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Reviews for The Heat of Your Touch

By : affliction

From CodyMThomas on July 04, 2008
Dan needs to get a life and get over Joey before I have to kick his ass and then I'm pretty sure Seto will kill him. I loved how long the chapter was this time!
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From smalvina on July 04, 2008
hope jou will be O.K
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From melodyz07 on June 30, 2008
It was awesome!!!

The fighting scene was great!!! I loved how Jou was trying to restrain Seto. I mean it is good that he didn't make him leave but "forced" him to stay. That was violent but yet so deep and intense. We can sense very well the sadness of Jou and Seto.

And the lemon was hot.

I am happy that they have managed to solve this problem with Dan. I was really afraid that this incident with Dan might have messed up completely their relationship.

Can't wait for more. This story is so good. Please update!
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From KiraSahari on June 30, 2008
Hope they finally find a road to solve their problems! They really love each other! But a balanced relationship is not about one being Seme and the other being Uke, to love is to give not only to take, they would have a healthier relationship if they share the power because both are always fighting for the power, they have strong personalities, so they need to share themselves completely, like equals, the only way this two will be happy if they see each other as equals. Is different when in a couple one of them is very happy to submit to the other but I don't feel this is the case. Great job, I'm biting my nails!!!!
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From CodyMThomas on June 29, 2008
Oh this is getting REALLY good now! I really feel sorry for those two, so full od anger and rage... but I hope they are able to work things out.
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From Fluffyfangitl89 on June 28, 2008
awww, i love it!! all!!>< more!! i wanna read more!!
its good to see they've work through more issues and probs, theyll make it!!
i love Kaiba-sama's eyes..blue....
ur lemons...so..hot!!!O.O i love it!!>
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From KiraSahari on June 26, 2008
Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat!!!??? He is leaving!!!... well I think I understand why... you are right when you said that a relationship is more than just love, love is not enough, you need trust, respect and communication in a relationship to survive, they don't seem to have any, their relationship needs a lot of work, and they don't have the guts to really solve their problems, it is hard to tell others what is our weakness, our problems, torments and tribulations, is hard to talk about our own demons, but that will be even harder if you are not even able to admit their existence to yourself. Someone said that at the beginning love will be passion, passion will be fire but when that passion is extinguish you must have something deeper to keep going. I want a happy ending for this story but not every story in this life has a happy ending. Are they strong enough to fight for this love?... is it a lost battle? Is it too late? is there any hope?
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From HaNeul on June 26, 2008
NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! DX
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From melodyz07 on June 26, 2008
Oh man... that's so frustrating! now that Seto finally did his confession Dan came to mess everything up. I hate this Dan. Hate him!

It was so sad. I mean I understand very well Seto's feelings. I mean he for sure though that Jou was kissing for good Dan. That must have been so painful to see...

But I though that he would leave immediately and not sleep again with Jou ^^ The lemon session was HOT!!!

By the way, GREAT chapter! I love it. And it is very clear that your style of writing improved a lot. I so much love this story. It is sad, deep, sweet, simple...everything. You really write JouxSeto so well.

I am really excited for next chapter. I mean Jou will for sure not let Seto leave him that way without explanations. You really left us with a good cliffie^^

I really hope that you will get better. I know that I can't help you much but at least this review will make you a little bit happy and will make you maybe forget even for a little moment your problems...

Take care and hope that you will update soon!!! I am so excited for next chapter!
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From HaNeul on June 24, 2008
YAy! lol this is a good storY!
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From rukianeechan on June 24, 2008
you are doing wonderful. It's amazing how you touch the hearts of your readers this way. I can connect to seto since I know how it feels to be a cold-hearted bastard and treat your lover like shit and still feel the guilt and pain. I'm sure everyone here can relate to something in this story. You are great in creating the right atmosphere.All you have to add to your wonderful collection of talent and art is a little bit more work on your choice of vocabulary and maybe a little more proof reading. However, nothing really changes the fact that you are one true writer who knows haw to play the cards right. Please keep on writing.I just can't wait to read more.
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From KiraSahari on June 23, 2008
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I don't want to sound nasty but pleassssssssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!! just take a bottle of Tylenol for the pain and write FASTEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEER!!!! I am dying here!!!!! poor Seto, maybe if He is able to describe his feelings now it wouldn't be so important to Joe to know why Seto fell in love with him!, instead of saying I don't know or lest forget about it, just say how he feels.
It all start as an attraction, an amazing and beautiful attraction, it was not love at first sight and they didn't know really so much about each other but there were things that he didn't analize in the moment as part of Joe but he was able to feel them, like an instictive reaction to the other, both have the same reaction I think or at least it felt like that, one day they "thought" they hate each other and the other day they were just making out.
Maybe they were just protecting their hearts, they didn't know other way to show interest, like little kids that bother the girl they like in kindergarden, they were just acting like kids, they never thought about all the attention they paid each other and all the emotions that were awaken every time they clash, all that passion, all that need. By instict they fell in love, their brains maybe never analize the reasons behind that love but their hearts were looking clearly to each other. You don't love you just feel love and sometimes it doesn't matter how much your brain is kicking and screaming to you to run away from that love, you are not able to choose, it just happens. :P
PS: You know, the other day I was looking one cap from the battle city saga in English, when Joe found Kaiba and told him "Hey Kaiba do you want a piece of me?" It was sooooooooooo funny first and then so sexy because Seto accepted the challenge and I could almost hear Seto's voice saying in his mind "No puppy I don't want a piece... I want you completely"
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From melodyz07 on June 23, 2008
Man I really wish that your chapters are longer! Your story is really good!

I like so much Seto in his story. He changed in a good way through the years (and especially because of Jou^^)...he's actually more human. I liked how he was wandering in Jou's house trying to remember and to find answers.

I love the relationship between Jou and Seto in your story. It is complicated but beautiful.

Can't wait for the next chapter. I'm looking forward for Seto's explanations!
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From melodyz07 on June 23, 2008
Seto???!!! why don't you remember how you loved Jou????? (well it seems that it is not only Jou who wants to know but me too^^')

Great chapter!!! Very hot!!!

Oh I was surprised when I knew that both Jou and Seto have 25 years old. I don't know why I have always though that it happened couple months after the events of the show. So long time has passed and a lot of memories too...Seto has a lot to explain then^^

But I feel sad to see Seto and Jou so unsettled and suffering that way.

I love the deep feelings of this story.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Update!

and by the way, semeJou and ukeSeto is so hot!
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From Fluffyfangitl89 on June 22, 2008
omg, their getting along so well, yay!!!
so sweet i loved it!! but as a fateful reviewer and friend (least im deeming maself) im gonna start given more into my reviews(yes suggestions and not just "i love it"s) in of course da nice polite way(kiss up?) :)
details!! in depth descriptions, like using as many big detailed words as possible!! blah blah, ya know...i had dat(quite forcefully) shoved down my throat many times!! on da spelling grammar though, i quite honestly believe ur fine, u have improved, and so i dont think u really need a beta anymore!!>
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