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By : lostintheheartland
  • From KeiMaxwell on July 26, 2012
    That sentence had me grinning like mad. It's a line just screaming Kaiba.
    Mai has given me goosebumbs. Holy fuck. It's so great to see, for once, somebody not just write her off as a gold digging bitch. It's obvious she was affected by their son's death, so that gives her at least a minimum of sympathy points. But dude, Kaiba is right, go to the doctor!
    I wanted to bang my head on the desk during that scene in the limo with Kaiba mentioning the wax. Oh. My. God. xD I like how you use the OCs, the cats etc. not just to add something of your own, but to show some other sides of Kaiba as well. :3 And haha, fits that Kaiba would put something in the system to know what Jou was talking about him, ahahahaha! xD I like how you really show all the clues, what Jou is uncovering bit by bit. Many authors lack detailed descriptions in these kind of scenarios or don't make sense with them, but you're doing great so far.
    That little scene in the cafeteria is cute. xD It's always nice to hear things from Kaiba's employees' POV.
    Ahaha, I'm glad I've read The Half-Blood Prince a long time ago, or this would have been a murder spoiler. xD
    Hm, I'm not sure how I feel about the maid calling her boss "Kaiba-souchou". For one, if the story is in English, I don't need Japanese terms in there when there is an English synonym that fits. Using "-san" and the like I don't mind at all, but apart from that... For the upper police officers you used the English terms, so maybe it's best to keep everything in one style. Also, what I noticed from fanworks is that Japanese fans tend to call Kaiba "shachou", which means "head of a company", "president of a company" or also just "boss". This might fit a little better, if you don't want to use "CEO". :3
    Okay, I kind of like Ai or rather Jounouchi's exchanges with her. But the way she's threatening him makes me think of the Red Queen in Resident Evil, ahaha. 8D And wow, it's so great to see her developing like that, and with a reason as well. Lovely!
    Oh, the solid wall and isn't one at all! Did you get the idea from the movie Labyrinth? It sure makes me think of it, haha. Images of Kaiba as the Goblin Kind in tights... uh...
    Aw, I like the explanation of Seto's Ka and Ba and his situation just being different from Atemu's. Basically I believe the same thing and I don't like if people just carelessly make Seto have a yami as well etc. It might be nice for a oneshot with no further background, but for a story that takes what cannon offers seriously, this is an important thought imo.
    “One thing’s for sure, this ain’t no ordinary pyramid.”
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  • From KeiMaxwell on July 26, 2012
    Due to the length of this chapter, some of my comment is written as I read, so I don't miss anyting. :D
    I have to say, when I started reading this story this morning, I was immediately hooked. I like how you didn't simply tell the readers about Jounouchi's job, but that you started of showing us solving one of his cases. Having the different character's stories of the past year revealed slowly as the main plot goes on is very interesting.
    I like how you portray Jou as having grown up also through how he acts. He still blows up from time to time, which is just in his nature, but he can stay calm a lot more than he used to. Kaiba is also pretty much in character, I think, which is not at all easy to maintain.
    "It was my fault for expecting competency."
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  • From ANON - Freehy on July 26, 2012
    OMG that was AMAZING, I was hooked- I seriously haven't slept at all tonight. Can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - Tasha on July 26, 2012
    So this is a series and this is the first. I like it. Poor Joey and Mai. Poor Seto. How could Yugi do that to Seto? I can't wait to read the next part.
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  • From JOler on July 25, 2012
    Glomp...gush...squeeeeee

    Oh, um, great fic ... Poor kisara ... Need to get her a wig and a furry kitty coat for when she stresses ... LOL

    Love how Jou finds people but too bad about his kid.
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