rate_review Reviews

This is a wonderfully written, tearful story. You've done an excellent job with the genre you've chosen. I'm quite impressed and it's definitely going on my recs list.

yup liked it indeedie! next please! ^_^ hehe, I'll hope yami send
those three to the shadow realm!!!

Yuji: That was quick!!
Yumi: Maybe YamiNoYugi just didn't want to get annoyed. I know I don't either
Yuji: Yami!! My Yami!! Thanks for updated so quickly!! It was soooooo um- Yugi's cute!! At least when he is not throwing up
Yumi: Hikari!! SHUT UP WITH THE CUTE!!!
Yuji: YamiNoYugi is CUTE!
Yumi: You don't know what YamiNoYugi looks like
Yuji: YamiNoYugi cute no qionsions ask
Yumi: You think everything is cute
Yuji: No you not very cute Heh-Heh
Yumi: Excuse me!! I'm perfectly fine with the way I look!!
Yuji: Right update this quickly and I'll annoy my Yami for a week not you! My Yami!
Yumi: No don't annoy me with that
Yuji: *Plays joke and puts Yumi and a baby outfit* HaHaHaHaHaHaHaHaHaHaHa!! You gotta laugh!
Yumi: I'm not a baby!! *Gets out of the baby outfit* Just update I'll just hurt my Hikari for now until you do
Yuji: AHHHHHHHHH Please update!! HELP ME! *Yumi comes with a bat and swings it at Yuji's head but misses*

I rather like the concept, could use a little help here and there but nothing beyond my own nitpicking skills at work. Your reviewer 'Fuzzy Button' seems to have forgotten the point behind AFF.net...this is a place for disturbing material..don't like it, don't read it. They were arrogant and pressumed too much about their own ability to have even tried being constructive. Do continue.

Yuji: I like it! I like it! I like it! It's so-
Yumi: Don't!
Yuji: -CUTE!!
Yumi: *Sigh* Why me? Why me? Hikari no more with the cute comments
Yuji: No! Oh yeah I like this story but there's one thing I don't get was Yugi doing all those things to him b/c he thought he couldn't get Yami or something?
Yumi: I don't know! I'm not YamiNoYugi!! Let the person update!
Yuji: Ok Update please or I'll annoy my Yami and you!
Yumi: NOOO! Don't annoy me!!

pls, o pls!continue!holy flaming ra!i need more!im hooked!buhbyez!*e-mail me wen u pdate!thankies!8

That was great! Please continue this soon I really want to know what happens next!!

Wow. Off to a great start. More please, and the sooner the better : )

Err...It was okay, but it you want my honest opinion, it was pretty lame.. I'm sorry I don't mean to be mean, but I'm not really impressed at all. That sickness is not something you such even consider to write about, it's not fun and not a good subject to people who had that sickness or something like that. If you want an honest opinion I git 3it 3/10 you can just say I'm envous of your writing, but come on, I blow your "talent" away... We all know that... So, you should really consider taking the time to write deeper and more meaningful.. You know make your fics have a certain depth only writing can describle.... But I have to give you credit, this seems to be your first attempt at writing something that actually has a little depth.. Not just some dumb story that has a horrible writing style and message. You can delete this, but if you do it shows how much the truth really gets to you... And this IS true, many people won't tell it like it is, like I do, but it is true... The sadest part is you're like 16,17 right? I rest my case.... I'll check back to see if you deleted this, I just want to see how serious of a writer you actually are, if you can take a little truth about your writing or not..

The truth hurts, right?

*smack* Bad Yugi! making Yami cry like that!

Great story :D more more more!