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Reviews for Sips of Blood

By : Ryoko

From Zombiehunterarual09 on August 02, 2019
I've read this story before many years ago!! I finally decided to come back to AFF and I just had to read your story again!!!! I don't care what everyone says but I love seeing all my favorite Yugioh character's as sex slaves!!! Love reading about yugi being Yami no Marik personal slave!!! Its been so many years for you to not finish this story!!! If you ever decided to come back and finish your story please do!!!! I really want to see Seto/Yugi again!!! I do wanna see Honda and Otogi spend some time with Yugi!!! And Yami too!!

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From hsosborne on February 15, 2008
OMG this is great, I can't wait til the next chapter! When you do add to this, do you think that you could send me an email with the web address to let me know? the email is PotionsPet@tidni.com
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From tinkletimekelly on February 03, 2008
CONTINUEPLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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From ANON - Raven on December 28, 2005
First of all u rule 4 listinig to a perfect circle!!!!!!! they rock and i really like this story!!!!!!!! please update soon!!!! oh and i really liked the yugi and malik action. it TURNED ME ON!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - shave the whales on October 15, 2005
to make it less confusing (you probably already know this) yami no malik is usually referred to as merik or marik or however people have been spelling it lately. i'm a huge fan of your story and looking forward to pegasus/yugi. i love pegasus! yeah, so i hope the next chapter is soon...pretty please?
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From ANON - saphii on October 15, 2005
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From ANON - Alyssa on October 15, 2005
Continue!!!! hurry!!! This story is awesome keep up the work :-)
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From ANON - DarkGatomon on August 10, 2005
First off, this story would have been massively helped by an AU warning. By just saying "Yami no Malik captures Yugi," it sounds like it's set in the normal universe with Yami no Yugi somehow having been disabled. As it is, though, with the twisted relationships and personalities in this fic (the slave girl in the beginning being terrified of speaking on front of Isis, for instance, seems massively out of character for Isis), it certainly isn't anything like canon. Truth be told, instead of being curious why Yami Yugi isn't helping Yugi at this point, I'd almost be surprised if Yami even *knew* Yugi or cared about him at all, with how twisted everyone else in this fic is.

It's also hard to say what your characterization of Yugi is, and how justifiable it is. If he's supposed to be broken, you didn't do a very good job making that transition. He "broke" in the first chapter if that's the case, which would make him incredibly, incredibly weak. And while Yugi is many things -- naive, incompetent, and foolish (though not stupid), for instance -- weakness of will under pain isn't one of his greatest flaws. He isn't perfect, but he's better than THAT. What that implies, then, is that he WANTS to be a sex slave, which I suppose is technically fine, but doesn't seem to draw upon anything specific to Yu-Gi-Oh!. Yugi gives no indication of that kind of desire in the series, so that makes this essentially an original story, not a fanfiction, especially once you throw in how little relation the other characters bear to their true selves. Appearance alone does not a fanfiction make.

Also, what's up with Yugi falling in love with everyone? Has he just gone that crazy? I mean, even if you said his crushes on the other slaves were just desperate gratitude for the (relative) kindness, he was *relieved* to see his master by the beginning of chapter two. Relieved? That his captor, who had brutally raped him and allowed him no release, and then *tied him to the bed overnight* was there? Oh, yes, it was *merely* Yami no Malik -- because it could really have been so much worse! I don't think so.

I could go on and on about how implausible this fic is -- how does Yami no Malik have so much money that he can afford to support a dozen people, at least, in a mansion, with none of them seeming to do any outside work at all? Where is he that this kind of thing is unnoticed, where does he find the people to capture that aren't noticed being gone, and where does he even find the other masters? If it's a PWP, label it as such and let it stand as such. If you're going to toss plot into it, though, make it plausible. This isn't.

I write this review because you have repeatedly mentioned that you have a flamer, and doing that makes an author practically invincible. When someone is being flamed, people naturally support them and encourage them, because that's such an outrageous thing to do. However, that means that honest criticism is often thrown aside, and so that's what this is. That it and use it as you like; my responsibility lies solely in giving you the truth as I see it.
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From ANON - Kira on August 05, 2005
This is such a good fic!! Keep up the great work! I LOVE this fic! Never expected Yugi to be in the middle of all of this... I shall review the most recently chapter as soon as I read it... but.. until then... Great job!
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From ANON - MB_Kitty_Cat on June 15, 2005
I love your work!
I can't get enough of it, and I can barley wait for more!

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From ANON - Red Dragon Of Egypt on May 09, 2005
RD: oh by all means Ryoko keep up the great work and if Malik Girl gives you a hard time u just send her over to me and me and my beloved dragond Hyozanryu REBD and Veeshan would more then happy to welcome her amoung my special guests hehe and you'll be happy to know that from several other stories ive learned not to bash an author for just simply writing what they feel and that i should take it out on those that are supposed to deal with that kind of thing so to make my point on the chappie pegasas has his way with yugi lets just say ill return the favor same for bakura cuz as much as i like that yami cuz i love all the yamis and hikaris to death i will not see yugi most of all hurt wich reminds me *punches bakura in the face sending him flying into a wall* THAT FOR MAKING A MOCKERY OF MALIK KURA hehe see case in point i didnt hurt your feelings did eye and the only thing i on him i damaged *jerks her head towards that dazed bakura* is his ego wich will heal all to soon and same will happen to pegas if i catch him hurting yugi ryou or malik cuz trust me ill fight claws and fangs to keep the hikaris safe trust me same for the yamis except maybe not as harshly cuz lets face those three can take care of themselves QUITE well oh and on small thing if in any of ur upcomming chapters u happen to involve yami in the means of hurting/humiliating him in ways that i do not approve of (cuz no offense but it seems u lean more towards in Mariks favor) just warn me ahead of time ok cuz amoung all the yami hikari pairings im most fond of yugi and yami so i might get angry at you again if i were to see that said kinda chapter and i dont want to do that to u cuz like i said before its just how u want to write it and thats fine just warn me is all ok so i can skip it thank u and again keep up the great work and update soon JA NE ^__^ heh and sry for the long review i know i did it again hehe
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From ANON - italiana on January 07, 2005
wow, it's beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love marikXyugi and malik is a good slave!!!!!!!! but yami? i am italian! my english is so so.... can you finish this story?
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From ANON - Lizzy on August 14, 2003
Dude, you really like Yugi torture don't you? Well, you're not alone I do too. Good fic. Very nicely done. Looking forward to the next chappie!
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From ANON - Red Dragon Of Egypt on September 12, 2004
RD:well i liked that chappy oh and could u be as so kind as to tell me when your going to do pegs/yugi that way ill just skip over the part i dont like ez and when is yami going to make his grand entrance i mean i know he and marik arent exactly lovey dovey with each other and even getting them just to smile at one another with no smirking involed is as ez breathing several thousand feet underwater without any sub or oxytanks but still he probably had his fare share of exp with slaves in the past so he does no a few things in that dept and i know this is going to sound weird but i just think it would be cool if yugi gets a visit from the egyptian god cards u know just to see how pegsy marik and bakura would react knowing little yugis got the big boys watching his back hehehe call me crazy but i just like the thought of those three powerful monsters watching out for there young master hehe i saw it on the yugioh movie when they cut cut off from yugi they tried to get to him all three of them tried to get to him smashing into the pyramid of light it be neat to see them do something like that just once then id be very happy well keep up the superp job Ryoko hope to read more of your fine work TTFN TA TA FOR NOW ^___^
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From ANON - dime on July 15, 2004
I'm sorry to be so critical, i don't have any problem with any kind of fanfiction and you are a very talented writer. However i found your story to monosylabic in the way that all they ever did was fuck and do slave things, the story didn't go anywhere and you seemed to put yugi into it to easily. i mean he was ment to be all innocend tnd then nealy strait away without any real punishment he became obideant i would hope that you could re-write this and dont take this the wrong way every good writer has to face some cructructive crittisism and i dont meane to imply that you are in any way a bad writer.
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