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schedule July 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
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schedule July 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
May I start by saying it is a very good story. However there seemed to be a lot of grammar issues through out the story that made it harder to get through. I understand that English may not be your first language because that is the case for many authors. I feel you would benefit from a beta reader. Even your summary had some grammar problems that may turn many readers off from your story. That is a shame if that is the case. The story is off to a wonderful start and has great potential if you fix your grammar usage. So please try and find some one to edit your story. I think you will find you get more readers and more great reviews.

best of luck and keep writing
schedule July 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
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