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September 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
G'day! I'm a new member to this site and your story caught my eye, and may I say it looks quite promising! It's not often I read fanfics where another character shows an interest in Alexis Rhodes, I love a good romance story if it's got a good plot and it's not to Mary-Sue. From what I read in the first chapter it looks like you have this well thought out, from Trevor, his duel deck and his first meeting with Alexis. It's good to see relationships slowly happen and if it has ups and downs then it's all the more realistic and all the better!
From what I read Ol' Trevor MIGHT have a bit of luck with Alexis becasue as we who have watched Yugioh GX know Alexis is a smart girl who is not easily taken in by romantic nonsense. I'll keep reading on to see where this goes okay? You should feel honoured as this is the FIRST story on this site I have reviewed, I hope I inspire you to keep writing, as you said it's just for fun! On to the next chapter!
PS: For the disclaimer all you need is to say at the start of each chapter is something like: "I don't own Yugioh GX it belongs to Konami (Or who ever comes up with it) all I own is Trevor and any other character I make" Just thought I'd point that out as I write fanfics of my own too, not here but elsewhere. And keep an eye on the spelling. ^_~
PPS: LOVE Trevor's Deck is it real or did you make it up yourself for the story?
From what I read Ol' Trevor MIGHT have a bit of luck with Alexis becasue as we who have watched Yugioh GX know Alexis is a smart girl who is not easily taken in by romantic nonsense. I'll keep reading on to see where this goes okay? You should feel honoured as this is the FIRST story on this site I have reviewed, I hope I inspire you to keep writing, as you said it's just for fun! On to the next chapter!
PS: For the disclaimer all you need is to say at the start of each chapter is something like: "I don't own Yugioh GX it belongs to Konami (Or who ever comes up with it) all I own is Trevor and any other character I make" Just thought I'd point that out as I write fanfics of my own too, not here but elsewhere. And keep an eye on the spelling. ^_~
PPS: LOVE Trevor's Deck is it real or did you make it up yourself for the story?
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September 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I see in this second chapter that Trevor has met Alexis' friends AND he's going to duel her. I can't think of a better way to get aquainted then by showing off their dueling skills! It's good to see you list all of Alexis' deck, you've done your homework! The more I read this the more I get the impression Trevor might get to be the type of guy Alexis needs. Jaden just wants to duel and have a good time, Bastion's just obsessed with the SCIENCE of dueling, Chazz...well he's a dreamer when it comes to his reputation and his 'relationship' with Alexis (if he even has one), I'd go on but you get my drift.
Great work on this, I'll read on and see how Trevor goes in his duel!
Great work on this, I'll read on and see how Trevor goes in his duel!