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Reviews for The Daydream That Felt Real

By : cherylgebo
  • From Hoshisaki on May 25, 2010
    Well now... that... was.. fast?
    First off, I liked your plot/idea... Though...
    I'm, sorry to say that, but your fic really lacks of atmosphere. Reading it makes me feel like being rushed through the story. It started out slow, but suddenly there was that little lemon scene (I really liked the bondage idea and stuff) and in the next minute it's all over! Like watching a film while skipping forward. See what I mean? Can't imagine you wanted that effect?
    Maybe try taking you time writing your stories, espec. lemons. You'll get the hang of it! ^.~
    That's my opinion.
    I skipped through some of your other fic, and from what I saw... Maybe that rushing thing is just your style of writing - as long as you're ok with that ^^
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