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By : Reppa

From ANON - BallroomBlitz on September 25, 2003
Once again a lovely chapter to a lovely story. And for future referance, riding butt ass naked on a motorcycle is called breezy ridin', and He's right's it's loads of fun!! ^_^ well anyways hope to see more from u soon!!
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From ANON - terry on September 24, 2003
:Tears of joy: Thank you! Thank you so much for the update? Can there be more Kaiba punishment? Please? I hope he gets majorly busted and beaten! Can't wait til next update. Thank you again!
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From ANON - Kat on September 24, 2003
I like your story but I hate Jou now. I'm tempted to just jump into your story and kick several different types of shit out out him! >_
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From ANON - SailorAurora on September 24, 2003
That was pretty good. keep it up. ^.^ Hmm, I wonder what is gonna happen with the parents..
and I hope Seto and Jou warm up to each other, I think they'd be perfect for each other. :)
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From ANON - Nemi, yes THE NEMI on September 08, 2003
To those who sugest that Seto is OOC by not getting cloaths and runnin wou would agree he is slight OOC for not thinking of it, though he's had his life flipped topsy turvy you know? But why do I not consider it OOC that he doesn't run? Simple, if he does everything that he had endured at Jou's hands up to that point would have been worthless. He cannot, in his state force Jou to give him the card, even with proof of contract breach.

Why? Seto doesn't trust people, so he won't go to Yami who's "job" it is to enforce this thing. (look at the Batsu games, getting one of Yami's is because A) you lied B) Cheated C) Stole D) threatened/hurt his other's friends E) Looked at Yugi funny or worse *sarcasm people!*) And even if he did he would have had to reveal dirty secrets as it were. So Seto is dicked here becuase there's nothing forcing Jou to give it to him later.

Also, I have, on some reflection, figured out WHY this fic gets on some people's nerves. It's Noncon pretending to be con, or at least it was. Rape, in fiction, can be hot, S&M rape as well. Someone getting raped and liking it is bad writing and is not hot, in fact it's disturbing. Rape doesn't turn you into a whimpering spineless thing, but it can, espically under the circumstances Seto is under, nameepeaepeated rape and torture. Don't glamorit oit or make it any less evil than it is. Rapn ben be done well, and done well it leaves deep emotional scaring that IS NOT fixed by a quick fuck with your true love/savior.

Touch will be a bad thing, crowds will be a bad thing, being alone with people will be a bad thing. Trust will be a long time in coming.

Who am I to say this? Well I'm a psyc major in college, but even when I was in highschool I would have said the same thing. No I've never been raped, praise all things, but I did write a rape fic, and it was reviewed by a friend who, at the time I did not know, was a rape victim, and she praised it, that's my athority to say this. (here's the link BTW, it's Megaman X yaoi fic: http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=324246 )

I agree with Sae that rape seems likely and that Seto will hate jou. But Seto isn't the type to cry, even at this, at leats not at first, he's go cold and shivering and not move. Weep perhaps, tears of shame and humiliation, if Jou isn't out to hurt him physically.

And I vote Jou get the same treatment from Yami that Seto did. Aka getting part of his soul removed like what happened to Seto that one time.

--Nemi
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From ANON - Sae on September 06, 2003
Sorry for reviewing... again, but I have more to say. XD and I'm alive again, yay!

Uber Seme Jou Supporters: Grrrr

Ahem, I think both The Dragon and Nemi have points. I believe Seto is in character mostly, unlike The Dragon, but yes.. after all this... I don't think he really cares about being a CEO or naked. Now that his arms are locked up, and he knows Yami will help him, he should just get away. The also sad part about my agreeing with Dragon, is that I really don't see romance at this point. Seto is going to just hate Jou forever~! ;_; Which is WORSE than what Jou is doing to Seto! ~poutpout~

I still really like this fic, and this is my opinion! Please don't tat ast as a flame! >.> I'm just saying, Jou needs to seriously realize what he's doing to poor Seto, maybe just rape him again (That's evil still though!) and like Seto should start crying and suddenly Jou realizes what a creep he's being. He can still do the S&M thing.. but geeze... >.> He needs to learn the magic of Lite S&M ^~

THIS IS NOT A FLAME! o.o

Uber Seme Jou Supporters: ~kill Sae... again~
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From ANON - Sae on September 06, 2003
First of all, I want to get it clear that I love how you write, you do very well with keeping the characters IC (specially poor Seto), and the whole idea of Seto-neko is the best thing ever. Now, I just have to say, while I like S&M, donyou you think Jou is being the biggest jerk ever? Nonconsensual relationships is my thing, but eventually I like the two to actually sorta like each other... Seto is already cold enough, without having to now be all messed up with being beaten like that and stuff. He's already sorta messed up... ~pout~ Jou needs to learn that stupid saying, 'You catch more bees with honey than vinegar' or whatever. And on second thought... so does Seto. >.>;; Yes, I know you warned us about it being loaded with stuff like S&M and all, but I think there should be sweet stuff eventually too. Yaoi and S&M is hot, but so is at the end, actual love or something. Maybe Seto can escape, then be like "I'm just going to move away so I never see you again you stupid jerk" and Jou can be like "Fuck that! There's no way-" and then they can ride off into the sunset and-

Uber Seme Jou Supporters: ~kill Sae~
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From ANON - DR on August 20, 2003
IIIII LOVE THIS!!! PLEASE REVIEW SOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!
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From ANON - Kelsey on August 19, 2003
heh heh.....nothin like an uke Seto tied up,and at...*sob* Jounichi's disposal!I wish it was Yami,but oh well.

Seto going to crazy with all this torture.HA!

HAHAHA!

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From ANON - Nemi, again on August 16, 2003
Back again, I usually wait about an hour thinking about how I would mail you, but lasviewview I did it on inst, st, so I need to add on and clarify.

First, I don't think Seto would go catatonic, not without more abuse at least. I think he would go into deep day dreaming. We've all done it, when you don't even realize it until your buddy has to push you to snap you out of it. And when you do snap out of it you have trouble recallign just exactly you were thinking about.

Rape is bound to be more and more obviously rape as it's going to be hard to slip him pills now.

I'm worried more and more about Seto, Sex hasn't made a good impression on him. It takes away his ability to reason. It takes away his power of choice. It humiliates him. It hurts him. And it's just getting worse and worse.

A bit of Randomness: I keep assoiciating Seto with Aldonza from Man of La Mancha (The play of Don Quixote) Specifically her two major songs which are more than a little bitter. "It's all the Same" which has lyrics that include:

"Onir oir of arms is like another"
"I'll go with you or your brother"
"I do not like you or your brother"

And Aldonza, where she's just saying she's a whore and how tired she is.

if you want the lyrics if you want them.

A Poem that might, correction, would appeal to Seto, by Marianne Moore:

-O to Be a Dragon-

If I, like Solomon, ...
could have my wish--

my wish...O to be a dragon.
a symbol of the power of Heaven--of silkworm
size or immence; at times invisible.
Felicitous phenomenon!

Not the power, but being small, invisible, so no one can hurt him.

Seto's pride is having power, being dignified. But before that, before he had that pride he had the pride of preserverance, that "I'm here, I'm still here." The fact that he lasts, and though that he wins.

*hugs Seto*

Nemi

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From ANON - The Dragon on August 14, 2003
*shakes head sadly* Sorry to say, I think this is as close to a flame as I'm even going to get, which is such a sad thing. In my view, this stroy is entirely unreasonable. While the persona you've created for Seto Kaiba is close to the real thing at times(those times are very rare), he is entirely out of character. He's a corporate CEO, and this is the best you can do for him? Pah! Should this actually be Seto Kaiba in this fanfiction of yours, he'd be fighting back more then a 'paranoid cat'. He knows Jou breached the contract, why didn't he walk out right then and there? He knows he was drugged, raped, and now beaten? Least of all, he'd have stolen a pair of pants and slipped out in the middle of the night! And seriously, since your not making him smart enough to even think of these possibilities, after all that's happened, he should be staying as far away as possible from rabid Jou. Not /just/ eyeing him wearily! Jeez! Plus, just in case you were planning it, I cannot see any sort of romance blossoming in the relationship at all. Where I in Seto's place, I'd hate Jou with every fibre of my being for all of eternity.
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From on August 13, 2003
I'm sorry. I really enjoyed your story to a degree. but I can't read it anymore.
I am by no means flaming you. I am a strong believer against flaming.
I just can't read this without getting so upset to the point of tears.
But you are a very good writer. Plz continue writing. Talent such as yours shouldn't be wasted.
I appologize if i have offened you in anyway.
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From ANON - YayferJOUSETO on August 12, 2003
Ugh...this story has really gone downhill. There is no love in this situation, dammit!

Jou hasn't even admitted he loves Seto. It's just the whole 'foxy slave' thing. It's like all Seto is there for is so Jou can have something to stick his penis in.

I'm not saying you're a bad writer, because you're really not. This plot just....reeks, is all.
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From ANON - Ashley on August 12, 2003
-Blinking repeatedly.- Oh, Katsuya-chan...Come here for a minute...-Mumbling under her breath.- I'm so going to rip him to shreds...

Very sadistic and evil Jounouchi Katsuya. Damnit, Seto! Why can't Seto just rip Jounouchi into shreds and then throw him out the window like he did with Gozubaro?!
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From ANON - Hannah on August 11, 2003
personnally I think that you should give it a happy ending yeah I really do hate Jou in this story and he is normally my fav charachter!! i will give it 3 stars though I like it but I really want something good to happen to Kaihe mhe may be mean to Jou but he doesn't deserve this)
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