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Reviews for brighter mornings

By : Jigokuchan
  • From strangeliou on June 08, 2008
    I love it! Please continue and update soon! (well, I can't talk, I haven't even posted anything yet XD)

    Anyhow, I really really feel sorry for Ryou, I've read my share of Ryou torture fics but damn, that's sad. Also in a weird way I'm relieved(Relieved? That sounds wrong >.>) that he's 16, I thought (like Marik) that he was like 12! But then one wonders how early the abuse began, and then I feel even worse for the kid. I'm glad Marik found him and I hope he shows him the kindness the kid desperately needs. I wonder what good ol' 'Kura will be like =P And the millenium ring is the object Marik had to fetch, right? I wonder if it's gonna play some role in the fic. Haha, as terrible as this probably sounds, I'm so happy Marik is his murderous self, I've read too many fluffy cuddly Marik versions that it lost interested (don't get me wrong, I don't want him to act as a total jerk towards Ryou, although clearly there will be some rough moments, it can't be helped. I'm just glad he isn't inexplainable sweet cuddly wuddly)

    Ok, I think I'm done... no wait! no... yeah I'm done =3
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  • From Calcifer on February 17, 2008
    Wonderful work, J-chan! This story is intense, and somewhat different from the stuff I usually read. I'm definitely looking forward to your next chapter. Plot development and the speed at which the story is moving are your best points. However, I would suggest getting a beta reader to catch the small grammatical errors. While your story is otherwise excellent, those little things take away from the overall quality.

    Otherwise, keep up the good work!

    ~Angel
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  • From rukianeechan on February 16, 2008
    love it............love it to death.....Your wonderful...I just can't wait to read more...Malik is a born murder I'm so happy to see someone gave him his true job in their story....keep up the good work
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  • From CodyMThomas on February 16, 2008
    quite interesting. I would like to read more!

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  • From zombiebait86 on February 13, 2008
    I'd love to hear more
    J-xhan
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  • From electricfeints on February 13, 2008
    I like it so far, and we definitely need more of this pairing!
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  • From Kale1985 on February 10, 2008
    Please write more......Poor Ryou..
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  • From shadowmaster on February 08, 2008
    pretty good, you just need to disginguish between thoughts and the discriptive parts. i'm interested in seeing more.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 08, 2008
    This is great so far, I can't wait to read what will happen next. I would recommend either using quotation marks or italics for Mariks thoughts just to make the story easier to read. Good luck!
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