Reviews for Whispers in the DarkBy : BlackGargie |
I would make it where Joey or Tristan go into labor and after they just deliver the baby or babies that Illust comes into the cell that there in and takes the babies away from their mother and decides the babies are suitable to be sacrificed or given to be raised buy a bad seed and that Yugi gets mad enough to unlock a secret type of power that you mentioned to Yami when he gave him the millennium puzzle and mentioned that he had a limited low level of magic but with the magical properties rising from the Earth that his body and the babies is there enough to be used against Illust and her assistant just enough to push them outside the cell and have one of the other pregnant Mother's close the cell door and Yugi destroying the set of keys she used to open the cell and she mentions that they were the only keys to open the cell but it didn't matter cause they could always make another set of keys and Yugi replies that it's better to keep her out and away from those that end up giving birth to their babies without her telling them weather there going to be sacrificed or taken away to be raised as a bad seed and that it's best for them to wait until their rescue butt as Yugi says this his babies get incontact with Yami while he is sleeping the images he sees of his babies are a bright silver ball of light and he knows that they are his children while in his sleep he hears their voice telling him the location of where Yugi and the others are at and that Malik and Tristan or Joey have given birth already and that they were fine and healthy but you hurry and that Yugi destroyed the only set of keys to keep Illust and her partner from checking taking the babies to be raised as a bad seed and that they need to hurry with every second of every day the monster in the abyss get stronger as every time he takes a host he deserves their life energy and their power and get stronger and closer to getting to be reunited inside his body and that before he does Yugi and the others will be the last sacrifice so he is strong enough to be revived ( Yugi's babies call the monster in the abyss this and because I can't remember how to spell his name and that they do not know what his name is. )
When you said it was creepy about Marik type of voice, I was impressed the way you put The Way Marik voiced his emotions towards the traitors of the clan I can't remember what you called Seth and his twin Seto and the others. I know that the monster that the bad seeds are trying to bring back from the abyss is not the same as the Shadow Realm is the round that Seth and Seto and the others live in Sky City is the real Shadow. So what is the round that Seth and Seto really called?
Why not have Seto or Mailk that there love is just like Seth and his mate love each other, why can't they have the same kind of love they have? But in an angry kind of waste probably make it in bold letters.
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