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Reviews for The Heat of Your Touch

By : affliction
  • From Fluffyfangitl89 on June 22, 2008
    Aww, i still feel sorry 4 Kaiba-sama...
    Joey can be so stupid, but so cute!!
    lol, i love it so far anyways, though dat ch was a bit short so i dont have much to say :( still awesome!!
    oh and on beta, do u register or watever?(obviously i dont kno much about it)im curious:)sorry ill go look up sum stuff!! yay, maybe i am a chatter box, ne.
    time 4 da next ch, yay!!!
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  • From Fluffyfangitl89 on June 22, 2008
    Whaa, its heartbreaking!!! I hate it-I love it!!! da story's great!!
    u had me in tears!!(again) poor Kaiba-sama, its so wrong yet so perfect!!
    angst, drama, and all...I'm addicted!! gotta read more!! going to now actually!!
    sorry it took me so long -guilty pout- ive been busy, lol, but im glad im reading it now!

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  • From smalvina on June 22, 2008
    i want to know what next so don't stop till you finish the story
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  • From CodyMThomas on June 22, 2008
    that final line is awesome! and jounouchi has a real point. Continue improving this story. it's getting better!
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  • From melodyz07 on June 20, 2008
    Great chapter!

    Finally a calm moment between Jou and Seto^^

    I really feel pity for Seto. He's just so sweet for trying his best to fix the mess in his relationship with Jou but now Jou's feelings and confusion are more clear. And I understand very well that he feels confused. Maybe Seto and Jou has rushed things and so Jou feels overwhelmed by all the sudden love of Seto.

    But I understand perfectly that Seto feels depressed and mad. I wonder what is gonna happen next chapter.

    This story is simple but really intense and deep. I like it so much!

    You know, I don't really notice the grammatical mistakes because English is not my main language so I can't help you enough in that ^^' but if the other readers are criticizing so that means that you should pay attention more to the mistakes. I mean we all want the best quality for your story. It has great potential and really keeps us want to read more. So this was just a small advice in order to improve more this nice story.

    Ok then Update!
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  • From CodyMThomas on June 20, 2008
    MUCH better! I'm already seeing a big improvement! Thank you!
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  • From KiraSahari on June 20, 2008
    Great fic, I'm glad that people want to help you. Hope you find a beta soon, I can't do it because English is not my native language so my spelling and grammar skills suck!!! :P But you have all my support honey!!!. I hope this couple find a way to be together, really together, they need to work a lot, any of them is perfect so they need to forgive and forget, maybe start all over again, learn to know each other, but it is going to be hard if both don't compromise, they need to talk a lot and at the same time they need time alone to analyze their feelings, yes you don't think love, you feel it... but sometimes even love needs a chance to find balance between the heart and the head. In this particular case they need to think their feelings, because their relationship is in some way damaged.
    You know, just yesterday I saw the movie "sex and the city" and the problems between Steve and Miranda made me remember your story, it is not the same case, but the root of the problem was similar, they had terrible communication!!!
    Maybe Seto and Joe don't know why they fall in love, someone said that there is a fine line between love and hate, maybe because they are powerful emotions and to change from one to the other is a matter of just one step. Maybe is not important anymore to know why they fall in love, maybe is more important to learn if they still love each other and if they want to stay together, if their relationship is worth fighting for.
    This is my favorite couple, so you can imagine that I want them to stay together, I'm a hopeless romantic!!! You know, dating is not a bad idea, if the past is so horrible and if their relationship was so bad, why not forget about it?, Why can they start again? Is is too hard?, Is it something so important?, Is something worth to remember?.
    In some way they feel like two perfect strangers so why not meet each other again?, start from zero, the chemestry and the attraction between them is still alive and it could be a start to give it a try.
    It is just like when you see someone you like and suddenly you feel this need to meet this person, it is a matter of getting the guts to go there and introduce yourself, guts to give yourself the chance to see if something can happen.
    So maybe they just need to try to know each other and see if there is more than just attraction between them, every relationship start with some way or level of atracction, it could be physical or psyquical, is not the most important but it is a beginning, and if you are lucky, later it will transform into love, so it could be hard or could be as simple as forget everything in the past and simply say a "Hi! nice to meet you, my name is..."
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  • From mkay3223 on June 19, 2008
    Yay! I'm so glad you continued it! I'm looking forward to later chapters.
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  • From rukianeechan on June 19, 2008
    I really like this story. I really do. I think you have so much talent and I think you're doing good for you first story. However,good grammar does make it better and easier for readers to understand. Why don't you get a beta and have him edit your story. My guess is English is not you first language or you really don't care about writing. Still, this story has a lot to say. Seto's attitude and Jou's reactions... They are all signs of your creativeness and writing talents.Please consider being more careful with the grammar or having someone proofread it for you.You really have it in you and I just feel sad that many people don't see it just because of some syntaxes and fragments.
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  • From CodyMThomas on June 19, 2008
    you said "I’ve never and I will never pay attention to grammar…"

    That's a real pity, because the lack of good grammar and spelling is what is holding this back from being an absolutely fantastic story. Even though I can sort through and eventually understand what you are trying to say, all the mistakes are very distracting. And if you as the author, can't be bothered to care about how your own work looks or sounds to others so that they can read it easily, how can you expect others to take you or your work seriously? As a writer your work is a reflection of yourself. This story has real potential, but you are crippling it horribly by not fixing the grammar and spelling. And if you really can't do it then get a beta to help you. This story has a lot of very good potential, but it needs work.
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  • From melodyz07 on June 18, 2008
    I really do like this story. It is intense with all these mixed emotions and it is very hot too^^.

    But I really don't understand Jou... why is he acting that way? I mean he got sex like he wanted and Seto is vey kind with him. He even asked Jou to beat him if that will make him feel better. So why? He is angry from what exactly?

    As for Seto... I really pity him. He's really touching trying to save his relationship with Jou.

    Can't wait for the next chapter. This story is so original!

    Update please!
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  • From melodyz07 on June 18, 2008
    That was HOT!!!!!!!!!

    Jouseme x Setouke is so great!!!!!!

    Please continue!!!!
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  • From KiraSahari on June 18, 2008
    Don't worry if your story has some grammar or spelling mistakes, the most important part is that your are trying. "Those who criticize others often are not perfect, either" but "constructive criticism most be always appreciated". Try to appreciate advice, sometimes criticism can be hard to take but many times is good-hearted and sometimes people just want to be mean. Is very easy to talk, criticize and insult others. The most important is to keep trying, improve your skills, don't give up and turn a deaf ear to foolish words.
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  • From smalvina on June 17, 2008
    go Jou
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  • From Fluffyfangitl89 on June 17, 2008
    yeah, dat was a lot different!! lol but i liked it, da ice trick was so original!! ive never seen anything lik it, lol, but it was weird seeing Kaiba-sama beg!!>
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