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Reviews for Legacy of Shadows

By : reddragon
  • From ANON - Seto Takahashi on March 15, 2013
    I certainly like this fic. I feel that it holds more promise then most and would love to see another chapter.
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  • From RogueMudblood on May 13, 2012

    for reasons that only the legal department truly understood *snicker*

    I have to say, I like the way you describe the sounds in the scene. It's overlooked quite a bit, and I appreciate you taking the time to put those bits in and give the story more depth.

    (side note: [ ] are bbcode < > are HTML :) You have bbcode in your text.)

    The Black Friday bit was amusing. The whole scene - using military ordinance to break into a department store - was rather hilarious, actually.

    (typo: top fo)

    Okay, that .... that .... you had me in stitches, to be honest! And I could just imagine the reporter trying to catalogue that one for the news as well. Now, since at least one soldier got that footage on his cameraphone, will vlogs be making an appearance?

    Seriously, good showing! Sorry for the long delay on the review, but thanks for sharing, and I'm still looking forward to more! Happy writing!
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  • From RogueMudblood on January 02, 2012

    You made me laugh with their reasoning. Especially number five - priceless!

    That was hilarious! The whole scene where he describes what he's wanting to try in order to dispense with the dragon, and ending with “It should understand English, ma’am.” - it was perfect!

    One typo: “I hope I know what you are doing, Kaiba,”

    Question: Simonson starts off with the honorific "sir" which is normal in the military, then switches to "ma'am" - any particular reason (other than his overactive hormones, that is)? Just curious.

    I knew I'd enjoy the read if you updated! Thank you very much for sharing, and I'm looking forward to more.
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  • From RogueMudblood on November 24, 2011

    Technical note: you have a few typos that distract me. I had to stop for a few moments at "since a scandal". Thought I should bring it to your attention, as it appears auto-correct has struck again.

    I do love the way you opened the scene between Yugi and Tea. The tension you've already introduced is a marvelous starting point. And the conversation between Yugi and Kaiba was both telling and cryptic, an interesting combination.

    Your description of the creature in the sandstorm - including the sound of its wail - and Zane's reaction to it, has me very curious as to what precisely is causing this phenomenon.

    The incident with the dragon in Ohio was most amusing!

    I would be interested to see where you intended to go with this - surely you could not have intended this to be a one-shot with the setting you've created. You have a wonderful beginning.

    Thank you for sharing, and should you choose to continue, I'm certain I would enjoy the read.

    Happy writing!
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