rate_review Reviews

there are a few problems, but other then that, it was good

sorry if the caps are annoying, it was the way my program made it, i forgot to change it when i copied and pasted. and sorry if the story had to much of this or that, it WAS my first time, and it only me me about 30 minutes to do. i wasnt planning it, i was just doing a favor for a friend of a friend. ^_~ i wasnt planning on doing another chapter either, but i might do another lez fic, or maybe even a yaoi when i get time, i have got 3 fan fics i am working on right now, so i am pretty busy... :/

Mmm *licks lips and kisses Mai and Isis plushies*.. You write well for a first-time yuri writer, though you could do well with less captions on words that don't need them. Mm, those two are sexy bitches, aren't they? You want tips on writing yuri you better look at my fic, Harpie Lady Sisters. *gives author/authoress a wink* Make another chapter, onegai?

Dark Elf ~ Yuri Queen