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Reviews for Thanksgiving?

By : KitsuneFoxfire
  • From YamiKuro on May 11, 2009
    MOREMORE! I love it! PLease write more!

    Love,
    Kuro
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  • From xkuramaxhieix on May 08, 2009
    I like the idea so far, but the last bit where Joey's dad comes home was rushed. It was kind of like you dropped the bomb too fast. What do I mean you ask?

    Example of what you did:

    Joey's dad walked into the home, drunk and hungry. He walked to the kitchen to get food and found none. Drunk and angry, he woke Joey up. "Boy. Where's the food?" Joey said, "There is none." Joey's dad got angry. Joey shrunk in fear on his bed "Please don't sir."

    What I mean:

    A few hours later that night, Joey's dad, Jounouchi Senior, walked into the apartment he shared with his son. He was drunk as always and hungry. Staggering over to the kitchen in a drunken stupor, he rifled through the fridge and cupboards, looking for food, only to find none. Angry, he stumbled over to his son's room and stumbled over to Joey's bed. Shaking Joey fiercely, he snarled, his drunk presence permeating the air "Where's my food boy?" Joey looked frightened. He mumbled in fear "You spent all the money from my job delivering newspapers, on beer." "What!" Joey's father roared. He snarled in rage "Then get another job boy! Yer bein stupid! Even I coulda told ya that!" Joey cowered in his bed, raising his hands above his head to protect him self and said "I can't, I don't have the time dad." Joey's father raised back his fist in a drunken rage. Joey's father snarled and said "I'll teach you to back talk me!" Joey whimpered "Please dad, don't!" Jounouchi Senior's fist crashed down on Joey and all Joey knew was darkness.
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  • From BarbaraAnnClay on May 07, 2009
    I love this story.. Someone has to get Joey out of there before that bastard really does something that just might kill him. I love how you've got Seto down to a tee, he really needs a good screw and then maybe he's attitude just might change. Please update when you can. I really want to find out what happens next...
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