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February 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good start. If you still need a beta, let me know. Please keep going!
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I do like chapter 3; I hope that you write more and soon, but let us what for the lemon for a compele more chapters. Its geat so far just don't stop in the middle of your story ok. I want to read this story all the way to the end.
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December 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the way you started your story. telling about the Mallenum Items and what they can do. its a good start I hope you do up date and soon.
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December 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good start!!!!
I'd like to read more of this story; and it'd be very nice if you continued it.
One suggestion, though: try putting spaces between paragraphs. It'll look better
that way, and it will be easier to read ;)
Ja Ne!
I'd like to read more of this story; and it'd be very nice if you continued it.
One suggestion, though: try putting spaces between paragraphs. It'll look better
that way, and it will be easier to read ;)
Ja Ne!