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Reviews for Leave Me Alone: The Seto Kaiba Story

By : kaibastalker

From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 22, 2006
Lady in pink strikes again. I hope Seto can handle the situation ok. She acts like a real brat. Fast updates are great and this chapter is great. Update soon.
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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 21, 2006
Seto's got it bad, and yes he is always working. That is one of the reasons his company is such a success. When Bakura finally does make his appearance how will you protray him good, bad or indifferent for now. I know that in the show he is protrayed as pure evil with a lot of hidden agendas, and whos to say he doesnt remember Bakura it could just be all an act on his part to protect Bakura. Update soon.
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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 21, 2006
*smirks* I live with them because I love them...We're Family... *sweatdrops as Bakura teases Freddie about his virginity* Exuse me a moment...BAKURA LEAVE FREDDIE ALONE!! THE POOR GUY IS ALREADY TRAUMATIZED AS IT IS!!

Freddie: *sniffles*

Aww there there Freddie...it's okay *rocks Freddie in a motherly manner* Shh...I know *kisses the top of his head* He doesn't understand. Shh...Calm down baby it's okay..Now go do mommy proud and go kill Jason

Freddie: YAY!!! THANKS MOMMY!!! *skips off happily to kill Jason*

*sweatdrops* I gotta do that because otherwise He'll kill Bakura....

Marik: Mils...I'm inviting Seth and Seto over is that okay, along with Sephiroth, Axel and Marluxia is that okay?

*mutters* I don't have a choice....*shakes head* Why don't I have any normal friends?

*evertyone blinks at me*

Seth: define normal....

Normal is being a family with friends of the family and with everyone screaming names at each other...

Marik, Bakura and Freddie: What are we?

Family!

Seth, Seto, Marluxia and Axel: Who are we?

Friends of the Family!!

Marik, Bakura, Seth, Seto, Marluxia, Axel and Freddie: What do we do?

Screams names at each other!! have sex...yell some more...cry...yell

Everyone: Excatly

Ok I'm sorry...You're right...we're dysfunctional but at least we are normal ^^ No with that bit over and done with ^^ Freddie...Go kill Jason, MariK, Bakura have sex, kiss or something and you *pionts to Seth, Sephiroth, Seto, Marluxia and Axel* Try not to wreck the place *turns to to you* You have bebo..MSN or something...

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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 20, 2006
*nods head* Sadly...the poor guy has never had a cock up his ass

Freddie: *cries* just tell the whole world why don't you!! Everyone thinks I'm ugly!!

Marik: *sweatdrops* He's gay?

Bakura: *sweatdrops* He's a virgin?

*deadpans* Marik, Yes, Bakura, Don't you ever pay attention?

Bakura: Huh? what? *is distracted by Marik'a ass*

*mutters* Point proven

You: Another typical day in hell then?

*nods* unfortunately....
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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 17, 2006
Ryou is so sweet. In the anime if I remember right Ryou was not very well liked. Tolerated but not really liked. Bakura on the other hand was brash and in his own way protective of Ryou and would get upset with anyone that hurt him. I liked the way you captured the way he is in this chapter. Update soon.
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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 16, 2006
Freddie: *slashes up the medical dudes* heh heh heh

That was...interesting....*2 minutes later* OOOOOOO BLOOOD!!!

Marik: Blood where?

Bakura: *cuts Marik's arm* here *licks it* hmmm...

Marik *growls*

Freddie: *whimpers and cries*

Freddie grow up and get some girl or something....
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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 15, 2006
You're right too short. Introducing new characters is fine but let people get a better feel of them that way the chapters can be longer. *and i thought that some of my story chapters where short. she just won the trophy for short chapter status* Ohy my just thinking. *grins* Update soon.
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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou ^__^ on December 13, 2006
*smirks* Nah...they are alright really..

Freddie: *snorts* speak for yourself!! I DON'T WANT TO SEE GUYS GOING AT IT!! *sobs* I'm a virgin to the eyes and welll *blush*

Bakura: That is seriously scary

Marik: *looks over at Millie* You okay...

I DON'T EVER WANT TO SEE HIM BLUSH AGAIN!!!! AGGGHHHHH!!! SO SCARRRYYYYY!!!!!!!!

Seth: Meh...*goes back to fucking with Marik and Bakura*

Freddie:..........

*rocks* I'm not insane...I'm not insane.....I'm not insane....

Freddie: You keep telling yourself that....

*five minutes later*

Freddie: *rocks* I'm not insane.....
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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 12, 2006
Like this chapter Ryou is shy you didn't even take him out of character though when it comes down to it he can be pretty forceful. Are you planning to take this story to Battle City as well? Update soon
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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 10, 2006
*Marik Bakura and Seth send her death glares* Give her that tape and Mr. Shinnie gets it!!

*smirks and glares back* If Mister Shinnie gets it I lock you up naked in different cells for three years and I'll sell the tape on Ebay!

Marik: but you hate Ebay

*smirks* not if I'm the selling it I don't, I get profits ^^

Bakura: .......What are you going to?

*smirks* make several copies and sell on Ebay however this girl here...get's on for free

Seth: *eyes sparkle with an idea* LET'S RECORD YAMI AND YUGI AND SEE HOW THEY LIKE IT!!

Marik: *smirks* Or better still Amelia and Millie

*All three freeze as they watch Millie carefully.* I AM NOT BLUSHING AND DON'T YOU DARE DO THAT TO AMELIA!!! MARIK!!! GIVE ME THAT CAMCORDER NOW!!!!!!!!!!!

Freddie: yep just another typical day in hell

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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 10, 2006
*Marik Bakura and Seth send her death glares* Give her that tape and Mr. Shinnie gets it!!

*smirks and glares back* If Mister Shinnie gets it I lock you up naked in different cells for three years and I'll sell the tape on Ebay!

Marik: but you hate Ebay

*smirks* not if I'm the selling it I don't, I get profits ^^

Bakura: .......What are you going to?

*smirks* make several copies and sell on Ebay however this girl here...get's on for free

Seth: *eyes sparkle with an idea* LET'S RECORD YAMI AND YUGI AND SEE HOW THEY LIKE IT!!

Marik: *smirks* Or better still Amelia and Millie

*All three freeze as they watch Millie carefully.* I AM NOT BLUSHING AND DON'T YOU DARE DO THAT TO AMELIA!!! MARIK!!! GIVE ME THAT CAMCORDER NOW!!!!!!!!!!!

Freddie: yep just another typical day in hell

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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 10, 2006
Thank-you for saying I'm a good writer. Keep your eyes peeled for a new story. It will be posted within the next month. Also working on a sequel to my Vampire story. Now for my review. As much as I like Jou he can be such an ass at times. Yugi is so blind here it is not even funny and I like the way you had Seto pass the note to Ryou. Slick very slick. Update soon.
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From ANON - silver on December 09, 2006
The plot is unique and I like that. The writing and development of the character's emotions needs work.
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From ANON - Millie Ishtar Motou on December 08, 2006
Seth: The girl's right beautiful...

Bakura: Hn. I am not beautiful

Marik: *narrows eyes* Yes. You. Are

Millie: Damnit Bakura...if you were a girl...I'd rape you!!

Bakura: You can't rape the willing *smirks*

Damnit!! Oh well

Bakura: *purrs as Seth and Marik stroke him*

Marik and Seth: shhh...

Marik: *pulls off Bakura's shirt and kisses and bites his right nipple*

Seth: That's hot...*takes off his shirt and sits 'cutely' in front of Bakura's penis*

I'm feeling Sorry for Freddie...he has no idea what he is missing xx

Freddie: ..........*runs three miles*

Seth: I think he's homophobic

lol he's not....*whispers* he's a virgin!!!!!!!!!!!

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From ANON - LadyVirgo1956 on December 08, 2006
Ive seen a picture of Seto in an apron and very little else. And it was pink. Update soon.
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