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By : cinque
  • From ANON - catti-dono on October 09, 2006
    You make Seto so human in this chapter...its has a unique taste....maybe with him being "human", you could have it where he helps bring back the Yamis for Yugi and Ryou? Really like the story....catti
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  • From ANON - LadyVirgo91656 on October 09, 2006
    Have Jou and Seto meet first. I think the hospital is a good place to start. Maybe not inside but outside they could be going in at the same time. And anyone who would hurt Seto that way makes me mad. Jou can really help him heal in more ways than one. If you do bring back the Yami's do it gradually. Putting Yugi and Ryou together at first is a great idea. But I don't know about them as a couple. They loved their Yami's too much. Maybe a simple kiss will spark the memory enough to bring them back. Maybe at first like a memory and then in a dream sequence. You can go from there. Love this premise. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - seto'swifey on October 04, 2006
    It least it's easy to tell that you are going somewhere with this. I think you're doing well! keep it up.
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  • From ANON - Dragon Kiana on October 03, 2006
    wow...i really like your story, i never saw a fic where Ryou and Yugi just lost it a little, but i'm glad that their together ^_^ they are so cute, same as Otogi and Honda. Now for the question...where is Seto? and how come he's not humping his puppy? u_u....need puppyshipping..oh and update soon...i love that pair their my fav.. Great job with your story


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  • From ANON - Bandit on October 03, 2006
    Cool I like it!
    Hope to see more!
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  • From ANON - LadyVirgo91656 on October 03, 2006
    Forgot something, you can e-mail me address is on profile or I can e-mail you just leave request on one of my stories and I will get back to you.
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  • From ANON - LadyVirgo91656 on October 03, 2006
    I found your story interesting. You have mapped out the lives of some of the characters beautifully. Jou doing the narration is great. I like POV's. If you do decide to continue one way to bring Seto into this is have Jou run into him in a night club. You should also think about the healing process for Yugi and Ryou. You have a sense on where you want to go with this I can see it. As for spelling and Grammar get someone who is adept in English to help you there. Spell check doesn't always pick up misspelled words, especially if the word you are using is spelt correctly. I am not flamming you. So take all this into consideration. For your first story you are doing good. So update soon.
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