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From FallenAngel on June 19, 2008
Lmao, ok I haven't read this chapter yet but I had to comment on you Angsty Goth Emo Teen Poetry A/N. That was hilarious, esp since I have some of that. Every time I read it my first thought is ,"What the hell was wrong with me?" It's so funny, anyways. I really like the story so far and honestly don't have much in the way of concrit being as it's all pretty good on spelling and the like. Looking forward to finishing it, at least what there is up of it thus far. ^^
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From zombiebait86 on June 18, 2008
T-T you were gone forever! meanie XD
J-chan
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From LittleBlackBox on June 17, 2008
I think I've read this before... do you have an account on Fanfiction? I didn't read chapter 11 though, that's new. Hurray for developments that don't end in character death!

Love the entire story so far; I like how Bakura and Ryou switch personalities. In terms of character development this is THE BEST plot I've seen explain things fully for the- for lack of better words- 'change of heart' Bakura gets. I like your attention to Ryou's character, he often seems to get stuck in the perpetual 'victim' catagory so in most other stories when Bakura 'changes' I can't help but feel as if I'm envisioning the fantasy of a battered wife.

Anyway, your story is absolutely kickass, and I can't wait for the next chapter. I believe there might have been some promise of Lemon pie?~ >3
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From ANON - punk_llama on April 26, 2008
Ha ha! Yeah you little shit (term of endearment)! That was the last thing I was expecting! I love it, and keep up the good work!
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From SapphireFenix on April 03, 2008
OMG!!!! YOUR FIANCE'S WORDS R THE SAME WORDS I'M ABOUT TO REITERATE.....WHAT THA SHIT!!!!? wow this was mighty intense. very nice story. i must say this is amazing. it's too bad you don't update all that much. this is an amazing story. and ryou is just fuckin crazy. like god damn, mothafucka has lost his damn marbles!! i still luv him though. i also like the fact that you didn't make the whole story so cliche and typical 'ryou forgives bakura immediatly after 4 years of abuse because he loves him so much'. i think people forget the fact that after abuse, u need a while to heal and the healing process can be quite...crazy. i feel sorry for bakura though. i would like to say that he deserved it but, he has come to terms with what he has done and he knows that he was in the wrong. but besides that, i really like this story and i hope you update more often. and if you ever feel sad, jus e-mail me and i'll give "75 ways to order a pizza" and "30 things to do in an exam when you're gonna fail it anyways" so that way, you'll laugh and feel better.
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From ANON - Anonymous on March 30, 2008
I really like your story. I swear I felt like crying when all that stuff happened to Ryou. I hope you update this story, because contrary to what you say, this is a good story.
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From ANON - Anonymous on February 29, 2008
I just found and read your story. It's pretty good, better than good! I had to stop myself several times from bursting into tears while reading your story. I hope you update this story soon. I can't wait to read more!
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From sglily on December 03, 2007
Hey Love!

I'm very happy that you have not forgotten this story! I have to say that the parts that you have added past what you had sent me originally... like eons ago now!... were a big surprise! But, I'm getting ahead of myself.

I think you did a nice job of showing Ryou's "loss of light" and the level of distrust that he holds for Bakura. Bakura's attempts to be nice and to make amends were rather comical, if not a little sad - especially since all were much too late to make a difference. The scene where Bakura plays Ryou and then crushes him with the "I hate your fucking guts" routine was brilliantly executed. One could feel Ryou's heart shattering into a million tiny pieces as a result of Bakura's cruelty. Interesting that Bakura had kept that slip of paper with Ryou's wish on it all along...

Ryou turned out rather fiesty in your story, able to defend himself, and totally sick of Bakura's crap. Ryou wielding a knife and doing so skillfully was a nice twist. Unfortunately, Bakura was on the wrong end of the pointy blade... and while kissing, in an attempt to show his sincerity, no less.

The hospital scene was pivotal. What was it exactly that Bakura did to "release" Ryou? The part that I was most surprised at was when Ryou walked away from Bakura's hospital room, he kept going... four years later... wow.

And Ryou has grown up and found himself - good for him but sad, too, that it, as in life in general, had worked out the way it did. Ideally, Bakura would have been the love of his life, his one and only, but it seemed liked Ryou had put Bakura in his past to stay there until he was ready to deal with his dark.

The reunion between light and dark wasn't as awkward as I would have thought it would be. Perhaps the cliche would have been if Bakura had fallen all apart but it seems like the dark one has kept it together - relatively speaking. And Bakura a PI? Too funny! I like what you've done with your story and I look forward to reading more! What is Bakura going to do to convince his light of his love? Hmmm...
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From Softwelshrain on December 03, 2007
There's one thing that is annoying me about this story, and that's you beating yourself up. Stop it! I don't write (haven't since my college days which are long past) because I don't have the time or the imagination. Anything I think of has been done before! But I will take the time to review, and beta if anyone should ask. So - anyone that does write and does it well enough to grab my attention gets my praise and admiration because they can (and do) commit themselves and do what I can't.
I did start to read this story a way back, so I started from the beginning again and read it through to the end. It is nicely written, and I'm glad (cheered even!) that Ryou didn't just change his mind at the first kiss - it does take a lot, lot more than that to be convinced that a leopard has changed his spots, particularly after 4 years or so of sadistic, violent abuse. Yes, Ryou got his own back, but strangely he never reported Bakura, possibly because of the threat of the "bind"?. And neither did Bakura split on Ryou after being punctured a couple of times... This is realistic, and once released from the so-called "bind" Ryou did what anyone else in a violent relationship should do and has the strength to do it - he left. However, I see a large "but" on the horizon (and I don't mean the ass kind!!!). Keep going, it's good.
And all hail to sglily!!!!!
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From ANON - ZeldaFitz on May 27, 2007
Forgive me for being confused -- Aren't chapters 5 & 6 a repeat of chapter 4? I do love this fic, by the way. :)
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From hsosborne on February 16, 2007
Can't wait til the next chap! When you add to this do you think you can send me an email with the web address to let me know? My email is PotionsPet@tidni.com.
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From ANON - T-sama on February 13, 2007
It was cool. Yay. Update soon ^^
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From sglily on February 08, 2007
So cruel you are! Making Bakura realize what he was missing when it is quite possiblity too late. Ryou acting like Bakura, or even colder than Bakura, is just... well... wrong... on so many levels. Ryou breaks down and craves Bakura's touch. It was bittersweet; however, since Ryou, as much as he may want to, just can't trust Bakura. And who can blame him? Your story takes yet another step in a completely different direction. Ryou has a few days to be himself... to relax and not to have to constantly be on his guard and yet... as much as he may have liked the idea of it, as much as he may have liked the first day or two of peace and (too much) quiet, he began to realize that he missed his other half. That is a very scary revelation. When Bakura returned and asked for help with the groceries, I was sort of shocked by Ryou's reaction. My he has turned into the little Ice Prince, hasn't he? The note he left behind for Bakura on the inedible mock "poisonous" meal was rather cruel, too. Ryou = Bakura Lite, I'm tellin' ya! Great story, love! Keep it up!
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From setoswifey on February 07, 2007
This chapter made me think of my aunt's cooking...her and Bakura are in the same boat. It was funny though.
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From ANON - Suicide_Solution on February 07, 2007
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!! WANT MORE!!!!! PLEASE!!!!
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