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Reviews for Washroom

By : JJVO
  • From ANON - Felidae on March 23, 2013
    Sheesh, this is..just bad. I came across this ficlet as part of an MST and thought it was a hoax. To see that it actually exists and that you even did a sequel..Please, just go back to fourth grade and revise your grammar. Please. Even if not for us readers, then at least for yourself.
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  • From ANON - SxJ critic on November 25, 2006
    I know this was a roleplay and all, but this didn't make sense whatsoever. It was completely random and you had plenty of mistakes! Normally you edit it to make the story flow. If you take your roleplay and convert it into a story you have to make the story flow. Not just have something like:

    1: Jou attack Kaiba with his lips
    2:Kaiba moaned.
    1: Jou smirked as he kiss kaiba's lips.

    You want to make sure it makes sense so that it turns out like:

    Jou attacked Kaiba with his lips, kissing Kaiba with a ferocity he'd never shown anyone before. Kaiba moaned into the kiss, loving the feeling of Joey's lips against his own. "Mutt!" Kaiba groaned out in anticipation of what was to come. Jou smirked as he kissed Kaiba's lips, happy to have been able to tame the dragon that was Kaiba.


    You don't want it to seem out of place. When I read your story I felt out of place. The idea was good, but still, improvements could have been made to make the story flow.

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  • From ANON - Angel\'s Night on March 18, 2004
    Gahhhh! This one's even worse than your other shit! Why did I even bother giving you a second chance?!? You really need to pay attention in English class, you know the one where they teach you to read and spell and use your brain?
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  • From ANON - makuleeet on October 21, 2003
    cool! thumbs up!
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  • From ANON - Nikita on October 18, 2003
    Are you stopping the fic there????? You better not! I want some yaoi sex! It's a great PWP so far, keep going, at least give one full blown lemon, please? *gives puppy dog eyes*
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  • From ANON - Leaf Zelindor on July 13, 2003
    you have to be updating after this! you can't leave it like that! -lol- but i like!!! ~Leaf~
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  • From ANON - AngelicMouseGirl on July 08, 2003
    MMmmmmm So yummy....So hot! ARIGATO! MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!! Kudasai??! ^_^ ARIGATO! Jaaa!
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  • From ANON - The Mystical Dragon on July 07, 2003
    HAI!!!! ohhh my goodnesss.... you boys bring that chocolate syrup to MAMA!!!
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  • From ANON - bakurasgirl on July 07, 2003
    mmm....chocolate sauce and Seto......horray faoi aoi goodies!
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  • From ANON - snowbird on July 06, 2003
    This is awsome!
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  • From ANON - Neko Jounouchi aka Jams on July 06, 2003
    Jams: You can't LEAVE ite the that!!!
    Seto Plushie: Oh yes they can!
    Neko Jounouchi: LEMON!!! LEMON!!! LEMON!!!
    Seto Plushie: ::smacks Neko Jounochi's head:: No dammit!! No lemons!!
    Neko Jounouchi: ::chucks a lemon at Seto Plushie's head:: I want a lemon you big stud you!! XD
    Seto Plushie: O_____o
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  • From ANON - dreamer on July 05, 2003
    Sequeal, yes please!!! All your fics are amazing, i love them!!!! My favorite pairing is seto/jou and you write them so well.
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  • From ANON - Seto_Joeylover on July 03, 2003
    yes, continute please! i'm not very fond of gay storys, but this one caught my attention as i was looking over this website. i like it, and i want you to continue! PLEASE!
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  • From ANON - AngelicMouseGirl on June 24, 2003
    YEAH! That was great! ^_^ Please have more chappies of this! Please! ^_______^ Jou/Seto smut is good fun... Lemony fun my favorite kind. ^-^ MORE! PLEASE! Arigato! Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - Dragondreamer Yami Dragon on June 19, 2003
    YD: Awwww...you just gotta continue!
    DD: Mmm...y..I ..I wanna see seme Jou!
    YD: Me too! *shudders* So good.
    DD: I love how he just came at Seto like that...no mercy.
    YD: Mmmm...Setopop!
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