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Reviews for Genie Yami in a Bottle

By : YuseiFudosNo1Fan
  • From sophiedrown on November 16, 2010
    This is cute and sweet please update it soon ^-^
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  • From kuramasgirl on November 09, 2010
    another thing... make longer chapters... it gets annoying when theyr so short. sometimes it might make a reader less likely to continue if theyr getting less "meat." and so far this story has no form of antaganist... even if its only anzu it would still b better then no1. b/c having no antaganist makes a story about a magical genie kinda boring. it would b really cool if some1 showed ^ w/ an evil genie as an antaganist. leading the way for some really cool magical duels btwn yami and the evil genie or if u really want to have a whole group of evil genies. since i havent seen any evidence of ryou, bakura(except the mention of the thief), malik, marik(yami malik), pegasis or any of the ppl that worked for the oricalcos, u can use them. though if u use ryou make it so that hes under mind control or something b/c hes like yuugi in the being of light department.

    all around u have a good writing style. please update soon. i would like some feed back on my sugestions 2 u. if only just 2 say ull think about it.
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  • From kuramasgirl on November 09, 2010
    once again ur going to fast w/ the relationship. i can understand yami falling in love at 1st sight. it can be explained away as magic tieing him to his soul mate and he was able 2 sence that yuugi was the person he was destined 2 b w/. yuugi on the other hand is human and would not have admitted to falling in love w/ a supernatural being as soon as they met, mentally admit attraction to the genie yes, but not love at the begining. heck at the begining he wouldnt even admit the attraction out loud except w/ blushing when yami did something romantic or complimented him. yuugi would probably be very freaked out at 1st 2 see a genie appear out of thin air, write it off as a dream, go 2 bed, & fully expect to wake ^ 2 the genie & bottle just being figments of his imagination.

    oh & btw its Otogi Ryûji (in the japanese style so Otogi is his last name). Ootachi is not Duke Devlin's japanese name.
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