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No offense, I'm sure this would be a great story. As soon as you learn to use a spell checker. And Proper Grammar. Oh and Might I recommend less Punctuations, like Commas, trade some of those Commas for some Sense . You have a space bar use it. I doubt it died. I'm sure if you actually spent time on this story, it would be much better. But alas, it's sucking nuts becuase I keep tripping over your mistakes. Crim, ased, a majority of others I can't even begin to comprehend. What is this the new writing technique? Make everyone go dizzy from Typo Syndrome? anyways, fix it before the local riffers find it . . . Actually this just riffs its self.

Well, I like it A LOT! They are my fav.!!!
The story has a really good start, and a good potential in becoming a GREAT story...!
Keep, it up and UPDATE SOON...
LATER...