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Reviews for Hell's Cradle - The First Trimester

By : MizumiBlu

From on October 08, 2006
*LMFAO at the "Punked" part* xD; Yes! Die Ashton Kutcher! Wait does that mean that Seto was "Punked" before? THAT might be an interesting story!! Ha hah!!

Aweee poor Seto! ::huggles him and glares at Jou::
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From ANON - super_uke_seto on October 08, 2006
Yo that was a good chapter updated soon
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From ANON - jess on October 08, 2006
yay for preggy seto! still love dis story so update soon.
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From ANON - LadyVirgo91656 on October 08, 2006
I think the doctors should have realized that if Seto was pregnant who the father was and let him stay. They did more harm than good. When it was finally verified Jou could have been there as support for Seto and not ending up trying to pick up the pieces. Now as it is Seto is going to have to tell and convince Jou by himself without proof that he is pregnant and too top this off too mant people know and the media when it gets out will have a field day. Not all medical personel will keep this private. Money can make people do some unethical things no matter how much it will end up hurting people. I just hope Jou and Seto can weather the storm that is coming their way. Sure Seto's in shock. He just found out he's pregnant and Jou should have been there as well. Some doctors just don't care. I just hope they don't try an use Seto as some sort of lab rat. Update Soon.
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From ANON - Drachenaugen on October 01, 2006
SO I�m now Drachen a.k.a. ?The cute reviewer' huh? LOL I really haven�t been called cute by any other person but you, so it really tickled my funny bone when I read that. Thanks!

Ok, the first paragraph of this chapter is worth gold :) It�s written in a way that makes you think the poor soul has last everything including his family, job and even the house pet LOL Sorry Seto, but it�s time to let that peanut butter go after all.

Also, Mokuba is so well characterized in this chapter *pats Mizu for a job well done* First of all, he really shows his �Kaiba� side, researching all the info about he pregnancy, having to know every little thing there is to know about the whole matter to handle it better. And then he acts �exactly� like the curious child he should be at his age and does the whole tummy feeling thing (which btw, was one of the cutest things I have ever seen! *glomps Mokie*). Btw, I am SO proud of the "that is wrong on so many levels" bit because I'm really bothered by incest. To mistake the difference between brotherly love and sexual interest is just unforgiveable in my eyes *claps furiously for Mizumi*

Poor Jou didn�t have any luck with his 'methods of conviction' LOL This also adds a bit of reality to the fic, poor Seto isn�t always going to want sex (though I hope he does, cause then I get good smut *lewd thoughts*). Can�t wait for next chapter and all the different reactions there will be, and I�m sure the baby will be accepted sooner or latter by both parents (the uncle is already happy with the idea as we all saw).

And now the bit shocker of the fic, Marik! Now I must say you really managed to fool me there 'cause at first I though Egypt + battle city + purple eyes = Marik. But then he refered to Seto as High Priest and mentioned not dying and though (like I mentioned in my e-mail) "maybe this guy is from ancient Egypt" and thus ruled Marik out. Now the whole idea I had in my head changes drastically but now unpleasantly. I have always loooved Yami Marik (it is the yami right?) because he has such a cool character design! Really, the author did the *best* color choice with this villain. Plus I remember I used to giggle madly when whatching the show and looking at all those crazy expressions he always made, as well as weird things like licking his lips and all that, he's wonderfully insane :D So yeah, I can�t say I�m bothered by this change of perspective for the fic at all. Now what I�m truly curious to know is not why Marik wants Seto (I mean hell, it obvious, he�s THE sexy Seto Kaiba) but why does he want to have children with him? O.o I hope that gets a explanation at some point (even if that point is very far away just yet) because I really need to know why. Sure, the idea of a litter of evil chibi Marik�s running around causing mayhem is as cute as hell (in a real evil sort of way), but it does bring up some questions.

Well Mizu, as always, great job and keep the good stuff coming!!!

Note: It appears that my reviews keep getting longer even if it isn�t intentional �_O

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From ANON - Samantha Kaiba on October 01, 2006
You have to update soon....I have to find out what Seto is going to be like when he wakes up and when Joey gets to him....just please update soon
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From ANON - Shadow2007 on October 01, 2006
:D YAY w00t! ^_^ you UPDATED! *Does a dance* This story ROCKS! Seto is so funny :P! o.o' did you think i was mad? Sorreh T-T im not mad i was just wonderin! ok *Begin Rant* SO MARIK IS THE DIRTY BASTARD.... OMG IF HE TRIES ANYTHING ILL SHOVE HIS STUPID ROD UP HIS ASS ........ EYE PART FIRST!.....*end rant* Woo can't wait for the next update! Poor seto...
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From ANON - Annya on October 01, 2006
Good as always, please continue ^^. I'm so intrigued :P.

Bye!
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From ANON - girlo on October 01, 2006
OH NO! Collapsed! And sinister Marik, always up to no good. i guess... I don't really read stories with him in them that much, but from what I gather, he's not the nicest guy. Anyway, I can't wait for more!
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From ANON - jess on October 01, 2006
ewwwww!!!!!!! i can't believe seto touched a used preg. tester thingy. that's just nasty. and he collpased too....poor seto. pregnancy is snot his thing. but that's ok cause i love ur story so update really soon.
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From on October 01, 2006
@_@ You had me on the freaking edge of my chair waiting on this ; ;
Its really good though. Poor Set-chan *huggles him*
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From ANON - paranoidcharlotte on October 01, 2006
Yay their gonna find out in the next chapter *claps* I've said it before and I'll say it again I LOVE A HORMONAL SETO HE'S SO CUTE WHEN HE'S BITCHY! Hehe I thought that was cute how Mokuba decided to touch Seto stomach and Seto was like WTF!?!? Hehe Jou thought he had another man in the car hehe! Oh in my review for Getting bi mai I forgot to mention that I thought that song you wrote was good it seemed to me like it could have been a real song (mind you if it was a real song I possibly wouldn't like it because I'm into the roaring like you're contispated, screaming, I'm so bloody depressed heavy metal kind of stuff... like slipknot WHOOT) anyway update real soon PPPLLLEEEAAASSSEE I've just finished year 12 (WHOOT!) so I have a lot more time to read fanfiction! ... oh my angelfish died..... the eel killed them... but I love my eel more so it's all good *runs of to play broken sword 4 and resident evil nemesis*
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From ANON - Anon on October 01, 2006
me- *bubbling with love from mizumiblu*
seto- =_= i don't feel good
jou- oh MY GAWD I KNOCKED UP MY FRICKEN BOY FRIEND
me- DUR! I could have told you that! and MARIK! BAD DOG SIT!
jou- *sits*
seto/me- >.> baka inu
mokuba- XD MY Nii-sama's going to have a BABY!
me- or a tribe, you KNOW secretly that Otogi and Honda have a little tribe of their own and didn't mention anything about it. *snickering*
honda- oh god
otogi- why did you tell her?
honda- >> we don't have one
me- sure....anyway...
seto- *passed out at docs*
jou- O.O >-< I shoulda gone wit 'im!
marik- *takes seto while jou's not looking* *a quiet* BAAHAHAHAHAHa...ha. ha.......ha
me- jou, seto's acting girly......again. Lamo
jou- shut up!
me- ....udate, so they don't kill me. :)
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From ANON - Velvetina on October 01, 2006
...Heeeey! They cut my review short!! **Sniff** Thats very mean of them. I basically spoke about how freaked out would Seto be if Mokuba really did have what he had? And how poor Jou got laughed at for actually having the right idea- for once. Though I'm not certain he's going to enjoy that 'I told you so' moment. And then I spoke about how I'm going to go get some sleep...with the wonderful Seto you've loaned me **Smile** Though I still want my old review back darn it!
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From ANON - Velvetina on October 01, 2006
**Huggles** Yeah I feel pretty dodgy, movement makes my head want to split in two. Awww, thank you very much for the loan of Sexy Seto, I'm sure he'll have me feeling great again in no time. **Strokes his hair** So nice! And yes I promise to return him in almost perfect condition **Grin**

The update was fine honey, its understandable that you are going to have weeks like that. And pillows are very comfy things aren't they? It is very hard to resist. Though I do have to say writers block sucks!! **Smile**

Mokie and Seto in this chapter **Squee** very very very very very very very very very CUTE. Dang they are so adorable together. Even when Mokie is creeping out his brother by stroking his stomach. But I do love the sneakiness 'Seto I'm ill...I think its what you've got...go to the doctor to make sure it isn't anything baaaad'
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