrht some more. I want to claw your eyes out with my weak, tattered little nails. Reviews, my foot. Be selfless and think of the poor little people, whose brains are melting and imploding with the long waits for a completed story to be finished!

Ahem. I love your story. It makes me happy. :D
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From ANON - Anon on July 04, 2006
Okay, I've been whoring on this story since the fourth chapter, it's high time I participate in the extolation.
Your characterisation of Pegasus is just exquisite. You elaborate his canonical sex offender creepiness beautifully, coloring within the lines so to speak, extending his character into a sickeningly appealing, self-serving, self-indulgent sociopath, manipulating his wealth like no bourgeois mentality or morality would be capable of. Like a blonde Hannibal Lecter. Or something. He encapsulates the perdition of the rich, so engorged with luxuriant faculties he can actually buy falsities to shield himself from his own imagined inadequacies. His possessive fascination with Ryou, as superbly demonstrated at the end of the newest chapter (32 flavors of fucked up, by the way), effectively shicks the kit out of that sissy heterosexuality tryst those sillies at the studio set him on, and replaces his motivation towards flaming craziness very nicely indeed. Which a lot of fanfiction tends to just feck over. But not you! You have an adorable little commercialist despot, there.
And... Ryou is cute. Generic immasculated uke bunnyboy from hell. But *soooo* shodding cute. And Marik is cool, Yami's newfound avian idiocy is funny, so on, so forth, it's already been covered.
And, of course, you're the best for updating as regularly as you do, and the chapters are massive, too! Oooooooo I luff you.
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From ANON - sglily on June 28, 2006
OH, GOD! THE RYOU BUNNY IS GOING TO BE HAPPY (and maybe get lucky...) FOR AT LEAST ONE NIGHT! You know... you two are EVIL! Because, obviously, the Ryou Bunny has to return to the fucking pig Pegasus and this little glimmer of happiness is going to be extinguished mighty quick... it's almost worse than if Ryou Bunny hadn't seen Marik Lion at all! But, hell, I'm not going to complain because I am looking forward to the next chapter (which you better freakin' post before you go on hiatus, by the way!) which hopefully will be full of bunny and lion smex... Well, hey, it's wishful thinking at least! Loved the chapter with all the emotions bouncing around like crazy. The surprise reunion was very sweet and heartbreaking all at once. I'm glad that Ryou Bunny wasn't THAT broken that he was able to be comforted and still feel the love from Marik. And the end scene with Malik and Pegasus... you go, Malik! Spunky little shit! I hope that he keeps his spirit. I loved that he pretty much told Pegasus that he (Malik) is on to the sick bastard (Pegasus). Very nicely done!
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From ANON - gentle-writer on June 28, 2006
this is soooo good, keep going!

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From ANON - Silvershadowfire on June 27, 2006
Seto Kaiba should be locked up in a fucking cage for that. Pegasus too. They know what the hybrids are, obviously; and that makes them liable, not only for Yami and Ryou but for every last one of those people that are being used as pets.

I hope Yami doesn't give in to Seto. I know that's the pairing you want, but I hope it ends up on equal grounds.
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From ANON - Silvershadowfire on June 27, 2006
Well, this makes things interesting. I wonder how long it will be before Ryou figures out that Pegasus is the one who did this to him. He's not stupid, after all, and this whole thing just reeks of a setup - at least it would to me.

Great few chapters, and I shall continue on reading!
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From ANON - lokivsanubis on June 27, 2006
Another great chapter. Yami is such a little perky cock hitting on that hen in front of Seto and all. Hope for a MarikX Ryou scene. Update soon.
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From VashRyou on June 26, 2006
Wow, I have to admit... Very good. ^__^
I was searching randomly on the site awhile back, right about the time the site was experiancing all the trouble. I found this...
And I'm glad I did. I started reading it, and got to about chapter seven. I had to get off the computer, and when I got on the next day, the site was all freaky.
I spent a VERY long time clicking back and forth between error pages and the mainsite, and used several different web browsers. But, I finally managed to read the rest of the chapters. I waited until the site came back up... And there were more chapters up. I was overjoyed, I thought that the fic had been canceled! (I was horrified that it had been, and I was expecting the worst. V.V)
Kudos; this story has been one of the very few pieces of literature recently that has kept me up nights reading it, and coming here every day to see if it has been updated. The story is very good, and I can't say I haven't enjoyed other things... *Shifty*

The only thing that got me is that up until recently, I had Marik/Malik mixed up (Since I haven't browsed this place in awhile, I forgot the order.) The way I portray "Marik" (Normal, I guess called Malik?) is of a cute goofball. And it fit the part... And I portray "Malik" (What I took as "Yami-Marik") as a tough guy, so that locked in as well. It's stuck like that in meh brain, I can't make it switch now >___
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From ANON - yunasgrace on June 26, 2006
why do you do this... you only wrote about Malik at the end of the chapter *whines*
Didnt Rem think that Pegasus could come in during the day to see Ryou... what would she do if that did happen *ponders*
im really glad that you updated it faster than usual and good luck with the rest of the story.

yunasgrace
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From ANON - Anon on June 26, 2006
I fucking adore Pegasus. Go Pegasus! Pointlessly and selfishly decimate the contentment of countless innocents!
...what?
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From ANON - sglily on June 23, 2006
As you know, I am not a big fan of Yami and definitely not with Seto in the mix; however, I find the conversations between these two in your fic in particular to be really witty! Bakura and his fixation with grubs is too funny... I like that Marik is taking care of Tuc and Nod for the Ryou Bunny. I also got a chance to checkout your pictures of some of your hybrids and I have to say that Bakura is by far my favorite... it was that HUGE ass fluffy tail that did it! Skunk boy! Gotta love him!
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From ANON - lokivsanubis on June 23, 2006
And the plot thickens... Yami is finally flying oh yes. (pushes Yami out of 50 story building) Opps? -_-;;; Oh well. And know poor sexy hot Malik is sick too. What will Ryou tell Bakura? I mean if i was bakura i would kill him if he told me anything about how he acted towards Malik after all Ryou's really not the jelous type well he is but then he feels really bad afterwards. Love your art acount Ashmose looks so sexy. Update soon. Be looking.

Lokivsanubis
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From ANON - Camille on June 22, 2006
I saw your art and God! Malik looks good as a Fennec! They're naked????? So Ryo runs around the house like that? Oh Lord! They don't look too animalistic. I don't know how anyone could mistake them for anything else. Yugi is going to be a racoon and Syrus is going to be in it? Oy! How does Yugi get captured? I look forward to more. I hope Seto gets them in time.
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From ANON - yunasgrace on June 22, 2006
How could you do that to poor little CUTE Malik. everyone is against Malik and all the odds are against him... even the authoress is putting poor Malik in these life and death situations. So due what i have read in the last few chapters i now procliam myself... Yunasgrace protector and guardian of Malik and all other cute hybrids. *shows badge she made earlier* ^^
Another great chapter loved Yami being thrown off of the balcony XDDDDDD
And i really do think your cruel... ending it there for another week... i wanna know how malik is *whines*
Also i saw your artwork and LOVED IT. makes me want a hybrid even more... who cares if it isnt morally right ^^

good luck writing the rest of the story
yunasgrace
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