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Reviews for My Zombie Lover

By : Djintheevil
  • From Moonbunny87 on May 20, 2011
    Creepy, very very creepy. The first chapter is pretty short and leaves me with a number of questions, ones Malik seems to share, such as where Did the other get a body? Why one so deteriorated? And who dug the grave in the first place? I admit, I'm confused. Also if I may suggest a few things. Try slowing down the pace of whats happening, add a little more detail. Why is Malik on the island, how long ago was the battle and how old is he now? What's he look like and what emotion or memory brought him here? What's he wearing, and how does the destroyed island look after all this time or how he found out there was anything left of the island in the first place. Lead your readers (and Malik) around and show them things they aren't expecting and haven't seen before if you can. Writing isn't easy and takes practice, and I look forward to seeing how your writing changes and develops. You're off to a good start though, I admit you creeped me out enough that I'm curious to see what happens next. Invoking emotions, negative or positive is something not all writers can do. Keep writing.
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