rate_review Reviews

It wasn't too bad, I liked it, it just had a lot of errors and seemed to be a tad rushed. If you spend more time editing out the errors, it would be a lot better. I'd love to see the sequel.

I enjoyed this a lot! Your first lemon? Great job! Looking forward to reading more from you.
JJ

Nice job for a first lemon! And yes, you left the ending wide open for a seme!Jou sequel there, lol, so it's your own fault if people ask you for one! Like me! -bats eyelashes- Pwetty pwease?

*fans self* For a first try, this was...WOO!

Not bad at all for a first time lemon.... : )

Was this supposed to be a PWP? If not, then disregard what I have to say: You should of developed the plot a tad bit more. Like make Kaiba make Joey do something else BEFORE they had sex....

Very nicely done.
Keep on Writin'
Reviewer #34321

W O O O H O O !!! *stands, claps and attempts to whistle* ENCORE! ENCORE! Me wuved it sooo much! and u finally posted! way to go!!! lol lookin foward to more! it ro!!! !!!

Jams: I want a sequel!!!!
Neko Jounouchi: Me too!!! Me too!!!!
Seto Plushie: Of course you do perverts....
Neko Jounouchi: I wanna use the whips and chains on him next time!!! XD
Seto Plushie: Over my dead body!!!
Neko Jounouchi: EEWW!!! What the hell do you think I am?!?! Only Bakura is THAT sick!!!
Bakura Action Doll: Careful what you say, Pup, or you might witness it first handeko eko Jounouchi: O.O Uuuuuh.... Sequel please? ::hides behind Jams::

Now my Yami is asleep so be nice! Wow, that was some hot lemon at the ending!!! Nice going with the stories. Please continue 2 update your fanfics and i can't wait 2 see what happens next!!! Continue!!!

Aura: Hear ye, hear ye, the Honorable Lady Aura Maxwell will now give a review!
Yami Usagi: -sweatdrop- Milady... what was that for?
Aura: Just having fun. Anyways. Lookit Katie, uploading her first yaoi lemon to the internet, awww... Yes, yes, this was nice, it's good to see you continuing the mutt theme. As long as it's not pimp-Mokuba.
Yami Usagi: ...That mental image alone will give me nightmares for the rest of my years...
Aura: Get Kaito to comfort you. Anyways. Very good job with the lemon sequence! It was satisfactory. But somehow I have a feeling you just pieced together one of your RPs with your "friend" and put in different names. But that's okay! Cuz it was good. Yes yes.
Yami Usagi: You are such a pervert, milady...
Aura: Shaddap. Go screw your boyfriend, yaoi boy.
Yami Usagi: ....
A.
Aura: And if you want to do the Seme Jou fic, go for it! I can guarentee you two readers!
Yami Usagi: Two?!
Aura: Yes, two. Who knows, you might get some ideas.
Yami Usagi: ........

WOW, t-that was like WOW!!!!! OMG, i'm usually not this speechless...nope!
GREAT job! Sequel, hmm...OF COURSE SEQUEL seme JOU, I cna taste...I mean See it now mmm...sequel!!!!!!!!!
LATER...